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File: 1434715857331.jpg (360.28 KB, 2114x1631, 302:233, 1258389711024.jpg)

b7fa1e  No.386[Reply]

So is there going to be a zine or what?

I'll write a short story for it.

If it's full of faggot ass poetry count me out.

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b7fa1e  No.409

>>407

Yeah start a thread

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b7fa1e  No.416

It would be interesting to make 1/2 sheet zines of single stories. My town has a few of pic related, and I'd like to contribute some material.

Stuff that wouldn't be outright labeled "Nazi" or anything. More short children's stories with traditional tones, and truth presented in a reader-friendly way.

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b7fa1e  No.417

File: 1435263336359.jpg (7.05 KB, 151x90, 151:90, little free library.jpg)

>>416

>1/2

*1 or 2

forgot pic

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b7fa1e  No.418

File: 1435263396713.jpg (166.89 KB, 753x450, 251:150, 3.jpg)

>>417

dunno why that was pic for ants

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b7fa1e  No.422

>>386

>Poetry

>faggot ass

Pick one. Also, read real poetry, poetry with meter and not postmodernist free verse garbage. Poetry is (was) a form higher than prose (which didn't exist until, IIRC, eighteen or nineteen hundred). To contemn/shun poetry is to contemn/shun your heritage, faggot.

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1d7216  No.341[Reply]

I've written a piece trying to explain the problems of mass immigration in terms of football clubs. Aimed at left wingers and football fans in particular.

Criticism is welcome

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1d7216  No.353

>>352

Nice.

Be sure to update Brit/pol/ with this as I'm pretty forgetful.

Hope it takes off.

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1d7216  No.354

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1d7216  No.355

>>354

Looks good.

Had any takers?

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1d7216  No.359

You write quite eloquently and it flows well. I feel your points are quite solid, and even as a non-Briton I could pick up most of what you were saying.

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1d7216  No.415

>>354

There's a spelling error in the article, towards the beginning. "whether or note"

It is a pretty good article, though

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fe5bc7  No.411[Reply]

Hey guys, I'm going to be releasing a book via PDFs here on 8ch, and wanted to know what would be the best way to release it.

The official page is 8ch.net/tab/

(will never do anything more "official" than this)

>I will be uploading the first 5 pilot chapters and will release one new chapter every week. Weeks that have a short chapter will have more than one chapter released.

Any suggestions?

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fe5bc7  No.412

File: 1434752559677.gif (1.71 MB, 500x500, 1:1, 1433864755020.gif)

How about releasing it via PDF on 8chan, and you can upload the first 5 pilot chapters then one every week after that.

You could even release more than one chapter, if the chapter that week is short.

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fe5bc7  No.413

If you are going to publish it for an ebook don't post it here until it is published.

I'm doing the same for my novella.

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fe5bc7  No.414

>>411

you plan on keeping the same trip for the whole time?

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d90e97  No.382[Reply]

First three chapters of my neocon novella:

http://pastebin.com/LtuVxJFY

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d90e97  No.383

>pepe

lol

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File: 1434708877083.pdf (160.31 KB, Austrian-Keynesian Dialect….pdf)

34b9b1  No.381[Reply]

Or,

Framing Economic Thought: Global Control by Monetary Means

Originally

Austrian-Keynesian Dialectic: Economics as Psyops, taken from a thread on /32/ here

>>>/32/1459

This anon delved into the reasoning behind economic theory and the popularly touted thoughts commonly known to any student of commerce. It becomes clear via their reasoning that a glaring hole is left in each adversarial school of thought: the purpose and place of usury in the economic system. Anon goes on to detail the shortcomings of the varying economic "options" presented to the common man, and how, in the absence of a rational and moral stance on usury, he is manipulated to believe in the false worth of an economic system doomed to inevitable decay at the expense of his creditors.

A captivating and essential read for every man's understanding of debt, economic theory, and the criminal scum who to this day hold the world at large.

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34b9b1  No.421

File: 1436077241215.jpg (1.26 MB, 1764x875, 252:125, Zimbabwe_$100_trillion_200….jpg)

Now my head has cancer.

Thanks OP.

