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It's called "constructive criticism". If we just call it shit, it's probably gonna stay shit. But if we want to give the author a chance to fix it (and in the process let him learn how to make better stuff), we should give him some hints on what needs fixing.
Information on the setting and images to go along with text is a place to start, at least. Scaling down (or at least making a tl;dr version) would be a second step.
>you could say the slave's gender was left ambiguous so you could choose for yourself
He totally failed to mention that, though.
>or maybe they're some genderfluid tumblr refugee
It's a fantasy setting, there shouldn't be enough overindulgence for those morons to breed