/monster/ - The Last Bastion of Romance

>>386361

Female paladin that is getting a slowburn monsterization? Like, she defeats the dragons and that unleashes like a little explosion of energy that gets past her armor's enchantments against it. Eventually she just ends up raping her squire and starting a lair of her own.

Just spitballing here, might actually write a story about that, because I like slowburn transformations.

>>386377

Bumping this idea

I need some mad comfy good feels

>>386393

Even if those are indeed real, I pray something like that never happens in a world of monstergirls. It shouldnt happen

>>386393

This would be less private contractor work, and more RWDS stuff. Not happy ending things.

>>386393

Glad this shit isnt real, he wrote pretty convincingly though

>>386421

>>386410

I thought it might have some decent hijinks potential. My bad, fellas.

>>386393

Jesus Christ that is vile

However, a sterilized version of this with mg squads retrieving their clients’ sons or prospective husbands from either their own domiciles or (in the case of rebellious sons) secret handholding clubs has some potential.

>>386488

The idea of a highly secretive club where tired husbands/boyfriends just hold hands or play patty-cake is hilarious to me.

>>386299

Bump with cross-posting from the Greentext Thread:

Superheroine bunnygirl falls in love with a not-so-villanous villian (Saturday Morning Cartoon style).

. https://pastebin.com/a8ukwH4a

I hope you like it, even though I could've done better in terms of Saturday Morning Cartoon atmosphere.

Oh yeah, I'd like to write an ending too, but which one do you like best?

Villain end: The Count Vice introduce his new Evil Partner in crime: Lethal Lazuli.

Hero end: Lago Lazuli teams up with the unexpected Count Valor.

Neutral end: MG North's newest super couple is a little odd. But they're madly in love, that's for sure.

I have an idea for a lion girl story with parts being them meeting in highschool and married life after. What's the best way to get to all points. Should I do a flashback to how they met or just do a time skip at a few points?

>>386625

Personally, I just think it's funny that there are entire secret societies dedicated to handholding because their waifus won't do it.

>>386737

As you didn't give much information, I'll just say in just a general sense you should keep a story chronological unless you have very good reason not to. Else you risk either confusing readers or pissing them off.

Any word on these two stories prompts from the previous thread?

>Dragon waifu's father was killed by a dude and she goes to kill said dude only to find he's survived by a son and has to decide how to deal with that situation.

and

>David Lynch style murder mystery with quirky townfolk and weird happenings in some small mountain town featuring some monstergirls.

>>386746

I was thinking something more along the lines of “Rebellious son runs away from arranged marriage with Demon to go desperately assert his freedom by holding a bunch of girls’ hands in Europe like a MANWHORE.”

Instead of being brainwashed into compliance upon return, he just gets raped into submission by his now-slightly-more-yandere-and-justifiably-so bride to be.

>>386766

I was kinda thinking something along the lines of "Rebellious son runs away from home in order to join a chaste temple in bumfuck nowhere" or boys getting radicalized by nearby palladin sects or something. Or actual kidnapping by isolated San Francisco-esque mini towns where the victims get stockholmed and force-fed soylent.

Just remembering the Transylvanna, and Most Wanted stories in hopes the writefags remember and continue the stories, or somebody else maybe takes inspiration.

https://pastebin.com/CJmpNTbr/

https://pastebin.com/PmMTK21h/

They seemed like good holiday times…

I wrote a story based around a homebrew version of MGE mixed with some of my own shit.

https://pastebin.com/3QRviKYr pls enjoy

>>387110

>local man BTFOs orgasm denial fetishists out of sheer rage

Based

>>387287

Someone watched Troy before writing this

Here's a short valentines day writefag involving a qt3.14 Jinko

https://pastebin.com/nxVgnyCS

Haven't finished any writefags a lot lately

>>387366

This is good shit, minisatan. I like how the jinko decided to take the gentler approach. And thanks to the mc for asking the real questions.

>>386393

not mg related but do you have more of those contractor stories? theyre entertaining as all fuck

>>387674

I remember one from the hellhole that was the old MGEwiki’s fanfic section. Plot was basically:

>local village is negotiating with nearby demon realm for trade

>one of the villagers at negotiations is an awkward farmer’s son

>Ren Xiongmao is one of the mg negotiators

>she starts flustering the farmboy, who can’t handle it and has to leave

>hijinx ensue and the village gets invaded by order and demon realm forces simultaneously

>Farmboy is lost in the confusion, found by the same Ren Xiongmao, and proactive dated

It’s probably lost in the ether somewhere, but it was one of the better stories in a sea of cringe.

>>387711

Only ones I know exist. Sorry, pal.

>>387761

>Getting pre-consent sexed in the middle of a battlezone

Ambassadors are truly next level

Do any of you have advice as how to be a writefag?

>>387769

Write. No seriously, just write. It may be utter trash, but you’ll get better and better at it with time. Write something, anything at least once a day

>>387768

>Is that what the feminists are calling it now.

Only when it's muds.

>>387769

>write

>proof-read at least once after you're done with it

>read stuff you like and try to analyze what makes you like it

>>387768

Also, sauce. IQDB didn't work.

>>387773

I only do this beause you understood I was joking. Remove spaces. Standard warnings apply.

http s://ww w.pixiv .net/member_illust.php?mode=m edium&illust_id=73302979

>>387774

Thanks.

Also, removing the https://www. is enough to remove the hyperlink, you can just post it like pixiv.net/member_illust.php?mode=medium&illust_id=73302979

>>386377

https://pastebin.com/SBg7pA8J

I made a first bit of writing on this idea, mostly introducing the squire and the knight. I'm currently keeping the fights between the paladin and the dragons vague, as they don't really matter.

What do you guys think, anything I should change?

>>387791

Nice! Though how do male harems work here, other than being in suspended animation for the daughters.

>>387792

>Though how do male harems work here

They don't.

Hey, do any of you guys buy those monster girl books on Amazon? Any of them worth it?

>>387794

I got them. They're worth getting into in my opinion.

