I don't understand the goals of this exactly.. Why would you write fascism stuff if that's what they hate? And do you have examples of how they use it against non shitlibs?

>Though it is degenerate

Nothing degenerate about a superior male specimen breeding with multiple women to keep the volk strong.

Himmler himself was a champion of polygny and envisioned a future where a man could marry more than one wife.

>>20858

The problem with polygamy is that it will leave the vast majority of men out in the cold as the extremely rich men have unlimited resources as far as family is concerned. Young men who have no access to women are ripe for starting a revolution/civil war. The only reason why there is no civil war going on right now is because of various measures the (((elites))) have taken to ensure that the bottom men are either distracted or castrationed (figuratively and literally). Polygamy is only acceptable in the context of a war having ended. Meaning that lots of young men have died and thus there is lots of women to go around. The default state of society should be monogamy, where the rich have more children than the poor.

>>20859

The problem with monogamy is that it's a form of egalitarianism in the sex market. Just like all forms of egalitarianism, it goes against what is natural because there wasn't always the ideal situation where "every boy gets a girl and everyone is happy", some people have to be left out in order for the best genes to pass on and for natural selection to take place. This IS eugenics and without this process you will eventually get a race of weak untermenschen.

Just let Chad deal with demographic issue. The incels have a race war to fight.

>>20861

Intel’s in a patriarchy would be equal of Chads in our society. Them being unsatisfied is a serious civic issue. Also Rich having more kids than the poor would still be eugenics. Fascism is about working with nature, not being subservient to her. Rape is perfectly natural act. That does not mean it is conducive to a stable and functional society.

But if you are a femanon, please tell me what you think of >>20860

>>20861

Putting aside IRL concerns, since we're obviously dealing with a fictional story, why not simply introduce a "grading" system for men and women that measures their achievements/beauty/health/intelligence/etc. and go from there?

If packaged right it neatly avoids ringing any bells among normalfags because the word eugenics isn't explicitly mentioned and lets you neatly explain why Jack gets three wives while Bob the soyboy gets none.

>>20860

I've just read the beginning and I have to say this really isn't going to work. First, the POV character is awful, and we really don't get much of an idea of who she, what she looks like and what her place in the world is. The way you describe her makes her out to be a walking parody (feminist that cucks her soyboy boyfriend with a nigger).

Also, when that happens nobody is going to be wearing SS uniforms, especially not in America. They're going to package themselves differently and style their propaganda in a different way.

My recommendation would be to basically rewrite the whole thing. Have the heroine already be captured (and in jail) with a short narration of how everything has gone to shit and a new power has risen in America. She should be much younger and virginal (maybe a student caught during a protest against the current system?) because women seem to like for the heroine to be like that with "forced seduction" stories. She eventually ends up being "married" to an officer in the new system and shit starts from there. Her journey is basically one of deprogramming, where feminist and liberal bullshit is spanked out of her and she begins to enjoy being a pregnant housewife.

You can really push the envelope with "romance" fiction nowadays, and Stockholm Syndrome stories with master/slave elements seem to be rather popular.

>>20863

I thought we were off topic, there was never going to be any direct reference to eugenics. What I had planned on was the captured women being ranked by degeneracy by the fascist women (examining their vagina for example). Rachel would have gotten the highest degeneracy rating since she has a “blacked” tattoo.

>>20864

One thing to keep in mind here is that I’m not writing rule book on how to pull off a fascist coup in America. Also consider the audience I’m aiming for. Shitlib white women (these types have no sense of nuance so it really doesn’t matter what I call them). I am targeting them because gen z women are safe as far as I can tell (gen z is having the least sex and is the most polarized). However, white women of child bearing age are only 2% of the global population. Gen z women will not be enough to get the white birth rates up.

Yes Rachel is a terrible character, but she is designed for shitlib women to project on. You or I have no connection to her. (((Hollywood))) gets away with terrible characters because they are designed to appeal to a specific demographic.

One of the way I was planning on working in cuckquean is to have a fascist man take her into his home. However he already has a fascist wife. The dynamic would be dom queen and sub vixen. As the husband would be using her as a maid he occasionally sticks his dick into. Rachel would grow envious of their relationship and eventually of the family they are having. I could replace the fascist wife with an obducted virgin, if you think that is better.

I would ask that you read further and provide more critic. Also provide illumination on the appeal of these sorts of works as there is only so much a man can gleam of the female psyche from data, dating, and thought experiments.

>>20865

>One thing to keep in mind here is that I’m not writing rule book on how to pull off a fascist coup in America

I know, but the way you wrote the introduction is going to put the target audience off before things even start. Keep any mention of Nazis out of it, but if you really must just mention that white supremacists have come to power, and if not just that a fascist government has taken hold of the country and women have been reduced to second-class citizens. You can imply that niggers and muds are gone (by not mentioning any), but don't focus too much on it or the worldbuilding.

