/erp/ - Erotic Roleplay

>>196157

If you are on f-list for just that one particular kink, you need to think really hard about how to make the idea of a human shota as appealing to that group as possible. The profiles themselves look great, but the character is nothing that grabs your attention. Working out a better idea could even attract people who might make a character just for the chance to play with you. The more you narrow your options, the more miserable you're going to be.

And just out of curiosity, what would be your top monster species to play with if you had to choose?

>>196658

Alright. So this might be the compliment sandwich type deal but I don't really know what else to phrase it as.

I think you have a good profile and great kink list and the like. My issue and this is more my problem then something wrong with it. Is that when I see profiles like that with all those kink lists. When I'm not into or don't know enough about a decent number of them. Plus in the info tab the main thing you are looking for is TF based scenes. Which is not my forte. I might not approach because I can't really come up with an idea that I'd feel would keep you interested if that makes sense? I'd personally maybe pass over Pepper not because. Oh, Pepper's a shitter but rather. Can I keep her interested? I don't think I'm in the target audience for Pepper.

So yeah. Those are my personal thoughts there. Hopefully, that is of some value to you? But besides that. I've always like your layouts and the seeming knack you have for profile layout and colors.

>>196658

You gotta stop doing icons like that dude. I can appreciate you wanting to go for a different look that isn't just a circle or rounded corners or something, but make a transparent cutout instead. The raised 3D thing just looks like a not very good Photoshop effect or something.

>>196769

I can understand why having a large kinks list like that can be a bit of a turn off to some people who may think me being into a lot of stuff equates to me being hard to please. I know this sounds silly as the kinks list is still fairly long compared to most, but thats actually after I picked off a lot of unnecessary kinks. I've tried not to add more kinks onto the main profile, and at least try to say what themes I'm looking for somewhere on the page.

Also, thank you for the compliments on the profile as well. Your feedback was valuable!

>>196791

I'll take it into consideration. I swap out my icons every now and then, so I'll mess around with it and see what I can do. I was thinking about doing transparent cut outs for the canon characters I have, and rounded corner icons for the OC/Canon Varriences.

>>196884

Honestly with long kink lists like that. Just trick people by using the sub-fetish editor. It's all presentation so with the collapsable you can hide it. Make it seem less overwhelming. Might need some reorganizations to get everything with collapses but it should help.

https://www.f-list.net/c/atia%20silo

My profile's pretty clearly crap but I don't know what to add!

If you have tips or anything (or want to ERP despite it) shoot me a reply or, even better, a note.

>>201750

Signature on the bottom right. Everything else is pretty nice. Lined effect might screw up how it looks for some resolutions though. A good start.

>>201756

Oh that's not what I'm going to use, I just liked it and took it from another profile. 99% sure stealing inlines is bannu

>>201750

>The actual writing isn't very good, either suffering from run-on sentences or straight up typos/grammar issues

>It's also just a recap of her backstory, which anyone familiar with the character will alreadry know

>The kinks are just personality traits, rather than actual kinks, and there are only three

>No inline

>Suffers the same shit most canon profiles do, with having 20+ images that are just character hentai

Zero actual original thought to be found here. Just other people's porn, a clumsy synopsis of shit people already know, and three irrelevant custom kinks. Might as well delete and let someone who actually cares have a crack at it.

>>201767

Nah. Not giving the name up.

>>201768

Then fix those issues. Find someone to make an inline for you because that profile is just going to waste away when you inevitably lose interest from barely any people approaching.

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>>202117

Hmmm???

How do you do the striated line-like custom kinks that are all the rage? I know how to do the super big letter ones, but the other thing is eluding me. Step by step please, I'm a fucking retard.

>>202135

are you talking about the "custom fonts" ?

https://www.messletters.com/en/

>>202261

I know about messletters and custom fonts. I was talking about how they have the lines on the sides leading down and a couple other fancies.

Hey /erp/, I have an idea for a character and I wanted some advice for her profile's writeup.

To keep it short and simple, she was born into slavery, and spent her childhood in chains, looking for a way out. Then she conveniently found her escape in the form of blood magic, and is now on the run looking for a better life.

So, obviously it's more of a story-heavy character, and I already got an idea for what I'm looking for, that being tender romantic partners to comfort her and help her overcome her shitty past. Question just is what I write into that big empty space of the profile itself.

What do you guys think? What should I mention about her character? Is there anything I should maybe keep a secret for people to find out during RP?

>>202263

Box drawing unicode, "spaces" that are small enough to be invisible but still recognized by F-List as a character, and prayer that everything sorts like you want it to.

