/monster/ - The Last Bastion of Romance

>>354457

>tfw was busy and forgot to make new thread so someone beat me

>tfw thankfully it's still on topic with OP

Phew.

Anyway, from the last thread, if you're going to make something long running and discussion like the religion with MG's and etc, make a separate thread for that since the discussion is good but it drowns out stories posted here.

Manticore Purifcation when?

gimme ur requests /monster/ will read them in the morning

>>354612

Mercenary Knight who prefers masterplanning meets up with an orc berserker who prefers to charge in screaming. They have disagreements over engagements styles that ultimately results in blows. Also hate fucking.

>>354612

Are you going to read stories you've written or stories others have written? Not that it matters, just curious.

>>354612

A flustered tomboyish monster girl letting her husband use her lap as a pillow while patting his head. The more conflicted she is between being embarrassed and enjoying it, the better.

>>354624

This

>>354612

Repressed, workaholic Cupid brings young couples together - but each time, can't resist jumping in to help with awkwardness of first sex due to being too horny and obsessed with the couple starting off properly.

Inevitably rapes both people, usually using each other and with way more kink than either person was remotely prepared for, only realizes what she did, the morning after when the lust craze falls off.

Is ResonantDrunk still around? Want to know when the next chapter is coming out

>>354495

How would you all feel about an extended series based around a mamono finishing school in Texas? I set it up in my last story just to try and tie in another short I had planned. But now I've gone to all the trouble of making a curriculum and teachers. So now I'm kind of excited for it.

>>354693

That would be welcome, sure.

>>354693

I would love to read more stories in the Monster Girl 2020 setting you created. But I'd like to add something to what you said earlier.

>>354417

>I want for people to see my setting the way I do. So I'm making more material.

That is key to fleshing things out, especially if you want to help other writers join in on that setting--I don't know if you do or not.

More information on the current day FUK and especially more backstory on the FUK before it came to Earth would be very helpful to give readers a better understanding of the world and writer a better basis to work from.

Here's just one example:

Remember that story set in the Monster Girls 2020 setting about the male biologist learning magic from the hakutaku?

>>332752 in case anyone wants to read it

That wasn't you, I don't think, Opie, and it was admittedly early days for the setting, but the story included a part where the biologist travels to the FUK. When he arrives, the FUK even has procedures already in place for ensuring that single males have escorts during their stay (for obvious reasons). Now, I for one thought it was a good story in its own right, but if the FUK is not accepting human visitors, then either those visitors are special cases, this takes place at a later point when the FUK has opened up to human guests to an extent or the story is outside of the setting's canon.

As another example from the same story, the writer came up with an explanation for how the mamonos continued to survive without males that differs quite a bit from what you revealed in those "secret documents"

If you are going to continue expanding your setting (and I hope you do), the more details and canon guidelines you provide about the broader setting and backstory, the better writers will be able to create stories that fit well within lore of that setting.

>>354709

I'll definitely write more things in the setting! And I'll try to think of something, maybe an excerpt from a FUK textbook or something. I do want to share what I've done, but I also want to make clear what it isn't, since so many people want to turn it in to this total war scenario with such little nuance, with a modern day order. The setting's problems are primarily the ones that are ignored in things like Stein's Gate and Monmusu. Real Life. Which sucks so hard its the greatest mundane obstacle in the world

The greentext you are referring to is not me, but I did read it and enjoy it. And it did make me think about ow they kept their society from collapsing and I'll be revealing more about that in the future. I suppose I'd treat it a bit likt KC treats MGE, everything he does is canon and everyone can play in the box but if you go to far then its essentially just fanfiction.

The main trouble I have is thinking of ways to reveal information in a fun way, instead of a bland Q&A

>>354758

Monster Girls 2020: Not All Guys Are Like That

http://touchfluffytail.org/?post_type=story

Most human girls think all guys are demons, and have to be convinced otherwise.

Most Monsters think men are all angels. And are surprised when they are wrong.

This is a short blurb about what Empress Desdemona has to deal with on a daily basis.

>>355252

You know I am curious is why FUK is not making connections to Mexico and the Latin American countries? There may be a difference between the quality of men but it would give them better access to the Americas and would provide them decent allies/trade partners, not to mention the natural resources. Is it due to the Catholic/Protestent(US/EU) influences/corruption that make them untrustworthy, the drug wars and revolutionaries affecting the country, or is there some other reason that FUK will not do so? Really I am asking is because I would like to see the Sabbath interacting with the Mexicans, with them having one of the lowest age of consent and are very pagan like; I would even see the Baphomets or Enchida becoming a de facto ruler of Mexico/Central America.

>>355325

Because I'm racist.

Nah,nah, I kid. Am a little bit, but actually they obtained a cultural exchange program with Mexico in 2019 on the timeline.

Not as many go due to rampant violence. And America is where all the white boys ( ooga boots, where da white boys at) be going to flee the war zone that is Europe.

But some do go to Mexico.

Generally they prefer humans who look like the ones they had, white and SE Asian. They tried middle eastern and Indian and they decided it was too much. and they decided not to even try Africa. But they do have a program in Mexico. I think i listed it April 19th, 2019

>>355333

Yes

>>355328

Details of FUK's failed attempts with the Middle East ans Indians would be a good way of world building as it would show how the FUK government/ambassadors how and why they would reject them. Also aren't there Nagas, jinkos and the Apsaras that look like Indians, Nepalese, Nagaian, and Tibetan folks and likewise would have seen Indian like men before? Hell the cow girls would make the thirsty Indian men revere them as gods and make them get there act together. I could somewhat understand the Middle Eastern like monster girls rejecting most of the Islamic back world, especially Saudi Arabia though though I could not see how FUK would not make use of there angels and Horri girls to get them to open up their borders or mellow out with the JIhad. unless you are planning to write on who has a interest on causing discord on this world. I would like to see how a Islamist would react when he sees a jin of the jar or the more traditional genie though.

>>355340

Also what is FUK's current grasp of human religion and mythology? Also are there mamodos that convert into human religions and are there humans that convert into the mamodo religions?

>>355340

Its largely accepted by all religions that these creatures are not "literal" angels, demons, or jinn. At least officially. There are some individuals who might mistake them as the actual monsters from myth, but most see them as facsimiles who only have a passing resemblance to their namesake.

Christians do not recognize angels as "real" angels, and Muslims do not recognize Houri as "real" Houri, since they do not resemble or act in the ways described in their holy texts.

I guess that'll be my next writing project.

Also going off KC canon, the Apsara is on the main continent with the Order, so is found in generic European land. The Jinko is found in the Mist Continent and deals with Chinese-like people. There aren't any indications that their are pajeets in KC canon

>>355335

>>355328

It might be better to make your own thread on this setting and subject so there can be more focused discussion. Im afraid this will devolve into religion chat again and detract from the thread's purpose. Your setting and the people interrsted in it seem large enough to warrant one

Well, we already have a thread: >>332555

Might as well continue the MG 2020 discussion in that thread (maybe with reposted pastebin links to the MG 2020 stories in this thread?), then create a new MG 2020 discussion/story thread when that one fills up.

I still like the idea that another anon came up with, where a Ryu, Vampire, Pharaoh, and Jabberwocky were all competing over the same man and the Machiavellian shenanigans they pulled on one another to try to get him for themselves.

>>354457

https://pastebin.com/sHBVVhxK

New chapter of Lovesick is out (22), sorry to keep you waiting.

>>355375

Ah, that was me and monster rewrite guy. Yes, I'd like to read that too.

In Dragon's crown there is a quest were some guy wants to prove that hellhounds arent just some vicious beasts and his dream is to hold a hellpup in his arms so he goes out to prove it but was never heard from again. the implications are that he was killed but since this is /monster/ a writefag could write about what REALLY happened

>>355812

I usually avoid writing about the big 5, Hellhound, Cheshire Cat, Manticore, Holstaur, and Kikimora due to everyone else writing about them

But I think I can do that. I'm not familiar with Dragon's Crown. Is it okay if it's its own thing?

>>355815

yes absolutely

I would ask my question in QTDDTOT, but I'll like to ask directly here as it's relevant to the thread.

If you're new to writing or especially interested into writing something involving monstergirls - is it best to write short stories if I'm not confident in my skill or go for huge stories and proofread the hell out of it myself as much as I can, improving my skill while I'm at it? I recall seeing a few posts in the previous thread suggesting that large stories are an ideal approach for beginners but I would like to confirm that first.

>>356380

Ngl it's complete personal preference. I tried with like one short story and the next thing i did was novel length and the thing I'm doing now is fuck long. Do what you think is comfortable. Just remember writing is a skill and you only get better by constantly doing it and reading. And by reading I mean a lot of reading.

>>356380

Alright, so, making a huge story is, without a doubt, the dream of most of us (self-proclaimed writers), but don't fool yourself, writing entire sagas isn't for everyone, I'd even go as far as to say that those who can write even novel-length stories of quality are a rarity.

If you feel like you need help, start small, begin with short greentexts and share them here, ask for criticism and keep what you feel like it's helping you understand your strength and weaknesses.

Repeat that process later with short stories, continue, never stop.

That said, you can definitely start with your dream story and keep improving it either alone or with feedback, I'm just sharing with you what I feel more comfortable with.

>>356380

>wut werks

I'll recommend the usual: short ish stories, shitpost greentext stories, etc ….

>wut werked for you

For me? it was starting a CYOA with literally two sentences worth of planning. Tried to write other things aside from the occasional greentext/shitpost … but it wasn't working. For now? Need the pressure of doing a CYOA in order to get shit done and posted.

>>356397

Now, that's not quite the same things, some stories here will definitely feel "already done", but that's NOT what matters.

What matter is: that your readers enjoy reading it and that you have a good time writing it and sharing it.

So, read more, write more, but most importantly, do what's fun for you. Yeah sure, no one's gonna revolutionize the MonsterGirl Genre by writing yet another "boy meets mystical girl", but some people will still read it, and perhaps it will be their favourite of that kind.

So, if that idea of yours just stays and grow, write it.

Perhaps it will help you see where it's going, or see where it's weak and need revision, perhaps you'll see it can easily be broken into easily digestible chapters, or perhaps not.

You have nothing to lose by writing it down.

'Sharing it might be trickier, in all honesty, it's a matter of personal preference, I know some writefag who just give up if they know someone read their incomplete work).

In short: "Do it for you first, the others are the lucky ones who got it with little effort, you are the worthy one who fought for his reward".

>>356380

I started out writing goofy fanfiction in other communities but when I came here I saw that cool kids wrote CYOA's and I wanted to be a cool kid so I started one and have thus far finished 3 massive CYOA's as well as multiple short stories.