>>387793

>>387792

They really don't. Dragons are kind of defaulting to worst girls in this, so you don't feel bad about them dying in large amounts. I'm planning on making Elloy, as an ex-paladin, more monogamic.

>>387769

read stories you enjoy to get a sense of "style" I like Brandon Sanderson books,(though he lately got bullied into accepting homos. I prefer his old school Mormon "nope" stance, but as far as I can tell he only has one homo in all of his books and he's a nobody character with no stake in anything and no POV)

I wrote a lot before I showed anyone my stories, because most of them are bad. You'll suck at first, but you need to get past that to get good. Also don't try for an epic fantasy as your first story. I mean you can, but you won't finish it, and it will discourage you. Write short stories first, 20 pages max. Just getting done with it will make you happy and you'll be more likely to start another one. Its easier to write six 10,000 word stories over one 60,000 word story

>>387795

which ones specifically? If any of you have one on there, shill it to me, and I might buy it

>>387798

Both encyclopedias. You'd get some updated art on Gargoyle and Red Oni and I like the translations a bit better than the web ones. There's also some lore if you're into that but if that's not enough you might wanna skip.

>>387799

oh, I have those. I meant the books written by fans. The novels.

>>387769

>>387772

on top of revising, don't immediately go back and revise something, let the story sit for a few days before you go back over it

that way your mind wont gloss over everything you just wrote since it's still fresh in your memory, you'll catch spelling/grammar mistakes easier doing that

>>386481

Its a good idea, its just… those were so horrific. So horrific in fact it makes professional kidnappers look like heroes

I swear I'm not dead you guys.

https://pastebin.com/1k5BtFEp

Also, I would have written and posted this a week ago, but some dumb shit happened at work which made me lose the motivation to write it for a few days, and by the time I got my motivation back, it was a few days before Valentine's Day and I didn't want to rush things.

>>387808

Now this was fucking QUALITY, m8. Keep it up.

>>386751

bumping for first one

>>386361

Out of all the yugioh cards you could have waifu'd, you chose a shitty level 8 vanilla tuner. For shame dude, for shame.

>>387366

C-Cute

>>387847

I came up with another story prompt that I'm sure /monster/ will hate. Basically, sometime in the mid to late 1800's there is a fellow who is a Van Helsing like character with the personality of One Punch Man's Sataima. He's been tasked by the church to rid the world of abominations and that's pretty much all he does 24/7. Essentially he's the reason why monstergirls don't exist in any capacity in our current universe. I had a whole montage in my mind of him traveling across the world and dispatching monstergirls of all kinds in a variety of gruesome ways with an aurora of callous indifference.

To cater to the /monster/ audience this would have to be a prelude of sorts since I don't think anyone would care that much for a story about a guy who only goes around killing monstergirls rather than loving them. To make it work, it would have to lead into some kind of ancestry gag wherein some distant offspring of monsters long since slain attempt to take revenge on the decendant that killed thier ancestors and it'd devovle into some comedy/harem antics of some sort I think.

Unlike the "you killed my father!" dragon lady prompt which would be more dramatic this would be more of an excuse for a gags and such. My humor is rather dark so I figure the prelude may be too uncomfortable for some to indulge in but I like the concept of dealing with uncomfortable situations laid at your feat by ancestors you never knew..

>>387948

I updated this little project of mine

https://pastebin.com/9gu74rfL

If any of you could give some feed back I would very much appreciate it.

>>388027

>Adolph Himmler

Pfff

I'm interested though, please continue.

>>388027

Regarding the setting, the guy has a car and driver's license but he's using a spear, and has no such thing as a gun, or a phone? Did he lose them?

Also, might wanna check the punctuation and pacing on some of the lines.

>>388027

welp, I wrote another update It takes a while to write doesn't it?

https://pastebin.com/9gu74rfL

>>388075

Thanks. I haven't edited the older parts yet but I've tried to have better grammar in this new one, by which I mean I looked up grammar and used the first thing I saw as a guide.

>>388074

I was looking for names that meant wolf and I saw 'adolf" and 'adolph'

>>388095

I think he assumed you put Hitler’s and Heinrich Himmler’s names together

>>388095

>Negro Vikings

Well that got really weird really quickly

>>388027

>Adolph Himmler

We must secure the existence of our waifus and a future for awoo children

>>388193

Danukis

>>388193

Kobolds

>>388193

Dragons, most likely. They give off an extreme amount of pride and are not afraid to be nationalistic. Also, most of them are white. I can see Hitler respecting other monsters as well. An example of another one is the titania. Also I can see him respecting most of the monsters from Zipangu, like the Ochimusha and Ryu as in real life, he respected the japanese.

>>388193

A Heil-Hound.

Or, on a more serious note, a Leanan Sidhe.

>>388193

I think Eva Braum would be an Angel for him. Though I now wonder what the other guys would have gotten

>>388303

eagle harpies

Another update. I think this is the larged update yet.

https://pastebin.com/9gu74rfL

>>388313

I am 100% confident that unless you write some corny bullshit to get out of that cliffhanger, you have written yourself into a corner.

That, or muhfuggen wizard is actually the MC.

>>388314

>you have written yourself into a corner.

Nuh-uh

>>388328

Do you play harpies in yugioh? Have you considered any other monster girl archtypes?

>>388294

*Adolf is hitting it from behind*

<"MY TRANSMISSION IS BROKEN!"

https://pastebin.com/nsRERK8s

Based on an idea I've had for a little while but couldn't find the motivation to put together until now

>>388390

king tiger girl when?

>>388390

>*Adolf is hitting it from behind*

>what’s a greentext

>>388411

Yeah! What the hell is green text??? They have nothing like this on Tumblr or Reddit. it's crazy!

>>388414

Ironic shitposting is still shitposting.

>>388404

Well that was not the direction I expected this to go

>>388418

He's not dead yet

Had an idea about big story about a anti-monster society getting screwed up when one of the daughters of their elites turns out to be a lilim daughter of the demon queen with her magic sealed. The event that reveals this and breaks the seal results in several conversions and at least one alping.