>For spaces (and an idea of how they sort so you can abuse them)

https://www.f-list.net/c/unicode%20sort%20test

>For box drawing unicode

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Box-drawing_character#Encodings

https://www.f-list.net/c/mactator I've made some changes from last time I've posted. Better or worse? Should I change/tweak the inline y'think?

>>207823

Put exactly as much detail about her history on the profile as you gave us just now, but keep the full backstory in mind. The rest of the profile should be good with personality details (even if she didn't live much of a life until now, it's still nice to get an idea of what your partner is going to act like). Also a few details about the blood magic is likely in order: What can she do with it, and how did she get it while a slave? Depending on how much you want to be uncovered during the game, you can just sort of gloss over some of the details with the magic, but you should at least mention whether or not she can puppeteer people with it, since that'll probably make or break a partner or two. If, after saying everything you want to say, the profile still looks sparse, toss in an inline for good measure.

>>209850

Generally speaking you want to go in order of importance and do your best to make it flow; people are going to read from the top and get bored eventually, so the paragraph should be the vitals: who IS she (primarily personality, maybe some of the basics of what she is if she's something special)? After that, things that would be really good to know and are likely to come into play: what she does and what she is capable of doing. Save history and especially relationships for the end; while it's nice to have a backstory and reasons for why she is who she is, what happened before isn't as important as what's happening now, and 9 times out of 10 in practice it's not going to matter at all what made her that way, only that she IS that way.

In the event that you can't come up with good transitions, just section them off into appropriately labeled collapse boxes.

What do you guys do for a character who's kind of complicated? I've got a character (asian) mixed in with some raceplay and cursed demons blood but how long should I spend trying to explain what that actually means to someone reading the profile or should I just have-

>physical and character description

>things the profile is for

>ooc

in that order?

>>211423

one sentence that she is asian. if she participates in whatever her ancestral culture is in some way, give that one sentence. if that participation is a big part of her life, MAYBE give one sentence explaining that.

>Emiko's mother was a white american and her father was a Japanese citizen. She speaks Japanese in addition to English and competes every year in flower arranging competitions for fun.

One sentence for her having cursed demon blood and what that curse does to her physically. One sentence for how she feels or behaves because of that cursed demon blood. One sentence for how the cursed demon blood will affect your partner.

>Emiko is cursed and if she becomes upset enough, glass and pottery near her may crack spontaneously. She has spent most of her life being quietly furious about it and has been trying to remove the curse for years. If anyone learns about it, either by asking her directly or piecing clues together on their own, Emiko feels embarrassed and ashamed.

I'm probably going to regret asking, but is there anything I can do to further refine my profile? It's a bit dark/morbid, but the idea is to attract players who are into that kind of story.

https://www.f-list.net/c/Sable%20North

I'd just like a critique. Anything that should be added, taken out, or expanded on?

https://www.f-list.net/c/seraph%20andromeda

>>211793

While the profile isn't bad. Like… there's a sense of dissonance with the presentation and the target niche.

To the average person who goes straight to kinks or the picture tab, they'd skip all that. Yeah, I know, that's not who/what you are looking for.

So I'm sort of getting the idea Sable is like a warden of sort for criminals and tries to reinstitutionalise them. But you are exposition this to me, not selling me on it. So you need to take what you have and add your own like voice to it. Add some color and use the kinks to really grab the attention of people. Even if it's for things that aren't literal kinks. Use it as a space to hook in or grasp your readers. Or help guide them. I admittedly. Would need you to expand more about HOW, or WHAT, forms of reverse corruption your profile is about. To you? It might be obvious, to me? Not sure! Say I approach you what a white fang rapist. What would he/she come out as? A Model citizen? A worker drone for the Schnee? Some kind of spy or double agent? Cannon fodder? Would Sable let them go? Or just keep her subjects forever?

>>217395

There's nothing stand out wrong with your profile. But I'd expand a bit a bit on what makes Andromeda stand out or what might you like to do with her. Give her some notable traits or purposed flaws. You do have a few in that she was hotheaded and paid for it, but I think there is still room for more.

Reading the profile, I'd not have much of an idea beyond. Capture, rape, sex slave, maybe breed the seraph. (since it's a maybe for you.) Maybe use her students as leverage/hostages. But well. While that isn't necessarily a bad thing. There could be room for something more you know?