The real thing to think about is how you like to write. For me, there's usually little forethought, I just like to write! It gets me in trouble sometimes but it's fun! Some people need a detailed spreadsheet in order to do it and that's fine too.

The next thing to ask yourself is: How do I stay motivated? A CYOA is nice because once you've started you need to finish it. On one hand you need to finish it for your readers and on the other you need to finish for yourself. A shitty CYOA that finishes is better than a great one that never reaches any conclusion! Consistent schedule helps too, especially to keep people reading.

But what if you don't want that pressure? Well then writing short stories is a great place to start in order to get better at the flow of writing and see what works for you. If you have trouble just randomly pick a Monstergirl and start writing a story. It's a fun exercise and maybe I should bring back Waifu dice…

Anyway, lots of place to go but JUST FINISH A STORY. You'll regret never finishing a story more than finishing one and it's not that great.

>>354681

Yes he is, he's just caught up being a wagecuck normalfaggot

>>356380

story blueplint

Break the process down into pieces like a lego set and build everything up.

Start with a premise. This is what your synopsis will be when you're done writing once you've filled in some details. You should be able to condense it into one sentence. Ideally, it should be something that really interests you and motivates you to write about it. I don't know what stories you like to write but here's two of mine to give you an idea of what a premise might look like.

>Guy crash lands his (space)ship on a somewhat civilized alien planet and tries to survive while getting mixed up in the politics of the planet and ultimately deciding the fate of its people.

>A slice of life story about a guy going to school and work and dealing with monstergirls on a daily basis.

Once you've got that down you can work on a plot. That's essentially the main story beats. It doesn't have to be written in stone but it gives you a roadmap that helps you lead from one point of your story to the next. It's a way of staying on task and should hopefully prevent you from writing yourself into a corner and stave off writers' block.

After that, I'd try to develop the characters you want to have in your story. Write them all down in a character worksheet and use that as a reference when you're writing. You should be able to answer questions about your characters using your worksheet.

>how would the sassy selfish character act in this situation?

>How would they interact with a selfless stoic character?

>how would these characters handle a situation differently?

Basically, you don't want them failing the Plinket test. A big titted milf harpy sounds cool but why should I be invested in her character?

Flush out your characters and don't worry about exaggerating certain aspects of their personality. Just make sure that if the character is flamboyant that they're consistently flamboyant or whatever trait they have (unless you want to portray the character as bipolar or crazy).

Once you've got a cast of characters you can have their traits play off one another. Having characters play off one another's traits is what creates chemistry between characters and this helps make interactions interesting or dramatic and also aids in driving the plot forward as there will typically be conflict occuring between characters of different personality types.

The story blueprint works for epic tales or short stories. Scale it appropriately for your work.

Now you're finally ready to start writing eventually?

also-I use an app called grammarly to help me with my atrocious spelling and grammar issues.

>>356380

Write & read all you can. The more you read, the better you understand how to write your own stories.

One of my major problems is that I start too many stories. I get ideas, flesh out the entire story, then I start writing and think up another idea, flesh that out, write a bit down so I don't forget it, then move back to whatever one I was working on before.

I hate ending a story, because it means I have to move on with the characters that I built. So I always try to leave the story with a little bit of an open end… just in case I want to keep writing at another time.

Anyways, I want to post an update on my own shit. I'm working on a greentext that I started while writing the "How I met my wife" one I rushed the ending on that because I wanted to publish something in my life for once Anyways, Mothgirl immigration is one of the last two I'm writing in greentext format, and the next to be published. I just have to find the time to finish writing it.

Current projects and word counts: (minus the projects which are just ideas at this point and under 3k words)

Greentext formats:

Mothgirl Immigration = 28118 - Mothgirl gets hired in the same office as the MC.

Getting out of the trade = 12086 - Mercenary guard gets tired of his job when he is forced to guard a slave caravan

Non greentext stories:

Strange inheritance = 27735 - Grandfather left his grandson everything, including a tribute from a demon

Seven Days Prologue (Done) = 3075 - This is a CYOA of sorts. Long story short, 7 girls to choose from, and one bad end. The MC is forced to pull a name out of a bag, and whichever name he pulls is to help him acclimate to the new world in seven days.

Seven Days - Elisaveta = 14086 - Kikimora - the first girl in the planned octology.

Putting it all out like this makes me more motivated to finish my shit. I still have my non-monster stories that I'm working on, but those can take a back seat.

>>356533

Nice, but I would have liked to see how the countess monsterized, and how the paige dealt with the about face the counters would have had during the day.

But I did like it

Story pitch:

Dude buys a sexdoll the day before DOTR.

Locked inside his apartment while the world is literally being fucked, he slowly realizes the living label is no longer applied to him alone on his refuge…

>>356690

I don't think she's actually the Count's daughter, anon…

>>356685

If Monsterization was as easy as MGE-lore makes it, I can see this happening every other day. Gave me a spiteful little chuckle, well done!

>>356724

Could be an interesting exploration into the nature of what it means to be 'alive', could be dull as watching paint dry. Love to see what you come up with!

>>354635

Gave this prompt a try, not quite satisfied with it myself, but I hope you all enjoy it nonetheless.

https://pastebin.com/ztqZd583

>>356760

This gave me a heart-on.

>>356760

Cute and sweet, nice work

https://pastebin.com/80eE6Ztr

First time ever publicly writefagging. It's pretty short, but i'd like to see what you all think

>>357259

Given the medium you probably should have put it into a greentext thread. Props to not overtly lewding the manticore outright.

Back to the medium, with greentext brevity is key and you have to really sell the characters and their interactions. If you want to really garner feels you have to be careful with your style. If the story has shitposty bits it can be off putting. Like this line.

>You look around your room, it looks like your Rape-B-Gone air freshener and Mamono repellant had run out

Unless you were going for a shitposty style of story at which point you should just make the whole thing jokey. At other parts it seemed like you wanted to portray a more heartwarming tale. Work on consistency of your theme.

Subjectively the whole shy girl thing doesn't do too much for me. The introduction of the characters was too fast and their time together too short for me to share empathy with them.

>>357259

Cuddly.

I liked the humor; it didn't feel intrusive and felt consistent with the lighthearted but non-trivial tone of the story.

Since I only get a glimpse of the manticore's personality, I'd like to see more of her, either in an extension of this particular encounter or in a continuation afterward. If anything, the teaser-like view I've had so far has gotten me interested since it raises a variety of questions about both characters' personalities (e.g. "cook breakfast for the intruder" is an option I never would have thought of, and therefore the logic/personality behind it is interesting to me).

>>356533

Very nice. I enjoyed this along with your previous works.

>>357319

https://pastebin.com/XbcPuxWq

Here you go.

>>357469

Any wordpress-based site should have an export-to-pdf function baked in IIRC. If you like how it looks on the page, it'll export the same.

One of the primary reasons I use TFT for my shit. (Also because Pastebin runs browser hijack ads which make non-PC browsing an utter cunt.)

>>357469

>>357493

With pdfs you can also post them in the thread so that people can either view them in browser without having to go to another site or download them if they want to. Also, you get italic/bold text, different fonts, all that nice stuff.

>>357493

TFT?

>>357499

Yea pdfs just seem better all around in terms of adding artistic flair and personalization. I'm currently trying to transfer an earlier work onto one. The only issue I have is I can't see how many people have viewed it like I can with pastebin for the arbitrary e-peen growth.

>>357504

>TFT

TouchFluffyTail, the MonsterGirls Repository.

>>357524

Too many furry apologists on that site for my taste.

>>357541

I've seen some /chaos/ tier shit but the owner is pretty anti-fur. I'm sure if you reported blatant fur faggotry he'd nuke it.

>>357554

He doesn't, he had a spat with his discord users about furshit a few weeks back, and the anti furry users got punished for it.

>>357567

Sometimes outside of the chans you have to behave as fellow traveler. The overarching point being that the content isn't exclusively furshit and is mixed in with the bunch. If you're going to mingle in their circle you'll have to take what you like and pass on what you don't care for.

>>357568

Their moderators keep saying monstergirls are furries.

That shows you how the state of their site.

>>357569

This shows you the state of their site.

also there is a slowdown of art competition entries. last one had a few artfags, the site may be good for writers, but it doesn't offer artists anything other than some one night stand and more exposure.

There is better places to get critique for art which is what artists seek.

>>357568

Or just don't use a site that condones furfaggotry. The more power you give them, the further their degeneracy spreads.

Avoid TFT like the plague.

>>357626

Well what other community can you host pdfs pretaining to monstergirls in that will get feedback you're looking for with stat tracking and such? When it comes to pastebin some of my work says it's been viewed 1k times but there's no ratings or comments on pastbin so I just have to rely on what feedback I get in the thread if any.

>>357524

>Touch fluffy tail

Given the state of things touch futa or furry testicles is more appropriate

>>357630

I can only tell you what not to do, and that's to not encourage furfaggotry. Unless you yourself are a furry, in which case, you do not belong on /monster/.

As far as feedback goes, anonymous feedback is the most honest feedback you can get, and you'll only get that on a site like this. You may ask for it, if you seek it. TFT will not offer you earnest feedback as they do not want to alienate writers/artists with criticism, I know this because a moderator himself told me. Your preference entirely depends on whether or not you desire to be coddled.

>stat tracking and such

It also sounds to me like a site similar to reddit/tumblr would be more your speed.

>When it comes to pastebin some of my work says it's been viewed 1k times but there's no ratings or comments on pastbin

Bots cycle through pastebins like crazy, which conflates your view count several hundred fold. Your story was only ever viewed a few times if any at all.

I apologize in advance if I am coming off as rude, but your vanity is misplaced.

>>357567

This is SnowDrake? Not one of the hotpockets on the discord circlejerk? If that's the case I'll be going to him with a very pointed 'please explain' because keeping the furshit out was something he was always strident on.

>>357632

There's only one futa story I know of on the site. it has three parts, but its just one story, and its pretty avoidable. And I don't know one story with a snout

>>357673

>>357630

i mostly lurk around here, but reading around lately I've decided that i will push myself to start writing feedback for the stories I've read from now on

>>354457

Bump with content!

(It's a hastily written Monsterization story).

https://pastebin.com/mfMQ1xcB

>>358161

It was good, but a few questions; why was Amane going to the infirmary in the middle of the night and was this related to your previous stories? Also are your stories written before Feb 23rd, 18 is /monster/ or MGE related or they are your OC stories?

>>358362

>why was Amane going to the infirmary in the middle of the night

The girl isn't thinking straight at all at this point, her reasoning is very confused and she associated "Doc" with "safety".