Lots of jealous Monster s writing stories here. I always see something like "boobs that would make a succubus jealous" or so and so thing would put a succubus to shame

>>388583

Especially since it's the cowgirls who have the mega-milkers

https://pastebin.com/2vEerc7k

Thoughts on my story? Leave feedback as needed.

>>388710

Pretty good. I hope you update soon.

>>388777

Pretty Human by Seafoam, I'm guessing: http://seafoam.pbworks.com/w/page/77839289/Pretty%20Human

>>388710

Interesting story, I'll be waiting for updates as well

>>388710

Some dialogue and words (like "traitor) repeat a bit too often, sometimes even in the same paragraph. The switch from first person to third person is also a tad weird but not bad.

>>388853

gay/10

>>388904

>>388905

Kinda the point. It's supposed to be shit shock humor.

https://pastebin.com/wPBG9EkT

In the previous thread someone asked for a dragon femdom story.

I wrote something back in that thread but I didn't know anymore where to go with that story so I decided to start again from scratch.

Feedback is always appreciated

>>386509

>>386625

anyone here happen to have the one pastebin about the veteran and the catgirl and chesire?

>>389351

This one?: https://pastebin.com/Q54Hm8YG

>>389390

>>389351

Holy shit I remember this author and their stories. All of them are so fucking good but they always end up not finished. Like the veteran one doesn’t reveal stuff about what happened to him and where his wife went. It’s like their good but there’s never a resolution, every story ends on a cliffhanger that by going by when the stories were made are never going to be finished and satisfied. Is there any other place where the author put their stories, somewhere they might have finished them?

Does anybody have a link to that story about an either hellhound or manticore pov that works in the mafia or something like that and buys a shota who is blind? I've been having a really hard time finding it.

Reading all these makes me want to try to write one up. But I've never posted a story before so it'd probably be trash.

>>389667

Do it. Write it down, then edit it to fix mistakes and inconsistencies.

>>389668

Well alright. I got an idea in my head I'll type it out when I get home. If I have the willpower I'll put it up on a pastebin.

Are there any good, preferably non-lewd stories involving a griffon?

Also, I recall reading a story a year, year and a half or so ago about a space junker that gets captured by pirates led by a hellhound; I believe it was posted directly to a thread, no pastebin, but I cannot for the life of me find it.

>>389710

There was a short story about a thief trying to steal from a griffon’s hoard, but I don’t have the pastebin bookmarked.

>>389710

>>389889

I had a moment of panic thinking I'd spelled griffin wrong multiple times in my story. Turns out it has multiple different spellings so we're both right.

I've posted my story a few different times across the write thread whenever I updated it. The previous thread should have the most up to date version. Ctrl+F griffin and you'll find it. I recommend the .pdf since that should have the most grammatical fixes and of course overall better presentation. If you've already read it, I hope you enjoyed it.

>>388710

stop teasing and update soon

>>388925

dead link.

>>390604

Honestly the story was crap so I killed it

I have this issue with writing where I want to write whatever I'm writing in one go. For college assignments and whatnot this works fine but for stories they just end up being rushed

>>390607

Buy her a drink obviously.

>>390607

Onis like whiskey too, yeah?

She better not be a jack-swilling pleb, though.

>>390607

If she is going to drug and rayp me she ought to be buying, though I guess since it's for her she's going to get strong and do it anyways

>>390608

I would like to see it resurrected

>>390771

>Bentou is just blocks of ice

Got a kek out of me, I like it.

That said, you gotta work on spacing whole paragraphs from each other. The end of the story where his sis gets decked had me a bit confused on who was being decked at first. You're well on your way anon, just watch out for random meme arrows and asterisks for actions.

>>390799

Thanks I'll take your advice to heart for sure. Just glad I got someone to chickle.

>>388781

good shit and cute

>>391046

Good, shit or cute? It can't be all three, Anon.

>>391219

Nice story. Kind of left me wanting more.

How about giving this a shot?

>>389756

>>389763

>>390771

Really good twist at the end, good characterization. You seem talented enough to make another chapter of this.

>>391219

I do think you cut short the stalking phase a bit short for us yandere fans. Have you perchance written other medusa fics in the past?

>>391272

sage fail…doh

>>391273

I have not written anything /monster/ related in the past. I've just been really into medusas recently.

>>391267

I really enjoyed it. Would definitely read more of it if you decide to put it up.

>>391272

Hey thanks bro. I'll see if I can't make a part two.

>>391284

Glad to hear it man, really. Alright when I get home from work today I'll put the rest of it up.

>>391219

Cute. I liked how the serpants played a major role.

>>391516

That gif got me good. I'll try to type up a bunch this weekend. Maybe after I'm done just finishing off the common route I'll put a poll up to see what girl's route we should go down first. God I wish I could draw I woulda made this an actual VN.

>>391357

Prettygud/10

I do hope you're going to write a part where Ona apologizes to Zasha because that was just straight-up bitchy

>>391646

Preesh man. We'll see, they do hate eachother. Maybe Bull will fix it maybe he wont. I doubt Ona's orc warrior pride would allow herself to say she's wrong after all.

>>391777

I voted Chelsea but deep down I want the Zasha route too…

Fuck, I want them all actually

>>391783

Don't sweat it man. I plan on doing them all, kind of like alternate time lines. If you guys like this stuff I don't mind to post all the ending as I finish each one's. I even have a secret one planned up. I'm real glad you liked it enough to vote though.

>>391777

Nice digits.

I voted. I'm looking forward to the next bit.

>>391794

Thanks man, you guys turn this from me making this for shits and giggles to something I actually want to try amd make good.

>>391786

Gorgon route? :^)

>>391777

To be honest I have no idea who to pick. Fuck you for writing too many likable characters. But seriously good job

>>391810

that obvious huh?

>>391812

Ha thanks man.

>>391777

Awesome stuff man, voted for the banshee, I'm a sucker for sad lonely girls.

>>391810

>>391840

I wonder how she we'll react to the (you), here's hoping she will spill her spaghetti HARD.

>>391910

me too

I have the beginning already thought out for that one but I wont spoil anything.

