/a/ - Animu & Mango

>>951368

>>951369

>>951370

This means reversed-world Ichikawa was so eager to fuck that she didn't even masturbate once before hitting on Urisugi.

21-13 panel 2

>I was wondering when you would finally call out to me,

I figured it was about time you'd want to talk to me.

>Ichikawa-san from my world

Ichikawa-san from my world,

>...it's really you right?

I presume?

21-13 panel 4

>I'll get straight to the point.

I'll get right to the point.

>I want to know

In our world...

>What the hell has the other me been doing in our world?

Just what has the other me been doing?

21-14 panel 1

>She's approached a perverted looking boy to have sex with.

Finding a perverted boy to have sex with.

21-14 panel 5

>I figured maybe she approached me first because she found out I was a pervert, you know?

I figure she approached me first because she knew I was a pervert, you know?

>That's where I got the idea to do the same, and got in touch with Kawashima-san.

That's why I got in touch with Kawashima-san, after all.

21-15 panel 1

>I'm really grateful to her for initiating me.

Thanks so much for getting me started.

21-15 panel 3

>has been doing it with everyone like a bitch, you know!

has been doing it with anyone like some slut, you know!

>From what I know, she's only done it with me so far.

As far as I know, she's only done it with me.

21-16 panel 1

>You wish she would fall in love with you!

Why is she in some lovey-dovey situation with you?!

>Why would she go for someone so unpleasant?

That's really nasty too, you know?

21-17 panel 1

>I-i-it's gonna be alright.

I-i-it's gonna be okay.

>You can leave it all to me!

L-l-leave it to me!

>But you don'tlook like you have it under control, do you!?

You don't look okay at all!!

21-17 panel 3

>I have plenty experience!

I have plenty of experience!

21-18 panel 1

>Like this!

Hup!

21-19 panel 2

>See... erm... you know the pain a virgin girl feels from her first time, well that can put a stop to things.

See... erm... the pain she felt as a virgin put a stop to the whole thing.

21-19 panel 3

>Because of that trauma, she hasn't searched for another boy ever since.

Because of that trauma, she didn't try to catch other boys

>She said she wanted to practice with me first, before going...

and kept practicing having sex wtih me instead....

>I think I'm gonna puke.

I'm gonna puke.

21-20 panel 2

>I can't do that, can I?

That's impossible.

>I feel like I've been given an opportunity, coming from the other side.

At this point, they're the ones demanding I do it with them.

>It's already too late for me to go back on seducing them.

I stopped asking long ago.

21-20 panel 4

>So you've done it already then!!?

You're the one who made them that way!!

21-20 panel 5

>Well, yeah, with Ichikawa-san,

You're the one who made me this way.

>From this world.

The you from this world.

21-21 panel 1

<She's brooding again.

That's some serious moping.

21-21 panel 2

>Look, I don't know how we're going to work it out from now on,

Look, I don't know if this is helps any,

21-21 panel 3

>but I can tell you that when Ichikawa-san seduced me for the first time,

but when Ichikawa-san seduced me for the first time,

21-22

>Why is he saying that for...

The hell's he saying...

21-23

>But even if you tell me that being a virgin is for losers, I still think that staying chaste is the way to go...

The only good news is that she calmed down after losing her virginity...

21-26

<It's as if it had always been all too familiar...

Like a familiar object used for many, many years...

<Going in without resistance.

it slipped right in...

>>951380

>that last line

Holy shit, I'm actually retarded.

>>951380

>Second, how faithful should I be with the font used in titles? Is pic related okay?

Looking at previous chapters, there seems to be a number of different fonts used to render the titles in English. Might be worth trying to check what those are, as well as if the Japanese titles had similar variety of font or not (and thus if there's any pattern to what the previous English titles have used). I guess the real concern is that it fits with what's established.