>but she is designed for shitlib women to project on

I recommend you take some time and read actual "romance" books written by women for women, especially ones that feature dubious consent, forced seduction and themes of corporal punishment and abuse. You'll note "raging feminist with a nigger fetish" isn't really featured anywhere. You could argue that the "taming of the shrew" plot kinda fits, but again, it's nothing like you are writing, since your character is more of a trope in right-wing fiction written by men than anything women would come up with.

What you're basically writing is erotica for men about the humiliation and degradation, and eventual submission of a feminist Western woman. Granted, there's "romance" novels that do feature that kind of plot too, but that's a more niche crowd, usually focusing on BDSM shenanigans or cuckqueaning as the central premise.

My main issue is really with the protagonist. Remember, you're trying to make her sympathetic to the audience, to make women identify with her. Most women don't view themselves as cheaters or mudsharks, and mostly look down on women that engage in such acts.

>I would ask that you read further and provide more critic

Will do. Also, I'm a dude with a harem fetish.

>>20866

Okay, reading further on:

1. Why are the authorities breaking down the door? Why not just knock? Also, how did they manage to get there so quickly? Do they have some hit list of all known liberal deviants or are they just going door to door?

2. Why did they shoot the cuck? I mean, male cucks deserve the bullet, but why is this being done in broad daylight without any sort of judicial proceedings? Just have them both arrested and make Aiden's fate unknown or something. We're still in juvenile "parody Nazi" territory.

3. The protagonist shouldn't get wet the moment someone smashes down the door. This is not a normal reaction a human would have. She could very well be aroused by the thought of being fucked by a manly man, but it's a jump to have her be wet and ready to be raped by the RWDS.

4. Why are they going in with an APC? Seems excessive even for the highly militarized US police force, unless these roundups are being concocted by the military, and even then they'd put them on trucks/buses. Also, why are they calling them breeding stock? Are they just rounding up every white woman they see?

5. Don't use "nigger" for fucks sake. Know your audience. Also, coincidence is bad storytelling. Are you telling me that a guy whose friend was sent to jail due to a hitpiece written by the protagonist just so happens to be in the unit that, by sheer coincidence, was involved in her arrest?

6. Why are the police/military contemplating a prison break-out? Aren't they in power now? Wouldn't they just have to wait until all political prisoners were pardoned by the powers that be?

7. NoFap - anon, what the fuck are you doing?

8. Finally, she comes around to the realization she's a cumdump far too quickly, thus removing any curiosity in seeing how she tries to rationalize her arousal and processes her submission.

>>20867

I was really hoping for a women’s perspective but I’ll take yours into consideration.

Why do you think it’s the police/military? They are clearly white nationalists who are forcefully taking power.

>coincidence

There are tons of hit pieces that are written. It’s nit that much of coincidence that one of the women he captures would be journalist that effected him personally.

>>20869

If it's white nationalists taking power, why are they not ordering the police/military to round up the undesirables? If they can't order the police/military to do so, why are the law enforcement agencies allowing a bunch of thugs in stolen military hardware to abduct and execute citizens?

>It’s nit that much of coincidence that one of the women he captures would be journalist that effected him personally.

It actually is. It's one thing for him to deliberately have gone after her, it's another for him to just stumble upon the one person that was responsible for his friend's downfall.

All in all this is pretty badly written, with a lot of things that will instantly turn off female readers, the setup is full of holes and inconsistencies and nobody in the cast is likeable enough to sympathize with.

I recommend you read something like the Handmaiden's Tale to figure out how the left does this kind of propaganda, or any of the hundreds of dubcon "romances" that are on offer to see how you can present "rape until they like it" in a way female readers will accept.

>>20864

>retard obsessed with jewish conspiracies and black dick envy can't write for shit

Gee what a fucking shock, didn't see that coming

>>20880

I want to dissect you alive

OP here. I've been convince that this was a bad idea, so I've reported this thread myself since I can no longer delete it. Rest assured that soon this thread will no longer be shiting up your board.

>>20884

OP here again, lol disregard that I suck cocks.

>I am willing to introduce cuckquean themes into it. (Though it is degenerate)

Whether or not is degenerate is circumstantial. If 50% of white men were killed fighting a war against non-whites, for example, then the surviving men would need to impregnate/marry 2 white women apiece to ensure a future for the white race.

On the other hand, if there's roughly equal numbers, then half the white men taking two wives denies the remaining half a white wife, so I can understand why that would upset you.

>>20885

If you hate me and this thread that much feel free to spam the mods.