>>391777

Ah fuck I accidentally voted Cindy, recount 1 please

>>391917

Don't have an account. But I'll take a vote off Cindy on Friday and vote for who you want. Who did you want?

>>390608

if you think it is crap, and don't know how to fix it, our writing will not improve until you get feedback.

>>391777

MC is over the top, but in a fun way. why do i think that this will wind up more interesting than most MG VNs on patreon?

>>392022

I hope it'll live up to your expectations. I wish I could draw, I would have put it in VN format for everyone.

>>392081

Neato, thanks anon!

Could someone beta read this? I was told my series started from a boring place, so I thought this would be a better starting point.

https://pastebin.com/LuVXKine

>>392081

Nice job on your first sex scene, that was pretty good

>>392119

I was more asking how to tell the story better, but okay.

>>392119

lots of run-on sentences and awkeard sentence structure.

as an example, "I look at the picture on my nightstand looking back was my husband and I holding a trophy as the first cursed gun to ever win a match."

Would read a lot better if it were. "I looked over at the picture on my nightstand. Staring back at me was my husband and I holding a trophy. I was the first cursed gun to win a match."

but even that is kind of clunky. A bit more description and prose would go a long way.

"With a heavy sigh, I shifted in my bed, looking over at the picture on my nightstand. Staring back at me was my husband with a smiling face. And there I was, by his side as always holding a trophy. I was the first cursed gun to win a match."

Also, its just a general opinion of mine, but stay away from present-tense. That's really more for screenplays and scripts. Whenever I read it outside of those it just looks horribly unprofessional and reads awkwardly

>>392128

I can't edit my post, but there should be a comma after "always" in my last example. Also awkward is spelled wrong in the first sentence.

>>392081

>yes, yes I am

I like it.

Finally was convinced to write and post. Just a super short story about a guy and his kitsune GF.

https://pastebin.com/ejWFawQy

Any feedback or suggestions would be appreciated

>>392133

Sick story man. I'd definitely read any others you made. Got a laugh and a warm feeling. That's a goody.

I´d like to see a story with a "Going his Own Way" commentator getting proactively dated mid show.

>"ALL MAMONO ARE THOTS PRE SUFFRAGETTES!!! You think your waifu loves you? Wait until she gets voting rights! She´ll take you to Divorce Court faster than you can say "B… But my spirit mana…" "

>"Fools are falling head over heels for these bitches! They think "Finally, a woman with common sense! We don´t have to take our women´s rights, folks!", but´s that´s just the rub. They figured out the fastest way to strip a man from his resources a long time ago, and that´s chameleon… Wait, what´s that noise on my window? Hold on a sec…"

>>392156

Where's the pastebin, banchou-bro? You holding out on us?!

>>392470

w-what

>>392484

ok take your time… baka

>>392484

Life imitates art, or something like that. Just don't die!

>>392484

man, /monster/ is one crazy place.

Praying for you anon. Hope you get better soon

>>392484

Holy shit are you ok anon?

>>392495

>Writefag got shot by a nigger

Fucks sake niggers and kikes really are why we can't have nice things, even here.

>>392508

Well what did you expect?

>>392484

What caliber? I need to know for science.

>>392532

Its fine considering the circumstantial circumstances

>>392515

Not an arachne, but I've got an Ushi-Oni one by Ace: https://pastebin.com/NMyy5fiN/

>>392545

That was nice, thanks man.

>>392464

I'm enjoying it, and I want more matchmaking shenanigans.

I've seen quite a few monstergirl stories in my time but even so I've found the Sabbath, or just lolis in general, to be quite underrepresented. When they are featured it's usually in humorous one offs or as side characters to the greater story. Does anyone have any stories that feature them as the main romantic interest? Or is this just one of those things that just doesn't have a lot of demand?

Or option C: I get off my ass and write my own story.

>>392800

Why are loli monstergirls so underrepresented? Because they're lolis. Certain people get buttmad like crazy if you try and have a serious thread about them. They inevitably troll and call everyone pedos and cause the threads to spiral into shit slinging. You might be able to pull one off if you're very iron-fisted about shit posting and anti-pedo posting in the OP.

>>392802

>>392800

There's also the fact that lolis are niche in an already niche genre (monstergirls). So that means an even smaller potential audience, to begin with. You could probably mostly get around this if the story is especially well written.

>>392800

>>392802

For example:

I saw a Redcap appear in a CYOA story just recently, and someone started crying about it being a loli monstergirl instead of an adult-looking monstergirl variety.

>>392800

I got you fam: https://pastebin.com/nYAePkDg

shillin' my own work. Features loli Baphomet doctor healing a Dark Knight Anon.

>>392818

That was good stuff my man. Thanks for posting it.

>>392818

Oh I remember this, this is really good Anon and I hope you write more stories about the sabbath, because lolis are definitely underrepresented.

>>392786

actually good

>>392818

Much thanks for the story, anon!

>>392545

>>392562

Oh hey, that story. Man I haven't written anything but Wizardquest stuff in awhile, huh?

Let's see what it's in relation to-

>Gunshot wound

Holy fuck, glad to see you're okay tho. Only other medical related story I have the Code Wight, but I'm not certain it fits with what you're looking for. Get healed up soon, friendo.

>>392805

Which CYOA? I don't think I've had people cause a fuss about a loli character in one of those before…

>>392818

This thread is encouraged to shill, yo.

>>392818

Good shit mate, hope to read more from you.

>>392818

Also good shit. I was never much of a fan for lolis but this one tickled me in a way. Also damn you for now having a damn fascination on those damned smug goats!

>>393231

m8 why not make an account for all these?

>>393252

I have them saved elsewhere, but I can make an account to help other people keep track of my work.

>>393258

I honestly debated posting it in the first place, as it was just supposed to be a cute little thing and some practice before I get into the heavier shit in my main project.

I'll keep what you said in mind the next time I work on a shorter story.

>>393261

Don't worry about it, writing like we do here should be a hobby one does for fun.

You can concern yourself with top quality when you plan on publishing stories more seriously.