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081857  No.285[Reply]

ITT: We post some of our favorite posts on /pol/

And board owner, there needs to be an apostrophe in the name of the board you fucking faggot
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081857  No.370

File: 1433641044422.jpg (365.78 KB, 1402x775, 1402:775, generationalshift.jpg)

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081857  No.371

File: 1433641155798.png (79.79 KB, 1784x641, 1784:641, basedjap.png)

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081857  No.376

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Every time I come to the top of the page, I'm forced down to the bottom. What the fuck?

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081857  No.378

>>285

>capping your own posts

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081857  No.379

>>378

Just realised that, kek

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a844d0  No.267[Reply]

Anyone interested in writing movie scripts or story boards? This could be scripts written for real actors (dystopian diverse future, what if the Nazis had won? Or showing today's progressive society tongue in cheek)

Pic not related.

Or be written for a compiled YouTube video with a script.

I am sure there could be 8chan collaboration to produce videos
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a844d0  No.271

I am a director/cinematographer and I would love to be of help in a /pol/ production. However it would be rather difficult since I'm in a small European country where there are pretty much zero /pol/acks.
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a844d0  No.273

Well, I have the ideas, but I've no experience in the industry or in writing scripts at all. I have the interest for it, however.

I can write normal novel-style writing well though.
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a844d0  No.279

>>267
I'm majoring in Film/Video, so I've had some experience with scriptwriting. Plus, friends and I used to make home videos all the time.
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a844d0  No.375

>>279

>>279

Same with me, but I have writer's block right now. There are so many concepts in my head, but I can't get them written down.

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a844d0  No.377

>>273

Same for me. Tried writing a script once and it didn't turn out so great.

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c78748  No.358[Reply]

Hello /pen/! I'm reading pic related and even though I'm not too far in, I've been thinking about some things, specifically things that come about in Part 1 Section 2, "The Big Secret of Dealing With People".

In the book, the author comments that "The desire for a feeling of importance is one of the chief distinguishing differences between mankind and animals." You'll have no argument from me on that point. However, my primary question is dealing with application and utilization of that point. I know that with many of the people I have dealt with, that they would see the attempt at flattery and piling on of "importance" as a sham and might distrust the individual who tried to do as much.

Therefore, my questions are as follows:

1. Are the majority of people receptive to this type of attention/compliment/flattery?

2. How is one able to tell if an individual might be receptive to such forms of flattery? Repeated encounters? Using a few and gauging reaction? Both? Something else?

3. The book does not talk about individuals with Autism/Aspergers. Does anyone have experience with people on the spectrum and how these sorts of tactics affect those people?

4. Are folks in certain professions more susceptible to these types of flattery? I would imagine that an artist may be more receptive as compared to a given physicist due to (what I think, anyway) a person with a different type of mindset gravitating towards these professions.

Any thoughts? Comments? Thanks.

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c78748  No.360

>3. The book does not talk about individuals with Autism/Aspergers. Does anyone have experience with people on the spectrum and how these sorts of tactics affect those people?

kek'd

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c78748  No.363

Read further, your questions are getting answered in the book.

It's not about giving poor compliments, flattery is exactly the way not to go (as you'll read later), but rather commenting on something you can truly, without inflation, see value in or appreciate - something that the other person is able to do, did, has, you'll read that if you read further.

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c78748  No.372

I would argue the following:

1)Yes, but to different degrees in different ways. A cynic or a person prone to paranoia would of course see a strong attempt as deliberate and disingenuous, while on the other hand, an egoist such as a salesman would be more likely to not notice the calculated nature of the attempt or not care.

2)On this, I would say appearance is a good first gauge. Perhaps not as refined a gauge as repeated encounters, or getting to know them a bit, but useful none the less.

3)We're basically talking about Spock on this one. They're going to want to feel that their logic is sound.

4)I would submit that there is a difference between professions insomuch as there is a difference of personality type between professions. Salesmen, politicians, preachers, etc, are in general insecure people and want very much to be liked and admired as people while doctors, soldiers, tradesmen, etc, in general want their skill or accomplishments to be admired.

My two cents on the topic.