As to the example though: I kind of think a less "bubbly" font for the "Despair" line might work better as the Japanese script isn't especially thick, but definitely keep a handwritten look to it. I'd also say that you ought to try it as white with no stroke if you're going to be using shadowing around it to pop it from the background (that effectively gives it a light stroke on its own). At the same time, the shadowing feels a bit too thick in both cases: Notice how easily quickly it dissipates on the Japanese. Just my thoughts though.

>>951389

Can you enphasize teh last T in "first" to make it more like hatsuTaiken?

Like, "firsT time", but not just capital and undercase, more like changing that letter's font size or something.

>>951378

Grammar mistake in my proofreading.

21-21 panel 2

>Look, I don't know if this is helps any,

Look, I don't know if this helps any,

>>951463

I like the first one better, it looks more like the raw text. Thanks man

Thank you anon for continuing this. That shocking momment where you learn you are not a virgin anymore.

>>951510

>In page 11, the あ...ヤバ... translate to what the right? If so, should I keep it the way I did? Or should I make it look different like in the raws?

Making it a bit different will give it a bit of flair, but it's not crucial. So either way is fine.

>>951508

I still think the shadow on the Despair line is a bit much. Are you able to diffuse it some like the Japanese one is so it looks less "solid" as it moves away from the text?

>>951510

One grammar fix on page 9, panel 3:

>Do you know what is it that Kawashima has to do?

Do you know what it is that Kawashima has to do?

>>951564

Yes but from another perspective, and with less H

>>951564

Literally the same author and characters but different artist.

>>951508

The box font, league gothic, looks rather squished from the sides as if it has a bad aspect ratio.

Also, what program are you using?

>>951606

Forgot to mention, I'm using Photoshop. Mainly because I'm used to it, perhaps other programs such as GIMP have better tools for typesetting?

>>951648

Oh, and one more thing: First thing you should do in the outer glow options is set the blend mode to darken, or something of that nature. Program default is to use the effect to lighten (it is called a glow, after all), which obviously won't be useful when the point is to pop white text against a white background. Otherwise you wouldn't be able to see it.

>>951645

>gimp

>better

hehehehehehahahahahahahahaHAHAHAHAHA

no

>>951510

>9.png

You might want to try manually adjusting the second bubble's line in panel three, and see if redistributing the text looks better with the bubble's framing. Like:

>Do

>you know

>what it

>is that

>Kawashima

>has to

>do?

Just saying as sometimes adjusting the text frame width alone can't achieve the best results

>>951791

For p21 panel 2:

>Look, I don't know if this is helps any,

Look, I don't know if this helps any,

>>951791

>>951792

>>951790

>>951788

Looks fine to me.

>>951954

>>951955

>>951956

>>951957

>>951958

Proofreader here, looks good. Regarding the credits page, since we've moved from /animu/, please change the proofreader credits from "/animu/" to "Anonymous" like everyone else.

>>951957

>>951958

>21

>22

>26

Avoid ellipses having their own line.

Credit anoon for raws

>>951956

>>951986

Although the line on 14f panel 1 is faithful to the original, would it be better to have Urisugi say

>Finding someone perverted to have sex with.

instead? Otherwise it sounds like Urisugi is finding boys to have sex with.

>>951989

Could also make the first bubble something like "Similar to what I'm doing now." and maybe add a "she" to the start of the second bubble, to keep the context of being on the prowl without implying that either of them roll both ways. I suppose it comes down to which would be less deviation from the Japanese script though.

>>951990

The raw is

>今のボクと同じだよ

>スケベそうな男子に声かけてエッチしてるよ

which 14f panel 1 accurately translates, so it's something the author assumed the reader would understand. It just sounds bad in English. Either >>951989 or >>951990 or something along those lines would clear it up.

In the end it's up to the typesetter to decide if it's worth bothering with.

>>951997

For a crop: it's up to you, but if you want suggestions, how about 14f panel 2? Ichikawa's face got a laugh out of me. Whatever works.

Chapter 21.

https://mega.nz/#F!eZcEQYaD!LyIObJEWIVP6Fo1EFqtp6w

where is the next transalation post?