>>393263

I'm really just happy people actually read what I write! I can't get my friends to read my more serious writings which is pretty disheartening. Especially when you worked on it for like a year. /blogpost

>>393269

I see, you are a man of culture as well.

Have no fear, my set of rules is kinda loose as I'd write about a lot of weird shit, but I'd never writefag about: incest or underaged children. So yeah… /monster/ core values, no /d/ or /chaos/.

what ever happened to my boi bromont, haven't read his shit in years but I cant seem to track down his pastebin or whatevs

>>392786

The yandere subtones where left hanging

The mc just went with the flow with little resistance in my opinion.

But I liked nevertheless

Hello everyone. >>388238 here, two months on-and-off, I finally fucking conquered my laziness, and got that larger project of mine done. Time for some green-skinned-space-babe-babymaking!

https://pastebin.com/LuTAw03e

I don't care how bad any mistakes are or if things are inconsistent, I thank Mama Reitia that I actually finished this project this time!

>>393489

get a targus bluetooth keyboard, it's much better for phone typing.

>that vid

yes.

>>393487

It was pretty good anon. My only complaint is that this nihilus character seemed overly vague, as well as their reasons for being afraid of him and russet leaving. Their reaction when the video hit the news seemed over the top because we didn’t know why he had so many powerful enemies. We knew he had served in the navy for a brief while and did operations against pirates but that seems to be the extent of it.dont get me wrong I liked it, the ending just felt a little hamfisted

>>393532

I thought I had made it apparent with the breadcrumbs I've scatted throughout the story that Russet personally pissed off an abusive asshole dictator who has a soviet-tier hard-on for military equipment and force.. It honestly makes me regret not keeping something I cut in the end: Where Russet reveals his Navy experience is in fact as a teenage conscript of the Nihilus Legion.

Another flaw in this story, is that I feel I should've dropped more hints that Russet is being a deliberately unreliable narrator. I'm not sure how I would've done that though.

>>393548

I'm glad you enjoyed it.

>>393594

I got that he was some kind of dictator or pirate lord, but I didn’t understand why they were so scared of him, I don’t recall anything that indicated how powerful he really was or anything showing how ruthless he was willing to be that would explain why they were so terrified of him.

Maybe it was just cause I was a bit short on sleep I didn’t notice but that’s what it seemed like.

>>390268

Finally got around to finishing it. It was good, but I did notice some grammatical errors in it, especially in the last chapter. Are there any plans to continue it? Seems like an odd place to end the story.

Also, I would love if someone could help me out with my other inquiry >>389710

>>393789

>plans to continue

I would like to finish it since it is my first proper written story. I have a few different ways I could take the story but I need to go over my outline and refine it some more since I want a good ending even if it isn't necessarily a happy one. Glad you liked it.

I remember fixing a lot of the grammatical issues in the latest chapter recently but I haven't bothered updating the .pdf yet. I'll showcase those fixes with the release of the next chapter…whenever that is

>space junker hellhound

Does not ring a bell but it sound like it might be cool.

Hey.

Would the board be interested in soft-KC-canon stories about a band of knights hunting monsters in their pre-Demon Lord forms? I could properly try and tie it in to canon if possible.

I'd really like to write for this place again but I'm not really of a mind to write full-on smut.

>>393959

To expand on this a little bit, I'm thinking of a setting wherein some monsters have reverted back to their monstrous forms and are causing trouble, and either the towns or the husbands themselves are hiring a group of professional monster hunters from the pre-Demon Lord days to capture the girls for treatment. That basic concept could be taken into a number of different settings, I think - just give me a monster and a setting idea and I'm good to go.

The sexual stuff would probably stay at a minimum though, so I'd really like to gauge reaction to this.

>>393961

I'd say go for it, always good to have more OC on here, as long as it isn't some /chaos/ bullshit

>>393841

Also good story. Medusas are underrated within the lamia catergory of Mge stories and this was really comfy to read.

really nice story

http://touchfluffytail.org/?story=the-taste-of-rain

>>393789

>>389710

I remember that story anon. It had a space-cop/AI duo who are captured by MG space pirates who use our space cop hero as some twisted reverse harem, with the hellhound captain as the main love interest. AI is killed off in the last part that appeared here, but I don't recall the writer continuing from that point.

>>387674

You're giving me some good ideas Anon.

>>394051

https://pastebin.com/u/RSanon

Dude wrote a fuck ton of stuff back when, but I haven't seen them around for a few years now :(

>>393900

>In theory, I'm done writing.

I'll really miss your work. Stick around at least. Hopefully your muse will return, if not for /monster/ content than for something else.

>>393900

It's been fun Los! I'm happy that you've stuck with us this long, and thank you for your contribution. The last three years have really flown by.

>>393318

he's in the thread with the guy who wrote a book

>>393318

I don't keep track of pastebins or folders or anything like that. I know there's a couple anons that do, but I've got no way to point you in their general direction. I've quit threads/stories for a while now, so there's nothing new to add, and you haven't missed anything.

>>394274

Why "kill off" that party when you can marry them off to monstergirls most befitting their #1 sexual/romantic preferences? One must consider all the potential angles after all? Why fight when you can win without firing a single shot?

>>394278

Because if they're dyed-in-the-wool Orderlings, they'd attack him en masse as soon as they realize his defection? He probably doesn't get a choice.

>>394288

That doesn’t eliminate his non-lethal methods of elimination. Hell, if his new demon lord gf has a demon silver weapon of any sort laying around, he could just use that. Or he could use the rest of her court staff to ambush them all at once and immediately subdue them.

>>394274

>monster mom dealing with autistic son

Well there’s always mindflayers as a last-ditch option, but I assume she’d try anything else before that.

Marine Anon, gonna give another shot at writing again, all advice or criticism is welcome.

>be me, 0621 instructor standing at the top of hands and knees.

>Smoking a cigarette while watching all the junior Marines complain while crawling up hill.

>It's not that fucking hard, it's only 4 miles, you mostly walk up the hills anyway.

>It's not that fucking cold, no you can't wear your sweat top tomorrow.

>It's not that fucking early, 0530 wake up call is the norm in the Maine corps.