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b22d67  No.112[Reply]

What do you think of my short story /pol/? Anything I need to change before entering it to every single short story competition on the web?

http://pastebin.com/hZ5f4Kpt
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b22d67  No.299

File: 1427977558586.jpg (42 KB, 800x553, 800:553, beach.jpg)

>>151

This really is fantastic, more people should be reading this. This is an intelligent way to troll people, as the first half of the story appeals to everyopne including normies, and the rest is pure unadulterated trolling
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b22d67  No.306

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>>296
I take it you've never read first person reflective narrative before have you?
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b22d67  No.308

I made two stories like this. Much shorter, though.

http://pastebin.com/j8D34Liq
http://pastebin.com/f1hbGHVZ
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b22d67  No.335

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b22d67  No.357

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0564cc  No.338[Reply]

For seven years our empires favourite son

has turned from the light of our sovereign goals

two hundred years work has become undone

the forces are mighty under traitor control

half of the legions

third of the guard

uncounted regions

no person unscarred

a deadly path home

no resolution

the void they roam

no absolution

at Saturn a monstrous fleet

our brothers surrender their lives

and suffer certain defeat

by the thousands they died

the fateful news relayed

the traitors are coming

their fleet is barely delayed

no victory forthcoming

from above Emperor's speech

defend the palace

of our lord's fury teach

hearts formed of malice

from orbit canons reach

and scar the holy surface

end this madness the subjects beseech

of all the cruelty this is the furthest

the forces of greed have corrupted their souls

the enemy has landed

and the virtues they used to extol

now lie abandoned

the Primarchs they stand and with us hold the line

side by side Astartes and man

sworn by oath, loyalty enshrined

with our bodies we form a dam

fifty-five days

no ammo, no food

commanders survey

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0564cc  No.339

>>338

>Some 40k poetry

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a6e348  No.48[Reply]

PDF made from the thread that got lots of attention on /gamergate/ and /po/. Interesting stuff. Definitely thought-provoking, even if you don't agree with the conclusions.

I'd like to see an expanded commentary on this with additional links to further reading on some of the subjects the OP alludes to.

Here is the post, with a few edits for clarification and one of the best comments in the /pol/ thread included; along with the sources.

IF we ever have a journal or anything like that I think we should include this article along with some analysis and further links provided by other anons.
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a6e348  No.49

File: 1423380319824.pdf (778.4 KB, geopolitics_censorship_gam….pdf)

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a6e348  No.337

This is a pretty good PDF.

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7e422e  No.322[Reply]

Nzolo, whats your say on my newest poetry?

Feedback on my poem?

Genuine

Give me the sweet green exception
of your genuine red affection
not the chalked up, blacked out alienation
far below our crowded white sunny sky sensation
where planes fly and our infatuation never dies
which where way above in the dark abyss
across the ocean of time, love is just a myth
I have to say hell no, fuck yes,
fathom the aesthetics from which you are blessed
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7e422e  No.326

>>322
I would have to hear it, I can't get any rhythm from reading it.

Besides that, and I mean this with respect, what the fuck are you on about? It reads like a schizophrenic's manifesto.
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7e422e  No.327

>>326
Does it really? How so?
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7e422e  No.328

>>324
Such as what?
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7e422e  No.329

>>322
I like it, anon.
But try to carve out a bit more of a rhythm.
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7e422e  No.331

>>327
My understanding of the poem is this. It's a confused profession of some bastard of adoration and lust for some other - never defined nor articulated, like the first stanza zooming about in its caprice. All of this urge directed towards some person that we are assured is 'genuine' and worthy of the 'best' treatment, I presume, despite that treatment not being the most noble in the first place.

Now, am I off the mark, or is this poem really a Frankenstein's monster of traditional, virtuous love and misguided modern "love"? The lack of discernible rhythm helps to exude that vibe of a fickle narrator. This is why it reads like a schizo's manifesto, or perhaps more strikingly, the midnight text messages I receive from my junkie friends. It's all over the place, like a budding, awkward teenage writer's first poem for his secret crush.

It shows great promise, but it is simply unrefined and immature in its structure and motive. Practise and read more, learn more about the ways of the world, and make sure that your next inspiration is more of a tour de force, and not like this tour de farce.
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4afd2a  No.320[Reply]

Hey, /pen/, im trying to write a sci-fi story based in the far future. I dont really want to go into what the story is about, but i plan to have it heavily based around internet messages and chats.

Normally when i write, its poetry (and pretty shitty free verse at that), and i have never written a full story before. How the hall do i make the online dialogue nice, and not super shitty? Any advice would be greatly appreciated.
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4afd2a  No.321

Write something and we will tell you what you can do to improve it.
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1fcf31  No.313[Reply]

Greetings!

