/cyoa/ - Choose Your Own Adventure

Cringe

do i have to play a blue haired black feminist by the name of tykeesha?

>>15412

Actual gayest fucking thing on this board.>>15412

>>15412

>LOOK!

>I put all my favourite games, tv shows, films, and comics in one CYOA!

>I think all these things are great by themselves, and therefore they must be even better in combination!

If this is your first project ignore the snark there OP, but even ignoring the subject matter some bad choices for an 8chan cyoa as have been covered already you've just set the scope of this far too wide, there isn't a story or setting here, there isn't even an interesting mechanic or concept here. Take a look at some of the other CYOAs on this board to get a better idea for your next attempt. If you can't be bothered with that then at least try to stay focused on a single thing for round 2.

The creator of this definitely has some creative skill, but the work itself is just so unfocused. Make it easy for yourself, pick one specific theme and stick to it. Tighter focus, better end result.

>>15412

This is actually the worst CYOA on this board, even below the cuckshit. I have made shitpost CYOAs better than this. Even the "which awoo wud u headpat" cyoa is better.

Pointers to the OP:

1) Focus on one thing and only one thing. If you'd picked *one* of these things and improved upon it, you'd have a passable CYOA

2) Try to follow the rough format of "Intro, things to buy, drawbacks/goals".

3) When creating fiction, consider your audience. You've posted this on 8chan, which is known for having sympathies with both Nazis and Confederates. You've made the implicit assumption that we'd want to go back and stop Nazis and Confederates, which makes us dislike your CYOA more. You belong somewhere more like reddit.

4) A "fuck it, make up your own shit" option is generally considered lazy and distasteful. It means that either you're not trying to balance at all or you're underestimating your audience's creativity.

5) Black background and white text is an OK start. You have at least succeeded in making your CYOA readable. That's not enough to earn points, but I didn't want you leaving thinking that this was worthy of being posted as a "this is how you should never do a cyoa" example.

>>15426

I must disagree, the creator has not displayed reasonable creative skill. They have a lot of development to go through.