Doesn't have to be much, but it could be a quest for vengeance to twist for a murdered friend, family, ect. Or maybe she's been raped before? And so that's why she's extra cross with demons or other types. A bit of a complex about it. There's just room to add more to her motivation I think. If she starts to fall for carnal pleasures her powers weaken, some weakness or like. Something to latch onto or use. The healing factor is a good thing for violence play, and I think it could be highlighted a little more.

>>217675

Those are some good notes. I admit, this is my first sadist character so I tried to write in a very grim way to appeal to people who would be into that sort of thing. However, I don't really completely understand the appeal of masochism except that it's the opposite of the appeal of sadism. Aside from that, I tried to write in a blank, cold tone because I feel like it matches the character's personality. A section of the profile dedicated to the "after treatment" part of the story would be a good addition, I'll try to write one later today. Thank you for your input.

>>217675

Good points, I'll work on it. Thanks.

>>217702

To follow up I added about a paragraph explaining what happens after treatment. If anyone wants to take a look and tell me what they think, I'd be grateful.

>>218499

I wish I could help you because you seemed like a cool guy when we briefly spoke recently. However, I don't have much of an idea on how to make a good male profile. Maybe you could add more about his personality or how he spends his time?

>>218508

Thanks a bunch, anon!

I think I'll do just that and work on the kink list a little bit.

>>218512

Someone once said that you should write "what a character does" more than "who the character is". I dunno how true that is, but doing a little bit of both couldn't hurt, right?

>>218499

I'm no expert, but I think it needs a hook.

Sex driven? How are partners going to get the dick? Does he like, jerk off in the workplace hoping nobody finds out? I don't know.

You could work on the kinks a bit too. The first thing I thought was "Hmm femboy… I'd fuck that… In the ass."

But then I see that's in maybes. Yet your faves are mostly blank. So what do you want? So far I know you like traps dressing up. Are you going for something kink-based? Then write some kinks and why you love that shit.

As it is, I can think he's more for story/character driven stuff. But then, what kind of job does he want? What does he like?

>>218499

Well first, you should fill out all your customs. One or two being empty is fine I think, but having about half them pop up with no description is a turn off. At least for me it is. And since you write all your customs ICly, you'll have to think about what your character would find hot about those specific things.

I think >>218574 is on the right track here. It seems sort of unclear what you actually want to do with your character. I know it's hard not to want to just suck everyone in that you can with one character, but you'll have much better luck finding high quality partners (who you can later convince to write other kinds of characters for you) if you go for specific things. Like if you want a trap/MILF to step on your face and jerk you off or something, you should probably gear it more towards that. Like, you have a little description about how he's a tiny little security guard, so it follows that you might want to mention that for some reason, pretty boys in skirts and lonely women just love bullying him to orgasm–assuming that's what you're going for.

In my humble opinion, I find it useful to write a vignette as the main body of your paragraph. It'll help actually characterize the character in a way a general description can't do.

>>218305

Hmm. It gets the job done. But there is the main issue that we both are playing from one point of view and not the other. I admitedly tend to play more hammy sadists. The kind that will mockinly appologise for driving a stake through somebodys hands to pin them to the wall, or twist it for the lulz. So I try to add a darkest dungeon type narrator to clash and add the dread with the eager sadism. So it's take it with a pinch of salt.

I do think it would be a decent space to sort of showcase Sable's crazyness or methods. Might she view her work as 'art' or just a job. If she likes to experiment because well, she has disposable subjects that people aren't exactly going to miss, and can dangle that fact over them. If she might have any works or reforms that she's particularly proud of. Like say a converted criminal into a devout follower converted to her ways and eager to bring the next unlucky subject to the light.

>>218902

I'll keep that in mind, but stylistically it's not a very easy thing for me to fix so I might need to do some brainstorming first.

>>218919

While not guaranted you can ask some of your partners what aspect of your writting stands out. Some people might be able to help point out where your tonal strengths lie.

>>218928

Oh, I asked a partner in my guestbook and she likes how cold and distant Sable is compared to more typical doms. I think that could be either a strength or a weakness depending on the partner though.

Fair. In that case I'd probably say turn up the experiment factor and down the empathy. (Which you have a good grasp on anyways.) They aren't people. They're experiments test subjects The this is my job thing, in a twisted 9-5 sense. Maybe some quota to fill or the like.

>>218952

Good notes, but it's a little tricky because at her heart Sable is a moral idealist. She genuinely thinks she's doing what's best for her victims. So there's empathy there deep down, but she also believes that putting on a tough exterior is often the best way to intimidate someone into reform. The thing about it being a job is a good idea, I think as she is obsessively dedicated to her work.

>>218801

Good advice, thanks! I'll get working on it.