I have something to share with you.
Would you mind giving this a quick glance and tell me what you think?
I hope creating a new thread for this was acceptable.

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Dear Allies,

After World War I, you nurtured the young Soviet Union and tried to internally poison and destroy post-WWI-Germany, which ultimatively led to the events of World War II. When one single man, tried to relieve the world of the Jewish plague. To finally restore order and peace to all lesser men around the globe, which were and will now forever be, thanks to you, pawns in the games of the Jews, you decided to stand by Great Britannia and her Empire of lies, instead of doing what was good and what was righteous. You then proceeded to side with Stalin and destroy Nazi Germany, the last bastion of hope for the Occident. Roosevelt led by greed and fear of losing influence over South-East Asia put an embargo of steel and oil and Japan, leaving them no other option, but to join the war and tricking the American citizens into yet supporting another war. After war, you came to realize where you had done wrong. The Soviets had occupied Europe and the Jew gleefully rubbed their hands, sensing the great wealth that could be gained, from simply supporting both sides with weapons. Yet, did you learn? When the Iron Curtain fell, instead of offering a helping hand to the crushed Russians and establishing lasting peace, you smugly looked the other way, hurting their pride even more. Russia extending its claws again, is solely your fault. Instead of seeing the threat that China became to be, even more so today, you nurtured a deeply corrupted and perverted nation, traded with them, built them up. Well, you see were that led you to. Lets face it, by killing this man you doomed us all. Picture very related. Do not call it a grave, it is the future you chose. You are welcome.

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1fcf31  No.315

>>314
This is not perfect yet, I agree.
But "the allies" is the biggest generic term I could come up with, addressing every country not being Germany or sided with Germany.
Simply writing America wouldnt have been correct.
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1fcf31  No.316

>>315
You misunderstand my main point: what on earth is the purpose of this? To dance over the finer points of geopolitical and economic history so that you could steal some moral high ground? Are you going to mail this into the oval office?
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1fcf31  No.317

>>316
>You misunderstand my main point: what on earth is the purpose of this? To dance over the finer points of geopolitical and economic history so that you could steal some moral high ground? Are you going to mail this into the oval office?

That is an excellent idea!
The purpose of this text though, is simply to startle people and give me replies so we can work it trough.
That worked perfectly on pol, I consider this thing to be a success.
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1fcf31  No.318

>>317
Let me get this straight. You're attention whoring?
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1fcf31  No.319

>>318
Right, making people think a little is attention whoring.
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e468fd  No.276[Reply]

Posted this on /pol/, first time writing poetry
pls no bully


the chaos of warring tribes
Came one great enemy to unitize
Each tribe held fast each tribe held firm
As great people weathered the storm
Of Roman armies marching forth
To face the might of a united north.
The Goth, German, Gaul, and Celt
Each of their blades the Roman felt
And as Europe's might descended forth
Great Rome fell before the North.

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e468fd  No.277

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>>276
Really good for a first poem. Keep it up.
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e468fd  No.297

Pretty good.

One critique is that you're inconsistent. You've got the rhyme down, but not the meter. That's okay, not every poem needs to be in meter. I believe it's good to study meter and grammar, and unless you really know what you're doing it's usually better to stick with tradition. Just think: how many postmodern poems were written in meter? Not very many. They reject what has proven itself to work very well.

>Years passed and kingdoms fell

>The years and ages passed away
>Many people still today

This, along with your use of fell, north, etc., is very repetitious. It's a bit of a crutch to start a stanza based in a new time with "years passed" or "days turned to months to years" that sort of thing.

Repetition can be used well but if it isn't it just makes the poem seem, well, not poetic, and can be monotonous. It can be hard to find ways to describe things without naming it directly, but it's important have that ability. Don't be overly vague though, that's probably worse haha.

Overall I agree with the cat above me: breddy gud 5/5. Practice, study meter, read poetry, and you can get better.
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e468fd  No.298

>>297

Oh and if it wasn't clear you need to write poetry too. That's really the most important part to getting better: developing your technical ability.

That is one thing I believe to be fundamentally wrong with postmodernism: that little value is placed on technical skill, and more on "how it makes you feeeel"; whether it can shock the reader, or make the reader happy. Art is more than a means to pleasure. It isn't just an expression of one man's emotions. I don't know what it is, but I know it's meant to be beautiful.
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e468fd  No.311

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