In my first draft, Amane phones Doc for help, while I liked how scary this version was, I liked better to show how insanely devoted to her friends Amane could be, also my own suspension of disbelief pretty much told me "If the fucker is gonna drive to the karaoke half drunk to pick the girls up, he's just gonna drive them to the nearest hospital and you won't be able to write their dialogue!" So, the short answer: I'm as confused as my characters.

>was this related to your previous stories?

Nope, I'm more at ease writing one-shots than longer stories, despite what the amount of muli-chapters stories scattered in my Pastebin might imply…

>Also are your stories written before Feb 23rd, 18 is /monster/ or MGE related or they are your OC stories?

They are totally unrelated to MG's… That said, most of them follow in one way or another the "boy meets supernatural girl," so there is a little bit of overlap. (blog post and autism spoilered below).

These are all from my time as a resident writefag for /mlp/ on 4chin, I was mostly active on a general that just built its own small-scale ecosystem on unused background human characters. Eventually, the general died a silent anti-climactic death as the content creators grew out of the Pony phase. I took a break from imageboards, only to later discover the existence of a Monster-Girl board while lurking 4chan's /tg/. After getting a feel of the board culture, I took on a few cool-sounding prompts and dusted off my writefag gloves.

I think I'll just clean up the mess in the Bin (regroup the scattered chapters into one), because I don't want to get rid of these things… I wouldn't be the writefag I am now without the horsefuckers.

I just hope some will find cool stuff to read in there.

>>358161

At the end of the day it looks like amane was right, you reaffirmed her suspicions. The monster are dangerous. I wouldn't trust a creature than can transform me and change my behavior that easily

This is the reason why i don't like Monsterization stories, change against your will is a very serous deal, also there are traces of behavior changes. For someone who hated mamono that openly to take the news of his new body that lightly, there should have been a very massive mental change. And that's fucked up.

Amane changes 2 times during this story, the fist time when he became a bully and the second one when she became an Orc. But the difference between the two is that in the fist one the "good" Amane was still there, but in the second one, the "human" Amane is dead

The story is well written, no complains in that field.But for the previously written opinion, i don't like it

>>358378

Good luck making most of these soyboys think otherwise. They're so desperate for any sort of affection and sexual satisfaction that they don't care if they receive it through morally repugnant or piteous means. Sort of like the relationship between a dealer and his favorite customer.

>>358378

>The monster are dangerous.

Let's be honest: yes they are. Amane's worries aren't baseless at all.

>traces of behavior changes. For someone who hated mamono that openly to take the news of his new body that lightly, there should have been a very massive mental change. And that's fucked up.

The ability displayed by "Kaleidoscope" is one of the most insidious kind, the "hippie haze" Amane describes makes the victim too dull to freak out, that's why Amane seems unfazed, the effects fades quickly once the transformation is complete.

>Amane changes 2 times during this story, the fist time when she became a bully and the second one when she became an Orc. But the difference between the two is that in the fist one the "good" Amane was still there, but in the second one, the "human" Amane is dead.

In truth, Orc Amane is closer to her "freshman" years. I failed to convey that Amane doesn't hate Monsters, she is jealous and honestly fears that one will steal Doc before she can graduate (notice the friendship between Kirumi and Doc, it probably fueled Amane's distaste of MG's).

>The story is well written, no complains in that field.But for the previously written opinion, i don't like it

Thank you very much for your comment.

See, that's the kind of criticism I like, because in my head I have the pieces I need to make the story not as creepy as it currently is. Should I return to this kind of story, I would use your comment to fix the unsettling parts and make it 100% wholesome.

You have my gratitude.

>>358421

Now just wait a minute friendo, I might be a degenerate (for the exact reason >>358393 mentionned), but I'm neither a soyboy nor a nigger unable to do some self-reflection.

Yes, my story is fucked up, thank god it's fiction.

>>358428

I've seen this "Racism toward monsters is bad guys" plot-line in multiple stories, and the autor never fully fleshes out the reason why it's not based in factual evidence, sometimes it even reaffirms the suspicions of the "racist".

It reeks of lefty fantasy fanfiction. Put some thought into it, or it will end up feeling like a caricature

For example, there is a story in TFT about a tanuki masquerading as a human, in the story your shown how bad humans are for not trusting monster but then in the next paragraph you have a tanuki being a crime lord, a dragon stealing a child or the main girl in the story deceiving a whole company, lying to their friends and screwing around with his coworker. At the end the lies end up catching up to her so that part was resolved realistically, but i didn't feel like the "human skepticism" was correctly resolved.

I really liked that author's work specially the story about the harpy, but the tanuki one felt really rushed in with ham-fisted plotlines.

>>358374

I think that the draft premise would had work better than the finished draft. For one, the doctor and Amane does have a attraction and a bond to each other even though it is strained by her new behavior and actions (being a gyaru and a bully), I think that he would had listen to her and not take her to the hospital if she called him to get her and her friends; feelings and attraction after all make you not do the rational things. After all, Amane was blind with envy which lead her to hate monsters . I think more things should have been written in, like how she liked to box, her reasons for quitting, how protective she was to her friends, the doctors relations to the boxing club and and so on. personally I think there is plenty of plot in this story alone. The only thing that bothered me is that you mention that she was a traditional Japanese beauty but I do not think that that archetype would had work for her as Amane is like a ox after all. When I heard that she became a gayru I thought the story would turn her in to a Kejourou, Nurarihyon, or even a Nureonago (just due to the storm setting) to return her into a Yamato Nadeshido like lady. Also would it not be a good idea to make a new paste bin for /monster/ material instead? you only got three.

>>358378

He already answered you but I the story already mention that forced monsterization was frowned upon and it is taken seriously. Also Amane instigated the fight against the monsters in the first place, play stupid games win stupid prizes. Also the doctor does not act upon his attraction to his students or Amane because he is a teacher. It was only at the end of the story and the near end of the school year that he acts on his attraction to her solely, unless Raintype intends to write more and get Amane's friend (the single one) to make a polygamous relationship the doc which could make sense as one the high orc gets dominated the lower orcs get weak, submissive and horny, but that is up to Raintype to write.

I know monsterization is the most questionable thing in MGE but as long as the story reflects the tone and context of the subject matter than it is fine. for example, in Amy Love/Game Show Lillim, https://pastebin.com/LJffVYMs the subject matter was written in a light hearted matter but at the same time show how heavy the change was even though most of the changes where positive and acknowledge that it metamorphosis can have negative affects

>>358421

I think soyboys would be against monsterization due to human feminism indoctrination.

>>355815

its been a while. you didnt forget about that story did you?

>>358707

I'm not a huge fan of such stories, but I can safely say that it was written with care.

It's a bit of a fairly well-known tale, but a refresher is always welcome.

There are a few mistakes, but nothing terrible.

>>358727

Thank you. By mistakes, did you mean in terms of details to the original story or some sort of narrative or logical mistakes?

>>358794

Nah, I mean small typing errors or grammatical ones.

>>358707

Was making me feel part of your plan?

I already knew how it would end just from the description but it still hit me.

>>358707

The mixture of world building and story was a bit odd. Are you planing on continuing writing in this setting? i liked the setting.

Although the meat of the story wasn`t very original, the mixture of the Hachiko story with a kobbold really was well implemented.

>>358860

I'm going to write more in this setting, yeah. There's a lot of notes and details I have written down for it but especially with such a small scale story I feel it's better to not mention anything that's not relevant to the plot. I might write up some sort of explanation of the setting and its history leading up to the 21st century (when most of anything I write will likely be set) at some point down the line.

This greentext is based on an alternate universe for the After The End mod for CK2, where mamono arrive in America shortly after a nuclear war. See the World building and settings thread for more information.

>Be me

>Tech-priest of the Mechanist Church

>Get sent out to the middle of the boonies in order to establish a new shrine.

>Find out during the middle of the journey that you’re being sent to a village of werewolves.

>Silently debate on whether or not to jump out the car window.

>When you arrive there’s a gaggle of Wolf girls staring at me and whispering.

>Get greeted by huge, burly guy covered in tattoos.

>Apparently he’s the chieftain of the village.

>Shows you to the building that will serve as the shrine.

>Pats you on the back and wishes me luck.

>In the middle of setting up when you get interrupted by three werewolves.

> “So, is it true what they say about you guys?”

> “Is what, true?”

> “that if we pin you down and fuck you, we get a wish!”

>You don’t have a chance to reply before they grab me and drag me behind the building.

>They nearly rip your robes of in order to get at your cock.

> “Oh, you’re a big one ain’t ya!” She say before taking a long, slow lick of your shaft.

> She evidently decides not to and aligns herself with the head before slamming down.

> she begins to ride your cock with reckless abandon while the other two hold you down.

>They take turns with fucking you for two and a half hours.

>They eventually all finish and settle down next to your exhausted body.

> “I can’t believe that we were lucky enough to get to the wizard first” says the one on top of you.

> “Yeah, the others are gonna be so jealous when we get our wish” replies the one to your left.

> you eventually find the strength to speak up. “I’m not a wizard”

>Their eyes all widen and they slowly look towards you.

> “….what?” Asks the one to your right.

> “I’m not a wizard, I’m a tech-priest of The Mechanist Church.”

> “Oh. So no wish then?” Asks the one on top in a highly disappointed voice.

> “Probably not” you reply.

> “Then, do you mind if we stay like this for while?” Asks the one to your left.

> “I don’t see why not” you eventually reply.

>The four of you stay there until you finally fall asleep with three smiling wolf girls in your arms.

I’m surprised I haven’t found any pieces of writefaggotry on the kiki vs. shog dispute aside from that one chapter of the panty raider story.

>>359106

So it’s like an inverse harem MC in that he is widely successful but is even gayer because unlike the harem MC he has no zero interest in the pussy around him.

>>359176

hey! that`s a really good idea. I might give it a try, at least the cooking part

why do people keep referring to monster girls as mamono instead of just saying monster girls or monsters? seeing mamono in a story kind of takes me out of it. same thing with mamono mana which could be demonic energy or monster mana

>>359679

Because that's the term KC uses in MGE. In a story set in the MGE universe it should be used. Otherwise you're correct, its trash.

>>359679

How new are you? It’s KC’s term and sounds much more fluid than monster or demonic. Besides if a single word is throwing you out of a whole story maybe the problem is with you.

>>359691

to me the opposite is true.

>>359695

What dialect do you have where “mawns-ter gir-lz” is more fluid than “ma-ma-no”? There are more syllables and the stressed syllable in “ter” sharply interrupts flow. “De-mon-ic” starts with a stressed syllable and ends on a hard c.