>How does each new group of Marines get lazier then the last?

>I look down at everyone struggling up the lose sand, sinking deeper with each step.

>I hate every single on of you so fucking much and it's the first day of class.

>Still gotta pick leadership though, I'll probably pick the PT stud as the the guide.

>I'll free ball the rest or something, I'm sure the motivated few will stand out.

>The first one to get up here is a zombie girl, PFC Cartwright, she gave a weak rah before putting her hands on her head.

>Wasn't aware the undead could sweat or breathe heavy, good to know.

Cartwright, what's your PFT? You're not that tall so you lose some points there.

>Between the heavy breathing she said she gets like 10 pull ups, 19 something 3 mile and max crunches.

>God damn, that almost impressed me, but being as short and skinny as she was, it wasn't unbelievable.

Alright, you made the cut. You're guide, now that doesn't mean it's set in stone. I'll switch you out in a heart beat if you aren't squared away.

>Give her a short brief on what the position means, being the example for everything, PT, studies, personal standers, all that.

>I didn't expect to much, she was probably gonna be switched out in the first few weeks.

>Still, she did stand a bit taller after she got the position.

>Said that is the first leadership role she's ever gotten. Said she won't let me down.

>I had my doubt about the last part, but, I was happy to know she'd take it seriously.

>I had to keep my eye on her, if she manged not to be a total fuck up, she might get meritorious Lance.

>Hell, shes even running back down to encourage the fat bodies.

>Maybe this class won't be that bad after all.

>Another cigarettes later everyone slowly makes it up, that last being a red oni girl.

>She's drenched in sweat and breathing so heavy she just might fucking die.

>Itsalwaystheoni.jpg

>I asked her name, because looking at her, I know for a fact she's gonna fail weigh ins.

>PVT Maxim, a Marine brat, I heard her brag about her Warren officer dad a few times.

>You'd think she would be in better shape, but I guess not.

>I stand back up, flick the butt of my last cigarette before facing my TSOC.

>I let them rest for awhile, telling Cartwright to stick with Maxim to make sure she doesn't actually die.

Alright, now for the run back, no one better fall out. This is almost all down hill so just keep up with me and it should be easy.

>With that I turn and start to run, everyone following me down the sharp decline back to barracks.

>I decided to cut them some slack and kept it at an easy cool down pace.

>No one else falls out, Maxim is pushed to her limits by my guide and nearly passes out when we stop.

>All in all, pretty good PT for the first day.

Okay, it's 0655 right now I want you formed up and ready to step at 0745, fall out.

>>394529

god I love .Less's art

>>394590

>I think a succubus would be pervert for the story

The unintentional pun. But yeah, seconding this

>>394590

Nightmares enter the dreams of the man they are interested in.

Figure I'll just post the pastebin link since it's where I'll be posting all the silly shit i type up. Be warned they aren't long stories, just brief moments that were too good for me to not write down while I could.

https://pastebin.com/u/MaximumFluff

>>394372

>0621

>Be commo pog

>Am faggot

Why are Soldiers always stealing my waifus?!?!

>>394372

Oh, god I read this trash after commenting, so I had to comment again to let you know this is trash. Exactly no one cares that you fumbled your way through boot. We all did, faggot, that's why we all know it isn't special and no one gives a shit. Pick something else to talk about. You just sound retarded.

>>393973

Anyone who says that wholesomeness and cheese are just objectively bad are not worth paying attention to. Nihilism has no place here!

>>394736

>We all did

What are you, part of some 3rd world country?

>>394736

Why are fags better at American imperialism than DA TROOPS?

>>394736

>We all did

Nigger the last time I checked this was Reddit you cock sucking homo.

>>394680

This was fucking cute.

I love this kind of short stories

>>394680

Ah so you're the one who wrote the shedding story. But all in all I'd enjoyed reading it. I like the slice of life aspect between the MC and MG waifu.

Does anyone have a copy of "Open (kunoichi, MGEverse, lewd)" by HumbleSacrifice?

https://pastebin.com/qvFsaU1i/

That's the link, but the guy nagasaki'd his pastebin and all his stories.

>>394962

Why did he do that? That story and the one with the spider are very good

>>395301

Authors have a tendency to throw petulant shitfits at the slightest provocation.

Writing prompt I plan on maybe using later for a multi-part piece. Putting it here so I don't forget.

The crew (mix of monster and human) of a small freighter find a strange life pod broadcasting a faint signal in dead space. Inside they find a single half-dead man with extensive bionics.

>>394129

He recently posted a new story.

https://pastebin.com/qW8RDKeY

Wonder if he's still around then?

>>395472

>Orgasm denialfags BTFO

Based

>>395301

Did he had a cave spider story? (guy trying to set up bombs for the detonation of a cave full of spiders, but got proactive'd in the end)

Damn, i've been searching for that one-shot for so long, didn't know it may have been there

>>395472

Well, fuck. It's been nearly three years. Good to know he's still kicking. Thanks for the heads up.

>>395512

I've been told bots troll paste-bin. Organically you can expect at least 100 or so folks at most from /monster/ unless there's someone spreading your content outside the board.

>>395632

That's a nice looking cover, and 80 percent of the buy decision is based on the cover so kudos on knowing where to expend your resources in the indie pub game.

Assuming it has done its job admirably, there's the last 20 percent, the pitch, the words on the back cover and/or the inside the front cover. Sell me my dude, because a few pew pew faggy 'umie mages about to get beaten down hardcore by a sexy Minotaur lady has my interest, can ya complete the "circuit" as it were and attract my attention though? I hope you deem it worthy of an attempt.

>>395632

>>395667

I am interested in a pitch as well. I'm curious about the way the game plays, dice system, mechanics, etc. How does it compare to D&D 2e, 5e, GURPS or any other popular system?

I don't think I could get a game together but I love collecting table top systems

>>395667

>>395735

Are you two new or do you just have difficulty reading? This is an ebook of the CYOA Ace did years ago. It’s not an rpg manual. And if you want the pitch or blurb or summary or whatever you call it on the back there is a brief description you can read if you would click on the link to the ebook.

