I've started writing a fantasy novel technically a fanfiction since it's based on an existing universe and I need some input on tying together the core aspects of the different religions. The source I'm basing it on mentions very little of the religious lore which leaves me a lot of creative freedom, though it also tells enough that the concept of it greatly appealed to me.
Now I'm not asking for help regarding staying true to canon (it's also not a goal I'm pursuing with this novel), rather I need help at making it sound believable and interesting.
>Read the attached pictures first for the rest to make sense
The core idea is that the two brother's conflict is what keeps this universe together and I want to present them as either neutral, different kinds of evil or even evil vs good, depending on the reader. But in-universe I want to portray them as one side of the extreme, either the saviour or destroyer of mankind, depending on which religious follower you listen to.
But there's also a third brother which chooses to not engage the fight between his kin, since he understands that there needs to be a balance. However I don't want it to be too on the nose that I (as the author) am of the same opinion as him, I'd rather lead the reader to their own conclusion even if it's not necessarily the same as mine.
So I have two texts that I'll present without the context of the rest of the story (I'm only about 5,300 words deep). But I'll shortly mention that upon seeing the title of the book I write about in the second picture, the MC recalls the creation myth he was told by his masters and retells it for the purpose of the reader in the first image.
The first one is a creation mythos written from the perspective of an 'Innos' worshipper. My worry is that I present 'Adanos' in a too kind of a light and that I'm showing my bias for how I interpret the power balance. I try to amend this in the main characters thoughts/third person story telling that comes afterwards, but I feel like if it's meant to be written from the perspective of an 'Innos' worshipper, it would be slightly harsher on 'Adanos'. At the same time I can't leave him out of the creation mythPost too long. Click here to view the full text.