>>359698

I know its the KC term but personally i prefer monsters. I guess he calls them momano cause they were monsters but now their monster girls so he is using that name to show that they are different now. Just a thought i had now

>>359698

In my opinion if the world being used is distinctly not MGE, it's a good idea to use either an new in universe term for monstergirls or just call them monsters or just monstergirls. Mamono really should be used in stories that follow MGE either 1 to 1 or very closely, otherwise for the sake of creativity just make up something. Also mamono is one of a few japanese words for monster, so honestly unless in your story all monsters first come from japan the word isn't well fit for most context outside of a a heavily MGE compliant work. All in my humble opinion of course.

>>359698

I just refer to MG's as monsters if generalizing about a group of MG's ('the market was busy today with monsters and humans going about their shopping'). For /tg/ style monsters I can always use different language … abomination is the first thing that comes to mind. Since context is also a thing I can also apply the word monster in the /tg/ sense as well. As in a MG calling someone a monster in reference to something that said person did

>>359136

Have a silly short story about Maids and rivalry:

https://pastebin.com/4uvPTHES

This is mostly to officially announce my new Pastebin for the MonsterGirls stories only.

I'd like a redo of the Tanuki Dating service where you answer questions and see what you get.

>>360494

Can't wait for the also sudden appearance of the elves on the rapeolympics

https://pastebin.com/2vEerc7k

Can I get some comments/ criticisms on my story please? I updated it and want to get some comments.

>>360993

Your setting and characters are really interesting, keep it up! Im not the writing type so I dont have any technical critcisms, and story wise nothing stuck out to me.

>>360993

> death row inmates doing weird government experiment bullshit.

Thats kinda cliched, real governmental work uses private security since they can keep their mouths shut compared to your average civies.

Scp often does it wrong too, most countries would use POW's to keep their logs clean, people are kinda autistic over inmates and where they end up. a missing or dead soldier is of no consequence to people

>>360993

This would be the third time I've read your story.

And most of the criticism i have is autistic shit, just details. The setting is inspired by SCP RIP so the the ineptitude and shit protocolsare part of the setting.

Also, JUST UPDATE IT ALREADY, I'm tired of reading it again every time you post the pastebin to make sure that you didn't add anything

>>360927

>>361015

Fucking Elves at the RapeOlympics.

>The announcer's voice echoes in the stadium:

>"The NorthEnd Kingdom."

>The delegation walks proudly showered by the cheers of the public.

>Carrying the Flag is a true mountain of muscles under thick red scales, the Dragon Captain smiling confidently.

>Besides her are a voluptuous succubus with a perfect hourglass figure, her sharp eyes already scanning the crowd for a potential partner; an Apophis slithering with dangerous grace betraying lightning fast reflexes and inhumane dexterity; a Manticore twirling a leather collar around her index finger while her tail flexes rythmically, flaunting her barbs and the droplets of venom they produce; and many more women with eyes brimming of honeyed promises of heavenly agony.

>And in the middle of this group of predatory monsters, a single Elf, not even a Dark Elf, a frail, girly, delicate wood Elf.

<"Thank you so very much for vouching for me, cousin, I'm not very knowledgeable in this 'rape'-thing, but I'll do my best."

>"Don't you worry, you'll do just fine."

<"Well, I am kinda anxious, I don't even know which Trial I'm taking part in."

>"It's fine, you'll have a partner for it, just follow their lead."

<"Oh, that's a relief. When will I get to meet 'em?"

"Now if you'd like, name's Anon. I'll be your mate for the ahegao trial, lookin' forward to it."

<"(Oh my ancestors, he's hot! Keep it together girl, you're on national TeleVision) H-hi, nice to meet you, w-when the ceremony's over would you like to go g-grab a drink t-together?"

"Didn't you know, we're up immediately after the ceremony."

<"R-really? Then, how about right after?"

"Oh sweetie, we'll have ample time to know eachother after I've fucked you into submisson."

<"O-Oh… I see… can I just have a minute to go freshen up a little before we start?"

"Trying to run away?"

<"Y-yes?"

"I see you're starting to understand the spirit of the RapeOlympics."

>*ding-dong*

>"LADIES AND GENTLEMEN, THANK YOU FOR YOUR PATIENCE. THE 2nd RAPEOLYMPICS GAMES HAVE NOW OFFICIALLY BEGUN! AS PER TRADITION WE WILL START IMMEDIATELY WITH THE FREE FOR ALL TO AHEGAO! ON YOUR MARKS! SET! GO!"

>It's at this precise moment that the Elf understood why the games were retransmitted so late in the night.

>>361062

>free for all adhego

Gave me a chuckle.

i think freestyle adhego sounds better given Olympic context imo

>>361254

Let me guess, the guy ends up getting dominated in the end

>>361268

>be anon

>visit majority femdom board

>”There’s too much femdom.”

>does nothing

>>361268

If I could ask, are you saying that because you don't like femdom, or because my stories are too predictable?

>>361314

Both

>>361327

Understood. Thanks for the notice.

http://touchfluffytail.org/?story=twilight-of-the-gods-mnemosyne-4

The Conclusion to Twilight of the Gods, in which the author engages in shameless fanservice and navel-gazing.

Sahnate! Pora! Reitia Dei In Excelsius!

>>361332

>>361314

I think it's less your stories being predictable and more monstergirl stories in general being predictably femdom-based given the source material. Anyway, I enjoy your stories and always look forward to what you produce, but I think I can see where that anon is coming from.

>>361276

There's femdom and then there's being a complete bitch with no redeeming qualities, the monster girl in the story fell sqaurely in the latter, and as typical of the author the mc is a complete bitch

Been slowly picking at something for the past few years. Writing is something of a grind for me, so I apologize for the slowness.

https://pastebin.com/UALr8Et6

>>361588

I'm intrigued and will keep an eye open for later updates.

Sadly not much to comment on yet, aside from that you convey a pretty good sense of "usual ambient odditty" which is very fitting with the main character.

>>361588

Not bad at all. I'll keep an eye out to see where this goes.

>>361354

That being said it's also important that the author actually like what he's doing, so if he wants femdom them bring it on.

Please, good femdom is relatively hard to come by, and loving femdom seems almost exclusive to here

Here's the wild pitch for the day.

All male Survival reality TV, but the contestants are dropped into MGE world without their knowledge to see how would a random guy fare.

>>361684

What would the selection criteria/priority for the contestants be?

>>361685

Someone not liable to fall over and die within 5 minutes without mod-cons?

>>361685

Wholly inexpert people, to give the new world the wrong idea of who is entering into their turf, before the privately funded and organized invasion and colonization.

>>361692

So what? Lots of people have the same names. It makes sense.

>>361696

Because it looks like I’m being unoriginal.

Fair enough. I just don’t want to seem more unoriginal than others.

>>361699

Make a variation on the name. Now make infinite variations on the name. It's your own writer quirk now!

>>361693

Last man standing wins a car. It's a military grade jeep, packed to the brim with MREs, and an advice to go make his own fortune, because the technology to bring him back from that side has not been brought yet.

>>361588

i somewhat lost track of the slime's form during some scenes, but that might be my shitty english.

keep up the good work

https://pastebin.com/q5L7F0ma

Hey, I remembered that story I was writing. And forgot I can't write fights to save my life.

>>355361

Hello everyone. I haven't been around for a while. I pumped out another story, but I'm not as satisfied with it as I usually am. But it does reveal a little more about my setting, and uses a poorly underutilized monster, the Girtablilu. Sexy Scorpions need love too you know?

http://touchfluffytail.org/?story=the-scorpions-sting

please read and tell me what you think. I know it gets kind of lazy near the end, but I felt that if I held on to it any more I'd never finish it.

>>355370

I don't think I write fast enough to have a thread all my own. But I might do that in the future.

Anyone has the story about the gigolo and the kitsune, i remember saving it, but for some reason i don't know where i put it

>>361661

Pretty good, way better than the other story you posted earlier.

Is there some sort of master pastebin with just links to stories? It's really clunky to look through archives, and if I'm not mistaken most things here aren't posted on TFT. If there isn't, I might consider making one in a few days, with the name and some tags (like what girls it features) on the same line to make it searchable.

>>362112

Well, there's always anubis.moe.

>>362113

That has name and author, but still no way to see what it's actually about at a glance, or warn you off if it has things you distaste. That does raise a question though; should I include those /jp/ pastebins?

>>362115

I think they're quite outdated, but there is what there is.

>>361978

http://seafoam.pbworks.com/w/page/77839289/Pretty%20Human

This one?

>>361973

That was fun. The part were she walked on top of the maze was clever. Nice to see a monster girl use her abilities intelligently.

>>361964

Damn, I was hoping I was making that clear.

Oh well, Taylor loses track of her own form a lot.

>>361332

just in case the above kind of feedback is discouraging, here is me chiming in to point out that some of us do like femdom, and when it comes to reading our fetish fuel, 'predictable' becomes a very positive 'reliable'

>>362120

yeah, this one. Thanks a lot

>>361973

Did you written this one in a hurry?

Some details where explained twice. I felt like the father took the raping to well, i expected more resistance form his part

Also like you said in the TFT post this feels like the worst one you've written yet.

Now passing to a more positive vibe

The introduction to the drug explains how the more "passionate" mamonos contain themselves, i will probably add this to the story i'm writing in your setting.

Also the mamono movement was well applied

>>362196

Thanks for the kind words. I still very much intend to keep writing femdom, but I'll try and make the MGs a little more sympathetic in future.

>>361661

Much better than your previous story

>>362202

No one is telling you to stop writing what you want to write but when your stories can easily be summed up as

>Insert pussywhipped mc

>Insert complete cunt of a mamano

>mc pathetically screams "no" while he is dominated

>End story

It gets old pretty quickly

>>362199

Yeah, I lost the desire to finish it a while ago, but it was nearly done, so I just tried to get an ending and pop it off. I'll try not to do that in the future.

I thought the pill was a good idea, but the one fellow seemed upset at that. But I think there's going to be natural discrepancies when trying to adapt the MGE to even my very benign non-gritty realism

>>362170

thanks, I was trying to just make a simple one-shot guy gets raped story.

>>362202

manyeyedhydra has kept his H-Space series up for over a year.

Every installment cant be summed up as

>Insert RedShirt soldier exploring H-Space

>Insert a monster girl

>Monster girl rape-kills the soldier.

>end story

Within that short summary there is apparently a huge amount of possible variance with regards to different fetishes. Granted there does need to be some substantial variance

I am one of those fans that wish he would try out softer femdom in that series - great for vore fetishes, but it also means no persistent relationships ever

>>362213

until you described what happened I didn't get that it was specifically him going along with his natural urges that gave her the power-up she needed to start using her magic.