>>395737

Nah, just brain damage. My bad.

>>395667

Very well Hero. As the other guy said, it is a clean up and printing of the first CYOA i ran here in… fuck it was 2015.

Wizardquest is a story of a man who reached the age of thirty as a virgin and became a Wizard with great powers. Content to stay at home and shitweave, he is forced to go on a quest when a hero breaks his communion glass. The outside world is dangerous however as it is filled with Monstergirls who would love nothing more than to rape him- and thus rob him of his magic forever.

The journey takes him far farther than he could imagine in this rich adventure filled with vibrant characters, a driving story, and rich humor.

Hailed by some as "The progenitor of a new kind of fantasy novel: Low Brow Fantasy" this story digs into some potty humor from our erstwhile hero, yet somehow it manages to fit will and give more life to the setting.

So please, consider purchasing this novel which clocks in at an impressive size that will leave you entertained for quite some time! Artwork included at the back of the book showing off many of the characters.

Okay, how's that?

>>395492

>>395307

Yep hw made that one. This is not acceptable! Did he really just say "fuck it" and burned all his work or was it just a mistake?

>>395772

Pretty good given the target audience. Get/keep magic powers or get laid roughly by sexy sexy monstergirls. Tough call. Don't ask for people to consider things though. Not a good marketing tactic. Find a better way to put that one.

Sounds kinda like an old raunchy pulp fiction piece as well. That's a good thing. Those bad boys sold like hotcakes back in their day. They're better than the BS coming out of the mainstream now by several country miles that's for sure.

>>395632

I recently read wizardquest and illusionquest on tft. Good stuff. Will most likely buy a hardback when it becomes available.

Do you plan to release the other stories as books as well?

>>395803

Aight! Ill drop the humility. Buy my book :^)

>>395813

Thanks! I need to figure out how to price the hardback because its expensive to print. I'll have more info wednesday. Also, I'll eventually do the rest, but it takes me forever to edit and I'd like to put out a small short story anthology including the epilogue. I didn't have space for it, sadly. Thanks for reading though! Please leave a review. :^)

>>395632

>120+ chapters

>7 dollary doos

That's a lot of content packed in there. I went ahead and purchased a copy. Once I've read enough of it to give it a proper take I'll give you the fairest review I can manage.

>>395888

Thanks trips hitler

Leave a review too :^) Though apparently the reviews don't show for people who don't shop amazon for other stuff which is weird but makes sense.

Cross-posting here since the Hellhound thread seems dead:

The Mad Dog of The Apocalypse

A hellhound stalked John Milcorren. He knew running would accomplish nothing. He would never make it to town, no matter how fast his horse could carry him.

…

Less Than An Hour Earlier

…

From his soft leather chair, John first noticed the destruction as a shadow from the corner of his eye, a soft and sudden dimming of daylight. Darkness had begun to eclipse the skyline visible from his cabin window. A smudge of black haze in the distance marred the beautiful spring mid-morning, stretching from fine points on the ground, houses probably, to a single broad swath in the sky. The town, a few distant miles away, burned.

With luck, it would be only a spreading fire. Perhaps the result of some crone’s careless housekeeping or cooking had started it, or perhaps an errant coal kicked too far from the hearth or a lamp knocked into dry bedding. In that case, people, buildings, and possessions could be saved with enough swiftly delivered of manpower and technique. A simple fire held neither intelligence nor animosity. The alternative, much as he despaired to consider it, meant a far greater and more meaningful loss, and could only be quelled by the ultimately futile response of the Lord’s Hussars from another few miles to the north. Were that the case, as quick as they were, they would arrive to find the town’s militia slaughtered almost to a man. The Eastern Barbarian Tribesmen were not keen on taking prisoners… Only plunder.

As John pulled his crutch to his side with one hand, he positioned his wooden leg in front of him, ready to squarely carry the burden of his weight. The real one, the one it was meant to replace, had been taken from him last year which hastened his departure from military life. He set his crutch firmly onto the floor like an old wizard pounding his staff. Pushing against the armrest with his right hand, and pulling on his crutch with the other, he stood. He could still do that, at least. He was not an old man by any stretch of the imagination, but the war with the Tribesmen, and against the Varigath Warband before that, and a dozen other skirmishes along the borderland of the Empire had all robbed him of any sense youthfulness among other things. Constant warfare from the dawn of his youth had chewed him up and spit him out. He had been like lamb entering a meat grinder. He had come out as pulverized mutton with a wooden leg, some medals, and a small pension.

Collecting his well-worn arming-sword and shield from the mantle above his hearth, John strapped the kit to his back and made his way out his cabin door, securing it behind him. He saddled up to his sturdy but small draught-horse Tess, taking care to position himself in the stirrups without dislodging or otherwise misaligning his wooden leg. His first stop would be to his small homestead’s well where he kept an old wooden bucket. It might be useful in the hopeful event that he needed to join the townsfolk in quashing a simple fire. His sword and shield would only be cold comforts in the event of Barbarians or other Tribesmen. With a crutch under one arm, he couldn’t possibly wield both at once. Worse yet, years of continuous training had gone fallow over the past year in favor of chopping wood and hauling grain. His armaments would reassure him, but were capable of little else in his weathered hands.

Still, in that event, his best chance of survival would be joining the townsfolk in their pitiful resistance. His home could be clearly seen from the town, just as he could clearly see the town burn in the distance. Staying at his homestead while the town withstood attack would leave him vulnerable and alone, a surest death as if he had fallen on his own sword. But that was not his reason in going. He did not fear death. No… Many days he welcomed it. He took perverse pleasure in reliving fantasies day after day of dying in battle, heroically on his feet. It was sweet fantasy a world apart from his present hell of dying one piece at a time. He would to defend the town because it was expected of him as a Soldier, not because of any safety it brought, and always in the hopes that his fantasies could be made reality.

