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>Ditch clinging to some video game setting and write your own shit. You can do it, I believe in you. And even if you can't it will still be better than embellishing the story of a video game. As bonus, proper original work would have a scarce but not zero chance of getting proper critique, which should be the holy grail of any starting writer these days.
It's based on the universe. The game(s) might as well not take place at all for the purpose of my story and if it did I'd concede that it would be utterly autistic. I'd personally prefer to call it 'nods' or 'references' rather than 'fanfiction' despite that term being accurate.
Though I've considered the idea of simply replacing the names (and I might in the future) in order to fully make it my own, I still enjoy referencing the universe if for no other reason than to entertain myself.
>As for the text, barfing exposition about the cosmology of the setting is something pretty much no writer can get away with. Only special kind of autists read Silmarillion, and I bet most of even them had to gather all their will in order to power through the erudamned Ainulindale. Unless in very small doses, that shit is boring even if you are already invested in the setting.
Yeah I've worried about the length of the flat exposition that I'm presenting (especially the first piece and then having them follow each other) and maybe I've been blinded by my own fascination of the universe's mythos. Perhaps a whole page dedicated to it is too much irregardless of context but I feel like I left a lot without explanation up until this point. The MC is an apprentice in a monastery and I feel that starting to explain the mythos is important in order to not frustrate the reader. There's very little (or none at all) exposition preceding or following this.
Any suggestions on how I can make it more readable whilst still getting the lore across?
>Writing radically different but still sensible religions in a setting that has actual real supernatural and divinity in it is already a challenge, but when you have demonstrable dualism with the other side being literally the Devil, you are in for some heavy mental gymnastics in order to justify anyone sane worshipping it instead of the God of Good.
I don't intend to write 'Beliar' as an actual evil being, I just want him to come across as that from the point of view of the people that follow 'Innos'.
In my own mind they're both 'evil', one too authoritarian and one too selfish. But neither expressively evil and together they inadvertently create the very balance that man requires in order to live.
>In some Abrahamic thought the Advesary is seen as a necessary part of God's creation that tests the faithful, but only a nutter would start worshipping it. "Our god tries to make everything awful for everyone, so we may become stronk (for some vague purpose)" always sounds really like a parody religion about existentialism. Blissful stasis without strife, or a state akin to it, has been the goal/reward of almost all widespread religious movements, and by going against that a religious group would rightly be considered madmen in a world that hasn't become high on nihilism. Nobody worships the fucking Ahriman.
The way I imagined to solve this would be to push for the extremes of both. 'Innos' would stand for an extreme and unopposed hierarchical order which suffocates the wishes of almost everyone whilst 'Beliar' is the essence of chaos and promotes complete individualism even to the detriment of the world and society itself.
I greatly appreciate your reply anon.