I did notice you described her eyes as lighting up with energy after she swallowed, but since she was initially described as

> almost identical to her shining eyes.

I didn't connect that it was a detail that changed due to the sex.

Without getting that detail, the story first came across more as 'guy never had a chance' rather than 'guy fucked up'

>>362208

The guy that was complaining about the use of the word rape? he seemed gifted by the autism fairy.

The pill it's a solution to the problem. That pill even exist in some way now, anti-psychotic pill fuck you up good

>>361973

I like the idea of the pill but besides that this was definitely your worst story so far

>>362213

You might not have written him as "pussywhipped" but the ease of which the domination happened and with the end result he might as well have been written like that, and I suppose a mamano being a complete cunt does fall into the realm of femdom

>>362228

Yeah, that's fair.

Hey, I have a question for other writers. When you have an idea, and you really like it, but just can't seem to write without being in the proper mood, how do you get over that? I've written while not particularly interested or when I've lost the mood, and it always seems to negatively affect the work.

How do I just power through that and still maintain quality? Do I just wait until I'm back in the mood, or is there a way to induce it? Or was I right to just write regardless, and then wait until I'm back in the mood to fix the crap I wrote while I was just powering through it?

>>362336

If I'm tired of a story I'm writing and want to write something else usually I'll do that and come back later. As far as not being in the mood to write in general, I'd say it's fine to take breaks if you really need to, although it's best to be writing frequently so you keep in the habit of doing it if that makes any sense at all.

>>362336

>How do I just power through that and still maintain quality?

If you can power through not being in the mood and still produce something you're happy with, you're a better writer than I am. Personally, when I'm not feeling like writing, or Ihave an idea that I like but can't seem to turn into a proper story, I just sit back and wait for inspiration to return. Sooner or later, it does.

>>362336

I'd suggest writing anyways. You could always expand on something, even if you don't plan to show it to anybody. You mentioned it negatively affecting the work, but that can be fixed, plus it gives you something to do. I haven't written in more than a year, so I'd say it gets harder to get back into it the longer you don't write.

I'm going to sound retarded but I'm not too familiar with the board so I'm asking this. Why does every post say violated hero but them some say Opie?

>>362416

You are a newfriend.

You can give yourself a name if you fill the name section. Dont do it unless you're shilling and need to be recognized. Only fags use names or tripcodes.

>>362417

Not actually new just never been around when a thread saw movement. I dont want to be the guy who responds on a months old dead thread. Thanks tho

>>362416

What do mean Violated Hero is a name of a individual while Opie is the anonymous name

>>362421

>>362420

cease thine faggotry

>>362422 (nice dubs)

Just wanted to fuck with him

>>362112

So I opened a new browser window and a few dozen stories (Starting from the first archived writefag thread) and did the first couple to see how my setup looked and worked.

Let me know if you want any of this different. I'm doing it in excel so that I can easily resort it later (so for example first by dom party then alphabetically by name).

Title Author Monster Girls Dom Party Tags Contains sex?

Worker Ant Wife gundam80 Ant Female Smell, Sweat Yes

Thicker Than Blood Acethewritefag Lizard, Hellhound Headpatting No

I'll have to figure out something to get it to actually format correctly. Does pastebin allow tab spacing?

>>362553

I noticed that prompt in the shipgirls thread, I think I'll take this one.

"Re-class' amazingly wholesome and romantic exploration of the surface world."

>be wurm

>no husbando

>go looking for husbando

>can't find husbando

>sun is setting

>be sad wurm

>losing hope of ever finding husbando

>run into signpost *ouch*

>look at sign

<Manget St.

>manget?

>man-get?!

>like a place to GET a MAN?!?!

>perfect

>wait at sign for man to get

>it's really dark now

>still waiting

>…

>about to give up

>…

>wait…

>there's a MAN!

>and he's walking this way!

>he's walking kinda funny…

>he walks right up and starts talking!

<hey, how mucMMph!

>Grab husbando and run home!

>the sign worked!

>happy wurm

this story is brought to you by a street sign and a boring commute

>>362632

I chuckled, thanks friend.

>>361588

I liked it. Very interested to see where it goes. Interestingly, I had the exact opposite reaction as >>361964 . I felt like the descriptions captured the ever changing nature of a slime girl, especially the panicked locomotion parts.

>>362412

Fun. I usually don't like the alternate settings as much but I think it worked for that piece.

Not a comment on your work, but it did make me think about a plot issue for monster girl stories. How does, or should, a writer balance the monster girl character not just being a mindless rapist who marries the very first guy she sees versus not having monster girls be hypergamous?

>>362710

Thanks for reading the story, man.

>How does, or should, a writer balance the monster girl character not just being a mindless rapist who marries the very first guy she sees versus not having monster girls be hypergamous?

This is a complex question, and IMHO I think it depends on what kind of story you want to write. If you're just writing a small one-shot, I don't really see the issue with the MG proactively dating the first guy she can get her claws on.

If, on the other hand, you're writing a longer story, then what I like to do is introduce a good number of male characters that the MG might encounter, but have one of them be escpecially appealing to her for whatever reason - like there's a connection between them, almost love at first sight. Maybe he does something specific to earn her attention, maybe it's just the kind of man he is, whatever. The point is, she then has a sole focus for her attempts at struggle-snuggle.

>>362731

That does once again, depend on the story being written. Many people see KC type Monsters as the rapists but you can just… not write them that way, or make there be societal pressures, etc not to do that. Or maybe she has other reasons?

When making them more even tempered, you'll just have to walk the fine line between writing a girl who is a Monster and a Monster who is a girl. Not that the former isn't too bad.

>>362732

Well, while the concept of a spergy MG who can't get a man by herself is nothing new here, I would caution any new writer against going too far away from the core principles of a monstergirl - namely, they they really want a man, one man, and depending on the species they can be quite forward about it.

As far as 'societal pressures' for an MG not to rape go, by all means write it. Stories about pitting monstergirs against the SJW mindset have been fairly popular recently, so perhaps that could be interesting. You can always choose a type of monster that's more on the submissive end of the spectrum if you want a girl who's not all about hunting down a husbando.

>>362733

There's also the idea that some only want types of men who might be relatively rare, e.g. in one story I read recently a hellhound couldn't find any men who didn't want to fuck her, and had no desire to rape the willing.

>>362710

>How does, or should, a writer balance the monster girl character not just being a mindless rapist who marries the very first guy she sees versus not having monster girls be hypergamous?

MGE sets up a scenario world where there are a lot of potential ways to interpret relationship dynamics and how they would make people behave.

And there are parallels to real world personal problems to be drawn.

For example, some guys in the real world have issues based on their insecurity about the possibility of being influenced too much by their dicks - as in fear of girls exploiting sexual allure to manipulate them.

Given how strong their sex drive is written in MGE, I could easily see monster girls resenting that part of their succubus-grafted nature, the neediness they feel and most of all the potential for a man to exploit that neediness. A girl like that might fight her instincts pretty hard.

Also let's not forget that a lot of humans are assholes and wouldn't hesitate to exploit the needy part of monster girl nature as MGE portrays it - wouldn't be too uncommon to meet monster girls with history of rather negative experiences.

Also the powerful ones might still be pretty competitive regarding quality of potential mates - even if their sex-drive is high and they are in fact rape-machines, doesn't mean they can't have standards.

>>362632

>wurm

>run

still a nice (short) short story though

>>363023

Yeah, it's pretty terrible. I've heard someone from here is trying to make a new monster girl repository for us that isn't TFT but I'm not sure how long it'll take him to make it.

>>363022

Thanks, glad you liked it.

>>363023

Something that might be a cause for concern from the FAQ:

>At this moment in time we do not delete pastes that do not have an expiration date. But in the future we might automatically delete pastes that have not been viewed by anyone in more than 6 months. Again, this is not something we are doing at this moment. But we might start doing it in the future. PRO users will never have their posts automatically removed due to inactivity.

Now, they say they aren't currently deleting inactive pastes, but who knows. Of course, it's equally likely that it could be people who deleted their accounts for whatever reason, and all the pastes with it.

>>363032

Every consecutive pastebin account being deleted in the first writefag thread seems very unlikely to me.

>>363035

In that case shits fucked.

Does anyone here have any especially favorite stories / fics? Any that stand out the most?

>>363138

I remember this one. Not personally a fan of greentext stories but for a greentext it's not half bad.

>>363137

Lock, Croc and Two Smoking Barrels

https://pastebin.com/n7wZkdNU

OK writing and enjoyable characters, also pretty long, I find myself always coming back to this one.

>>363173

>I see Something

>No shoggy BAD END

Slightly disappointed. I liked it up to the end though.

>>363206

Contest it was for required a good end

>>363035

I opened every one in the first thread and "only" about 1/3rd were dead links.

>>363032

Most important thing for any writefag using pastebin: BACK UP YOUR SHIT SOMEWHERE THAT ISN'T PASTEBIN

>>363563

It's one thing if someone's stuff gets taken down but they're still active in these threads and can post backups, what worries me is people who aren't active anymore for whatever reason, they'll likely never know.

>>363569

>>363563

>>363561

What happened to Ammit's Library? We were supposed to be saving content there. Anyone still have the link?

>>363570

http://ammits-library.wikia.com/wiki/Ammit%27s_Library_Wiki

This?

>>363569

When this sort of thing rolls around it's better to show a tiny bit of foresight beforehand. That way there isn't any "oh shit" moments, that's what I'm concerned about.

>>363572

I think people forgot about it after we got anubis.moe.

>>364038

>Can ordinary modern setting men, in a story, subdue or defeat more powerful monsters (Dragon type, Pharaoh, Vampire and the likes) on their world without appearing as Mary Sues? Assuming no military experience.

Through physical might, yes this would make him a mary sue. If he win's through cunning and knowledge (as long as it's not super genius level) Then I'd say no.

>>364038

>Can ordinary modern setting men, in a story, subdue or defeat more powerful monsters (Dragon type, Pharaoh, Vampire and the likes) on their world without appearing as Mary Sues? Assuming no millitary experience.

I don't see an issue with it, really the only people that would complain about it are the femdomfags, you could justify it by giving monster girls a global nerf in whatever you are creating, its your story you do what you want with it.

>>364038

As >>364043 pointed out, it depends on your setting, and you're free to write dragons as not being outrageously OP.

>>363598

Huh. I hadn't actually heard of anubis.moe until now, yet it seems to have a lot of the recent writefagging on our board.

Lost and Found

https://pastebin.com/nvke42FX

Tags: Baphomet, Smut, Siblings, Not Blood Related™

Synopsis: Baphomet ends up lost in a forest. She isn't too miffed about it, but ends up finding something that has been with her since long ago without realizing.