Scarcely a minute into his journey along the road to town and he slowed his steed’s gallop to a trot, then halted her altogether. A veteran’s intuition from a short lifetime of constant battle had begun to nag at him. It came on softly at first, then stronger and stronger, until he had finally stopped to assess the situation. Realization had hit him like a battering ram. Were it a fire alone, there would be even-toned shouting and little else. Were it wild tribes of men or foreign invaders, there would screams of rage and panicked wailing. What John heard on the wind, he would never forget: shouts, pleading, growls, moans, and sick, twisted laughter. Momano had taken the town.

Worse than any other foe, he feared the momano. Though he cared little for his life any longer, he would prefer to keep his soul, which would surely be forfeit if he fell at their hands. And what he had seen, what they had done to his friend, how those memories hounded him constantly, all weighed heavy on his mind. Just the thought of seeing momano again started his his hands to shaking, swaying Tess’s reigns like they were caught in the midst of a soft breeze.

Just about the only enemy he had tangled with that hadn’t robbed a piece of him had been the momano… Although they had tried harder than any of the others. The difference had been that they had the unnerving tendency to capture their enemies alive, often as willing as not, through either brute force, corruption of the mind, or both. There had been a time when John had a hardy constitution, far more than most men, both mentally and physically.

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>>396587

Six Years Ago

…

John felt the barb pierce his side. It didn’t hurt, and he didn’t expect it to. It had been described as a firm pressure at the site of the wound that drove a man mad with lust. He knew now the truth in those words. It had been errantly flung along with a dozen others by single large manticore warrior, no doubt hoping to claim a few more of his fleeing men. He could perhaps resist the barb’s effects long enough to reach his retreating unit’s rally-point. Had he been a normal man, or had he been the sole focus of the barb’s owner, he would not have held out any hope of making it home that day.

But his dearest friend Michael, and immediate subordinate, would not be so lucky. Not only had he taken a barb too, but the manticore warrior had found its target in him. Like a shark picking out a single fish from a school, she pursued him with the intensity of a starving predator. His friend would make the ultimate sacrifice for God and Empire.

It’s attention solely on Michael, the tall manticore tackled the man to the ground and began tearing into his armor with its claws and tail, driving no less than half a dozen spines in the man’s chest in the process. He tried to pull his friend free but he could not be budged under the beast’s grip. There was no hope for the man. The manticore’s tail was already in place, ravishing his friend to the sound of his own screams. He would be taken back to the beast’s lair, food for the growing life that Michael himself was unwillingly siring inside the hellion’s womb at this very moment.

John’s sword heavy in his hand, he considered dispatching his friend for the preservation of his soul and honor, and to deny the beast her offspring. It was his duty, his requirement after all. He sheathed the weapon instead, knowing well enough the task’s impossibility. The manticore warrior would never permit it, for one. Not only had she effectively obstructed Michael from any angle of effective dispatch, but she would almost certainly block such an attack. For another, it would only get them both killed, whether or not he was successful. The beast would see him as a threat to her prey and react immediately. It was also no secret that men taken by momano ended their lives in blinding ecstasy, as was obviously the case with his dear friend. Better to die that way, John reasoned, than by the cold steel of a friend’s sword. Of course, the most important reason John refused to act was simple selfishness. He could not bring himself to raise a hand against his friend, no matter the consequences.

Instead, he ran to the rally-point, unnoticed, he hoped, by the ravaging monstrosities strewn about the battlefield. He was not alone among the survivors. His whole unit had either routed with him or been set-upon like his dear friend, soon to be captured and devoured. This had been their best possible outcome in the face of stumbling into a surprise mamono attack. They were unprepared for such a fight, and the mamono had been all but unstoppable since their new commander had been appointed.

>>396586

>dead thread

>thread hit bump limit back in December

You could always start a new thread with your story. I'm guessing you are new here?

>>396596

Yup.

I will do that. Thank you. How do you tell if it hit the bump limit?

>>396598

Bump limit's 400 posts on this board.

>>395911

Good stuff, anon. It’s cute and a just sad enough to accentuate the cuteness.

Also that ending made me laugh for about 5 minutes like a retard

https://pastebin.com/T7mYkj0p/-'Don't be afraid'

https://pastebin.com/G8xcUyW0/-'The Witch of Hithercombeshire'

by HumbleSacrifice/-Sacrifice-

If anyone has a copy of these archived somewhere, I'd really, really, really appreciate it

Not really sure of my drawfag skills, but I could offer an (eventual) request as thanks

>>396781

https://pastebin.com/T7mYkj0p/

Don't be afraid

https://pastebin.com/G8xcUyW0/

The witch of Hithercombeshire

My retarded ass can't do one thing right, damn

>>394129

Speaking of, does anyonyone have a copy of the files for the side stories he wrote for mgq?

>>395911

Part two

https://pastebin.com/3kGvPRpY

More of Anon trying to be a good dad while finding love again.

Feedback is appreciated as always.

>>397025

This story makes me smile. Please keep going.

>>397025

>Line 1: Emily had given me space last night

Emily rose from the dead just give her ex-husband some sleep space? How would Gwen feel about that?

>“Oh! I understand now. Could you draw me?” She asked sheepishly.

You cheeky! :^)

>Line 125: while Gwen and Married caught up.

Welp, Anon already got married to Gwen. That was fast!

Facetiousness aside, this is good stuff like always, though I'm hoping we will get some sexual healing in the next part. I hate seeing both Anon's and Gwen's relationship being stuck in a rut.

>>397125

hey anon, I just went through and read your other stories in this thread. I just wanted to say you're pretty damn talented and I'm really looking forward to part 3. The way you write comfy material warms my heart :)

selfish request, I know, but I'd love another Anubis story once you're done with your current project(s)

>>397336

“What’s going on, Anon?” Bridgett asked.

Pretty sure that should be Gwen

Wholesome as fuck otherwise man.

>>397278

>>397336

This is such a sweet little series. I spotted a few minor errors but aside from that I think it does what you want it to do. I want weresheep fugg too but I don’t think you’re out to write sex scenes and I respect that choice.

>>395911

it's nice, but isn't it a little unrealistic to be dating and living with a girl for several years but not have sex yet? unless they're intentionally waiting for marriage or something religious like that.