>be married to demoness

>have demoness daughters

>oldest finds out about contracts one day

>teaches her sisters

>buried in papers

>wife thinks it's adorable

>get pretty good at parsing them after I accidentally sign one promising a day out at the amusement park.

>the tears when I had to explain that we couldn't afford it…

>have to start adding riders on the ones asking for outings stating they can't happen until savings account reaches $x

>saving is slow though…

>daughters accept the wait, but I can tell they're bummed about it

>time goes on

>one day I get a letter from a law firm inviting me to interview with them.

>wut?

>call the office thinking this must be a mistake, I've never studied law.

>receptionist says it's no mistake and that they are well aware of my qualifacations (or lack thereof)

>end up with interview scheduled for next morning

>show up wearing my only suit (from my wedding, glad it still fits)

>feel awkward

>I'm told to wait in a meeting room

>feel very awkward

>the partners walk in

>the interview starts off with small talk and I relax a bit

>The the managing partner says he has a small test

>relaxation.exe does not exist

>he hands me some papers

>it's a contract

>he asks me to look through it and tell me if I see anything less than straightforward about it.

>I skim through it and find a few misleading statements

>I point them out and am handed another

>I find some other potential problems

>they're less obvious, about on the level my youngest might try to sneak in

>contracts keep coming and I keep finding things

>they're getting better though

>after almost an hour it's finished

>the partners step out for a few minutes

>I sit and sweat

>the managing partner steps back in. alone.

<Anon, I'm happy to say that you preformed admirably in the test. I'd like to offer you a job.

>wut

<now there's just the matter of your pay and when you can start

>"Before we talk about that, I'd really like to know why you sent that letter."

<you are married to a demoness, corret? we've found that thier husbands tend to…pick up some things about contracts.

>"I find it hard to belive that you send job offers to every guy that married a demoness. Plus a lot of those guys are probably with a demoness because they suck at reading contracts."

>"you also never answered my question: why me?"

<*sigh* fine. my son and your oldest daughter go to the same school.

<They became friends.

<long story short my son comes home one day with a signed contract saying, among other things, that I must give you an interview.

<I didn't have to abide by it, but it would make my son happy and if you could deal with contracts like the one my son handed me you had a chance at being useful.

<And based on your preformance you will be. Now let's talk about when you can start.

>I started the next week.

>at triple my previous pay

>saving goes a lot faster now

>daughters get to do fun things

>…I enroll in some classes, but the work is interesting so I don't mind

>overall life is good

>>356389

>>356380

>ask for criticism

Pretty much this. I started doing my writefagging here after my friend told me about this site and board. He apparantly did heavy writefagging (80k+words on pastebin) over at the wan thread and told me that if I wanted to try something, I had to do it here.

I read through some of the greentext stories written here and the most usual responses are "Nice." or "I like it, please continue." and not really genuine commentary. These kinds of feelings tends to kill people that want to try writing and aspire to it. So honestly, any criticism over a long-written story would usually be appreciated for those writing and reading.

>>365227

Here's my take on it:

The anons who contribute writefagging (as a general rule) are doing a good enough job that I don't feel the need to criticize. It's not that I don't care enough to offer feed back, it's more along the lines of "this anon did well enough to write this, I can forgive the errors" thinking. So I'm guilty of not offering objective, constructive advice a large amount of the time. Now if something verboten pops up and I have the time? You bet your ass I'll shitpost at the anon. Generic high school NTR dramafest #25164561454 has no place on this board, and I know the rest of you fags jump on those retards as well.

Hard part is remembering to offer feedback to writefags who are asking for said legit comments. Going to have to work on that in general.

>>365235

Yeah, but there are some writefags here that use this board to genuinely improve their writing skills and hope for comments/critiques, and at most it's just in the realm of "I like it".

What would be nice is if someone would say what parts they liked and what parts they disliked, to give a good view on what to improve. For instance, if character development is lacking, feels 2-dimensional and boring, the setting is too small/no proper use of world building, etc.

I'm going to apologize in advance for posting wordswordswords but I'm somewhat too embarrassed to make a pastebin to post my things for anyone but you faggots so I'm going to post it here directly. Delete it if necessary,

"C'MON BRAUN YOU GOTTA LET ME FUCK HER"! The gaunt bandit Aldus bellowed this vulgar sentence as he leered over his group's latest capture. Their quarry consisted of one Dark Elf whom they had captured during a slave raid. There was only a handful of them, but they made up for their lack of manpower with absolute cruelty and a total disregard for life of all kinds. "Don't be an idiot!", retorted Braun. "Everybody knows that iris of a Dark Elves'eyes turn from black to gold only when they lose their virginity. We have ourselves a certified virgin Dark Elf man! When we get her back to the Badlands, we can find a buyer and sell her for a ton of cash. We can live like Kings if you can just keep it in your fucking pants!" A frustrated whimper emanated from Aldus. "BUT BRAUN JUST LOOK AT HER," he cried. Chained to the wall knelt a lovely young woman. Their prisoner was indeed beautiful. Her body was slim and tight due to her livelihood in the forest. Her tanned skin almost seemed golden and it was wonderfully contrasted by her dark hair and eyes. Her face was incredibly pleasing as well. It was one of those faces that when looked upon it didn't necessarily excite the loins, but rather made men grateful to be men because such beauty is pleasing to the sex. But her body's allure was accentuated by the fact that her captors had dressed her in a manner they thought would be pleasing to potential clients. A brass brazier adorned with jewelery clung to her perfect breasts and a similar device embraced her nethers. Dressed as some sort of "slave princess," not much was left to the imagination. Aldus bent over with lecherous eyes and attempted to stroke her hair.

>>365256

"Do not touch me, filth!" barked the young woman. "You set flame to my people's home and jeprodised many lives just so you could take me and make me another's plaything? I am fortunate that your greed outweighs your lust, else I would have slain myself earlier! You are doing nothing more than buying me time! My father will come for me!" The cavernous hideout erupted with laughter. "Holy shit Darius!", one voice cried out, "How much oil did you use?! You were supposed to create a distraction, not torch the whole place ahaha!" Braun motioned his band to quiet down. "Listen missy," he chortled. "We are at least three days ahead of anyone who tries to track us down. Even if someone managed to find us, we are the notorious Blackfoot Gang! No one is brave or stupid enough to take us on!" Hearty cheers from Braun's companions echoed through the cavern walls. Lizette started to feel quite discouraged. But she had resolved to press on until there was no hope left. Until she was sure that her fate was sealed, she would live for the sake of her father who she knew loved her very much and would exhaust every option he had to see her safe. The dull Aldus's voice bellowed once again. "BRAUN PLEASE. I'LL GIVE YOU MY SHARE OF THE LOOT. JUST LET ME HAVE HER. WE WOULD STILL GET PLENTY OF GOLD. JUST LOOK HOW HARD I AM." Braun reluctantly looked down. Indeed there was steel erupting from Aldus's body. But it wasn't his manhood standing firm. Aldus had been stabbed clean through from behind with a short sword. A dull moan left his throat, then he was no more.

>>365257

"WH-THE FUCK?!" exclaimed Braun. Similar cried were heard from his band of rouges. Their shock wore off and their focus shifted to a stranger cleaning the dull brute's blood off his sword. "Lo' boys," was all he said, not even bothering to look up from his current task. With his teeth clenched Braun roared, "DON'T JUST STAND THERE CUT HIM DOWN." The bandits had him outnumbered thirteen to one, but this stranger was incredibly skilled. He adeptly killed four bandits through superior swordsmanship alone but was eventually surrounded. Seeing he was at a disadvantage, he reached into his pocket and procured a peculiar looking orb. The stranger then covered his eyes and the orb emitted a brilliant flash of light. The bandits eyes became useless as they swung blindly into the air. He then took out another five in this manner. Braun screamed in rage. "FUCKING CHEAP TRICKS! KILLHIMKILLHIMKILLHIMKILLHIM." The stranger only had a few more to slay. He stood in a strange stance and whispered strange words. It became apparent he knew of wind magik as a violent gust suddenly blew away from him. This gust extinguished all the torches that once illuminated the cavern. Complete panic set over the remaining rouges. Braun too was terrified as the stifled screams of his men felt like a countdown to his own demise. On the third scream, Braun set into a blind flight to escape his captor. He clawed at the cavern walls hoping they would reveal some sort of exit. He then felt a powerful hand grab his hair from behind. Braun whimpered and pathetically begged for mercy. But that plea was met only with a knife severing his brain stem.

>>365258

Lizette had witnessed the whole thing in awe. The stranger seemed as though he could see in complete darkness as he calmly went to relight the torches. As light returned to the cavern, Lizette could begin to make out more clearly the features of her presumed rescuer. His hair was brown, cut a bit short and would not get in the way in the middle of a fight. his face was handsome, but definitely had a look of experience to it. He wore little armor so he could move about quicker and one could see how lithe and sinewy his body was even when covered. He was busying himself at the present moment looting Braun's corpse. He looked satisfied when he managed to procure a ring of keys from the corpse and then turned his attention to Lizette. Lizette stared him down as he made his approach. "Do not come near me human! Did you come to take the bandits quarry?! To steal the treasure they have stolen?! You humans are all the same!" The stranger was taken aback a little. He came within arms reach of Lizette and finally spoke. "All the same huh?" He then outstretched his hand toward Lizette's left breast. Lizette winced and prepared to be molested by this stranger. But instead of caressing her flesh, the stranger instead used his elbow to polish the metal brazier she was wearing and peered into it. "Do I really look that much like an asshole?" He chuckled at his own stupid joke and proceeded to unlock Lizette from her chains.

>>365259

"You are Lizette, correct?" he exclaimed in a teasing manner. "Because if you aren't I just killed a lot of people for nothing." Relief spread throughout Lizette's body. She was glad this swordsman knew her name and was looking for her. "I-I am." she stammered. "But who might you be?" The stranger gave her a slight bow. "Excuse my rudeness." he said. "I am Trent Almsworth. My profession is taking things that have been stolen and returning them (for a sum of course). Your father had hired me to come to your rescue." Inward, Lizette was very glad as she had hoped she would be rescued, and at the behest of her father no less. But she was distrustful of this man. He had killed many men without remorse or hesitance (they were wicked but still), his profession was ill fit for an honorable person, and on top of that he was a human. Lizette coldly answered him. "So you're a thief?" Trent opened his mouth to speak, but paused and pondered for a second. He laughed and said, "Well I guess I am!. I'd like to think I am of a more honorable sort though." Had Lizette not had such scorn for humans, she would have found him charming. But her pogrom had left a bad taste in her mouth and she could not have anything but scorn for his kind. "And what of my father." she interjected. Trent could feel the tension and was compelled to give her a direct answer. "I was told to escort you back to your village. It will take a bit more time to get back than the time I got here though. I have exhausted most of the funding I was given to seek you so you we will have to journey back via horse." Again in a cold manner she answered him. "Then I will go back myself. I have no need for you." "I don't think that's a good idea," Trent retorted. "You are a dark elf, almost two hundred miles from home, with no provisions, no protection, and you are almost naked." Lizette winced as she had forgotten what she was wearing. She attempted to cover herself from leering eyes but her hands could only do so much. "Take off your 'clothes'," said Trent suddenly. Lizette was insulted at the instruction but before she could speak Trent finished his sentence. "I mean you should take off that tacky thing. I have a spare tunic and a pair of cotton shorts I could loan you. You may use my coat as well. We should head out soon." He was right, and Lizette was relieved that his intentions were good but could only muster up the words, "fine."

>>365260

The further they rode South, the more weight was lifted from Lizette's chest. Soon the mountains that were her prison had disappeared behind her. She was glad, but she was still untrustworthy of her strange rescuer. On horseback she would much rather cling to the back of his shirt than to embrace his waist. At around noon on the second day of their journey, Trent had decided to stop by in a somewhat large town to resupply. The town just so happened to be in the midst of a celebration and were having a fair of sorts. Having dismounted, Trent and Lizette walked down a busy street full of stalls selling food and inviting people to play their games. Having made their way to a lovely fountain, Trent set it as a landmark and asked Lizette to wait there. "B-but…" Lizette stammered. With concern in his eyes, he turned towards Lizette. Lizette may have distrusted Trent, but he was her protector as well as her rescuer. She felt uneasy without him, especially with so many humans around. But she refused to show such weakness and gloomily mustered a, "never mind." Trent smirked and promised he would be back soon. Lizette had no choice but to sit down and watch the people around her. These humans looked like they were having so much fun. Children laughing, couples side by side, smiles on everyones faces. She had not had much contact with humans aside from her captors, but she was starting to think she may have been too harsh in judging all for the actions of a few. A people taking such pleasure in such simple things could not be so bad. Her meditations were suddenly interrupted when a cloth was draped over her head. She panicked and threw the cloth to the ground. She whipped around and saw Trent standing there with a smirk on his face. She opened her mouth to yell at him only for him to place something in her mouth. A sudden sweet and tart flavor erupted in her mouth. Trent had slipped piece of a fruit tart in her mouth. She looked on the ground and saw that the cloth was a simple yet pretty dress. Trent had picked it out to replace the boyish outfit she had not the choice of wearing. Still smiling, Trent began to speak. "Well I sold that tacky little outfit you were wearing in the hideout. It actually got us a decent piece of pocket change. I figure since we are ahead of schedule we can have a little fun. Let's find you a place to change." Lizette felt ashamed having thrown the thoughtful gift to the ground and could only muster a meek. "ok…" Side by side they strolled through the busy street playing games and having a chat here and there. They had reached one end of the street and found a stage had been set there.

A band had been finishing up setting up their instruments and soon began to play. It was a joyous and folksy song, one that was familiar to and reflected the people there. The melody was one where even the sourest of people could not help but to tap their foot to. Even Lizette who was unfamiliar with this music could not help sway her head to the melody. She suddenly felt a tap on her shoulder. She turned to see Trent with his head bowed and his hand extended. He was asking her to dance. Flustered, Lizette vigorously shook her head. But Trent just responded by lifting his head and giving her a big smile. In a sort of reluctant courage that the shy have, Lizette took his hand. With as much energy as the music, Trent took the lead and whisked her into the center of the fervor. Lizette tried her best to follow his lead and mirror the steps of the locals. Finally the song had ended and the crowd around them had erupted in applause. Lizette could only smile sheepishly and bow daintily at her spectators. With only a few hours until the evening, Trent and Lizette parted with the lively town and once again were on the way to her home.

>>365261

With much of her stress and worries gone, Lizette grew more comfortable with her hero. She no longer clung to his shirt during the horseback ride home, but rather wrapped her arms around his waist and held him close. On the journey back it was much more enjoyable for both parties as they opened up more and more about their personal lives. Days were full of their idle chatter and nights resounded with their desires and dreams. Lizette had learned that Trent's father was robbed and murdered by brigands so he sought to rid the world of their wickedness and give back what they had taken. He truly was a noble thief. Trent learned much about Lizette's people as well as herself. Her hobbies were sewing and singing, and she has a childish pleasure of climbing trees. They both grew to admire each other, but both had anxieties that they would have to part very soon.

That day arrived sooner than either of them had wanted. They were now at the forest's edge where Lizette's home lies. They grew more and more silent the closer they got to their destination. At last they had arrived at the Elf Village in the center of the forest. A huge crowd had gathered to greet them. At the head of this crowd was Lizette's father who happened to be the village chief. Tears of happiness strewn down the face of both Lizette and her father as soon as they saw each other. Once Lizette had dismounted from the horse, her father ran to embrace her. There was a huge celebration honoring the hero and the return of Lizette. It lasted well into the night and both Trent and Lizette became too preoccupied with the guests to speak privately. Alas, the break of dawn gave way to a brand new day. No longer would Trent or Lizette have any real need to stay together, but both were unsure that the other felt the way they themselves felt about them. In the end, the village gathered to see Trent off near the entrance. Lizette truly wished he could stay, but felt as though she would be smothering his hopes and dreams had she asked him to. Trent had finally finished speaking to the Chief and turned his attention to Lizette. "Lizette…" he gently spoke as he bowed. His bow took a bit longer than it should have, as though he was thinking of the right thing to say but could not say it. "I hope you have a happy life…" A look of irritation briefly flashed across his face as these were certainly not the words he wanted to say. Lizette stood there saddened at the fact that she could not bring herself to express how she feels and that Trent had not given her words to hope for his feelings for her. "I…" she solemnly stated, "hope you have a happy life as well." Trent smiled back at her, but it was a slightly empty one. He mounted his horse and trotted down the road that led outside the village. He looked back to see Lizette watching him leave. She stood there until he was out of sight.

>>365262

It had been over a year since Trent completed his mission at the Dark Elf Village, but he found himself summoned there once more. An anonymous client had requested his services at the same village Lizette was from. He was actually excited to go and wondered how Lizette has been. He imagined she was already married and maybe had a child. He was glad of this imagined outcome, but also saddened as he had earnestly wished she could have been his bride. At the village gate was a warm welcome from the villagers. He was actively looking for Lizette but saw no sign of her there. Trent ate a meal with the chief then was guided to a small house where he was to meet his client. He was asked to stand in the center of the room and await further instruction. He stood there for a few minutes when a familiar voice pierced the ominous silence from another room. "Sir," said the voice, "what is your profession?" Trent was glad to hear Lizette's voice, but was curious as to why she would ask such a question. "I steal things back from thieves." It was a serious and direct answer only because he feared his voice would shake and his feeling would pour out. Then from the other room, Lizette made her entrance. "T-then I would ask you to return something to me." "Anything", said Trent as he wondered what else this poor woman could have lost. "Who has taken from you and what did they take?" Lizette gently walked over to Trent and her dark, piercing eyes met his. "The thief was actually….you." Trent was taken aback. He was trying his hardest to think of what he could have taken. "I-I," he stammered, "I can't think of anything! I'm so sorry! Did I accidentally leave something of yours in my bag?" Lizette shook her head, she then looked down as if she could her courage on the floor around her feet. "Y-you stole…" Suddenly she stepped forward and buried her face into Trent's chest. "My heart!" She exclaimed. "You stole my heart! All this time I could not think of anything but you! My heart has ached for so long since you have been gone! I love you so much Trent! Please say you love me too!" Trent was stunned at this development. But soon gained his composer and embraced his lover before him. "I love you too Lizette. All this time I had wanted to say it, but sadly men cannot be brave in all things." Lizette cried tears of joy as she held him tighter. Their wish for each others happiness would come to fruition.

The End.

>>365263

I feel like I rushed a lot of things, especially character development. But I've had the story in my head for a long time and just wanted to get it out there.

>>365255

Start a new paragraph when a different character starts speaking. You could also have put this in a pdf and included a short description in the post.

>>365264

I'll be honest with you.

It's pretty "basic".

The core idea has been done quite a few times already and your version does not bring anything new.

Now, this is not a bad story in any way. In fact, there are only a couple spelling errors and some details you added are actually really nice (Lizette not wanting to hold onto Trent while riding and Trent selling the clothes were smart ideas).

In truth, I seems like you and I write in a similar fashion, it feels like this story was in your head for the longest time and you wrote it down perhaps too fast. You should have taken more time to fluff some things… A little of everything.

Especially the dance, it's pretty much " that one musical scene in every Disney movie", it deserves more.

Tldr: Right now, you did alright, but it's definitely possible for you to make this story much better.

There is no shame in taking your time to rewrite and improve.

Nitpick: pastebin or PDF, please, it's just more polite for your fellow writefags.

>>365294

Fair criticisms. I actually had no idea you could post pdfs on /monster/ and pastebin was a bit too "public" for me so that's my bad. I tried to write without too many cliches as the dance was more supposed to be more to soften up a character than to be romantic. But I suppose that didnt hold water. Honestly my ideas feel as they they are better for a drawn medium but I have no talent in that.

>>365333

Maybe he means that pastebin inherently means you have to give yourself a username and thus an identity, compared to just posting a pdf which lets you still function anonymously.

>>365334

>pastebin inherently means you have to give yourself a username and thus an identity

But you don't, you can always just post as a guest. It's what I did for my early writefaggings.

>>365335

It appeared that while you didn't have to make a name, random people could look at what you wrote. Don't mind me I am quite neurotic.

>>365341

You can set it to private if you make an account and then obly people with the link can see it.

Birds are dumb

https://pastebin.com/jg6vnxim

I actually finished a story I was working on. I've also uploaded the rest of the crap I've written to my pastebin.

https://pastebin.com/CdGW82Rh

>>365375

Hey, I remember running across some of your gun stuff in another thread. I actually just read through the AK story for the first time, and wanted to let you know that the story cuts off and starts from the beginning again at line 231.

>>365375

Nice. I like your writing style, seems to lend itself equally to drama of comfiness. One thing I didn't really get (and this is just me) is whether or not MGs actually existed in the story's world, because if they didn't then the reveal was rushed over a bit too quicly before the first mention of the portal.

Other than that though, I found the general world-building to be solid, especially through little things like the lamia trying on human clothes and the valkyrie mural on the van . One thing I would say though is that your story changes tone too quickly between calmness and drama. Jarring contrasts are good, but IMO if they just come completely out of nowhere then they leave the reader baffled rather than intrigued.

>>365372

An odd mix between silly and hot.

I liked it, even though you can be sure the harem ending will trigger some Anons.

>>365382

Thanks, I'll fix

>>365384

One of things that's really hard to do is convey is the insanity of monsterization from a boots on the ground level. Thanks for the feedback.

>ushi gf is lonely while you're on deployment

>send her cute messages and cheer up messages

>learn how to sing, and have your squad mates learn as well

>surprise video call on her birthday

>cue a rousing a capella of Stand By Me

>at some point entire mess hall joins in

>finish song and ask

>will you marry me?

>tears streaming down her face

>yes

Anyone have confessions in writefagging? Shit you wanna add and branch out creatively, even though it is /monster/-vorbotten?

I'll start:

>I honestly like to give all characters (mgs, male and female humans) personality. I like to give my MG characters as well the 3D personality treatment

What I mean is, I hate reading the whole ">Be Anon, >See MG, >Get Raped by MG, >Acquire new waifu". It's so stale, boring, and unlikable. Sure the appeal for mgs is that they have the sex drive to 11, 24/7, and are loyal good wives, but what else is there? There's no personality, and it's just a blank hollow where you just add your fetishes to, and that's it. No interesting background aside of whatever KC writes, nothing interesting about their personality, likes, dislikes, etc. Just projection of what to expect on a wife.

When I make characters, I like to write down their likes, dislikes, fears, etc. And I know it's kind-of looked down upon, I let some of the MGs even reject a guy they don't like and are picky, instead of just hanging to the first man they see. It doesn't really give much room in who they are.

And I'm not even focusing on things like looks. I'm just writing down personalities and traits that I feel are compatible with each other. The whole ">See MG, >Acquire Wife" concept, without even digging deeper in a relationship is just bland imo. Leaves no room for surprise. Nothing new to explore. Nothing really lasting other than great sex. And sure they basically are gonna copy the personalities of their partner, but what about their personalities? What were they like before meeting their husband?

Although it's kind of breaking the point of MGs, I just feel like it is too stiff if they are just either blank slates, or end up copying their husbands. Sure it ends up with me writing 3DPD personalities to them, and it basically is written as normal (in terms of good girls untainted by (((their))) works) 3D but with MG parts, and still be good wives in the end, but I honestly like it if whatever any of the writefags have break the mold, but still keep a sense of realism in both 3D, and the MG Fluff.

>>365952

> /monster/-vorbotten

>And I know it's kind-of looked down upon

Since when was having actual character in your stories ever looked down upon here? Usually the better stories here don't strictly follow KC's work, having each monstergirl present in them actually be characters and not a clone locked to a set personality because of their species.

>Sure the appeal for mgs is that they have the sex drive to 11, 24/7, and are loyal good wives, but what else is there?

You do realise there are people on this board that like monstergirls more than just for wish fulfilment purposes, right?

>>365952

Do you have any examples? Simple "ooga booga yu ma husband now boi" rape stories certainly exist and are hot but I never really felt like they're all there is, even in this thread for example. We do need more in depth stories but I think the real problem is that we just need more content in general.

(It's funny you say this because I remember somebody complaining fairly recently that all the writefags are going on too long lately "because they all think they're fucking budding novelists" or something to that effect.)

>>365952

I think the thing I would like to confess is the fact that I can't write smut because I am a few years from wizardhood. Whenever I try to write a sex scene, I feel like Steve Carrell's character in the 40 Year Old Virgin when they are talking about their sex lives while playing poker. I actually don't mind that fact too much as I prefer the romantic aspect of the writing. Though some smut would make for a better climax. Also I can't seem to proofread worth shit. Even when I read through my brain seems fill in the errors and skip over them instead of flagging them.

>>365952

I used to write more lewd writefaggotry as well as some normal stuff back when I did a nation builder on /erp/ years back. I think I lost or deleted most if not all of it.

Most of the stuff i've tried that involves writing is cyoas. Been doing them since the board was still pretty new and dusky was still BO. I've lost count of how many I started. Never finished a single one, though. Mostly because real life would burn me out and i'd give up and delete all my work.

Also, I keep thinking my writing is a bit dry or maybe even boring,

>>365984

>Also, I keep thinking my writing is a bit dry or maybe even boring,

If your cyoa’s died from you and not a lack of user input you’re keeping some people interested.

Is it worth trying a cyoa again or is the board too cluttered with them?

>>366158

It's actually much slower CYOA-wise than it has been at other points in the past, so I think it'd be fine. Not like anybody is gonna get too mad about OC.

>>365512

Wew lads, a new crab! Great job on this update. I'm always happy to see more of this character.

>>365512

Another good chapter, looking forward to more

>>365375

>one minute sitting down to some cute MG

>the next browsing for combination phoelectric/ionization smoke detectors

love it, thanks.

https://pastebin.com/cC6tUp25

New chapter, folks.

>>366844

>lovecraftian

You better give a damn good reason why you think that

>>366859

I mean, you wake up in a body that isn't you, in a role that you don't want, in a universe where you're a punchline

>>366865

That's not lovecraftian at all, that's just an unfortunate situation. Back street girls is lovecraftian according to you.

>>366869

It's like back street girls but it's god making you start an idol group

>>366870

Just because a god did it doesn't make it lovecraftian.

>>366875

You better back up or I'll call it Kafkaesque too

>>354457

Is there a list of stories anywhere?

first, second or third person for your romance and smut?

>>367432

Second person is the best. Third person is acceptable, but held to a higher standard. First person is garbage.

>>367432

Whatever the author chooses, it's their story.

does anyone remember that pastebin story about the office guy who is set up with a sabbathized ryu? It's titled something like "I want to stop the rain" but I can't find it anywhere.

>>367433

this.

anubis.moe

>>367432

It depends on the audience and the writer as anything can work if the story is built around it, but personally I'm a fan of third person for romance and either second or third for smut. Third person is less restrictive than second person, seeing as you're writing a protagonist and not a protagonist that must represent your audience, which means you can usually do more with them overall and thus third person tends to make for better story telling. Second person makes it much easier for a reader to immerse themselves in a story, as they themselves are the protagonist rather than them having to self-insert as someone else, which makes it good for wish fulfilment stuff and smut with little to no plot. Second person can do proper romance, but it's hard to pull it off without ruining a reader's immersion.

>>367430

This: >>367439 is your answer, it has been mentionned earlier in this thread.

Remember that attempting to read the thread to see if your question has already been answered is the polite thing to do.

>>354457

What are the "must read" monstergirl stories, in you guys' opinions? Any favorites that you'd tell a newcomer to read?

>>367469

Silent_II's work, or what's left of it.

https://web.archive.org/web/20170311082423/http://pastebin.com:80/u/Silent_II

>>367470

Any idea what happened to Spidernon, by the way? I was enjoying the last series he was working on, and it just kind of stopped updating.

>>367470

i like this one

>>362120

>>367469

Anonymoose's saga

http://anonymoosesaga.pbworks.com/w/page/67867177/Introduction

Also, for me there are these 2 CYOAs that I am trying to recover by one Starglider

I found these threads on the archive site (the have links to the previous episodes)

Nomad Ep 4.0 http://archive.is/kcxiP

Engineering 9 https://archive.is/ozu4

But I know that there was at least a Nomad 5 thread and I think Engineering had 11 episodes.

If anyone has links to archives of those, please post them. Sucks to lose old stories like this.

is it silly to disregard smut when writing an mg story? are they just for wish fulfillment in the end?

>>367576

This isn't just a porn board, so they're not absolutely necessary, but it's not like a sex scene can't be written in a way that provides character.

>>367576

writers writing what and how they want is never silly.

that said, the premise of the mg setting is 'all the generic fantasy.. but with smut superimposed on everything'.

So writing MG fiction without the smut is like looking at Salted Butter in the food section at the store and going "I am going to make something like this… but without the salt" and never noticing the contents of the next shelf over.

tl,dr: it will just be generic fantasy at that point. Not that there is anything wrong with that.

>>367578

Any generic fantasy has smut too though

you could take the main premise of mgs being that they're humanoid monsters meddling with humans in a way that isn't exclusively violent unlike actual real world mythology, and they are the focus. It's fun to imagine how their inhuman characteristics interact with normal humans in romance/in general, not just for fap fuel

>>367588

lets not pretend Monster Girls were an actual genre or even a notable trope until someone had the idea of 'lets make them all female and desperately craving cum and male companionship"

Odyssey by Homer may have a few millennia on the concept of women with half animal bodies, but it wasn't until KC's MGE got translated in the west that you could filter Literotica by the 'monster girl' tag… or any of the other media sites.

type 'monster girl' into amazon search, and you will see that all results there are from the era after the english speaking world discovered Kenkou Cross and Daily Life With a Monster Girl. And lets also not pretend that the part of fandom that come by way of the later work, was there for the social intricacies of mixed societies - the comic and the anime are just basically soft-core smut version of the same fetishes only with 'rapes you' being toned down to 'forcibly cuddles you'.

>>367588

to clarify a bit -

>It's fun to imagine how their inhuman characteristics interact with normal humans in romance/in general, not just for fap fuel

I totally agree about this, and love it when authors take the time to world build around this concept.

but ultimately there is also a reason why in book stores almost all results for a 'monster girl' are in the Books > Erotica section.

Maybe someone out there is catering to 'MG's without the sex' sub-niche, but in my browser it doens't look like that sub niche is notable enough to get within first 10 pages of search results. That tells me that smut is an integral part of the MG fandom niche.

>>367591

Every fan base has smit as a cornerstone. Some way some how.

My thoughts on why it's such a big piece of MG fandom is that it is easy to make and we are somewhat small and out of view unlike most other Fandoms.

The second big factor is the Fandom itself. If it wasn't in high demand, there would be far less of it. .

>>354457

Do we have any kind of archive that gives synopses or tags for stories? It'd be nice to be able to know what a story will (generally) contain before starting it.

On a vaguely related note, are there any recommendations for extremely dominant monstergirl stories?

>>368654

>I stay motivated for writing?

You stay motivated for writing.

>>368802

See it as testing waters for a possible professional path. Also see it as improving yourself and honing a skill.

>>368802

Discipline. If you have committed yourself to writing, sit down and write for the period of time you have allotted to it. If it's shit and you delete the whole thing the next day that's fine, as long as you DO it. Works for nearly everything, weights, study, learning a new skill, everyone has bad days, but having the discipline to overcome your own apathy is where the secret strength is really born.

Now if you'll excuse me, I'm going to ignore what I just said and play vidya.

>>369081

Some of the grammar was incorrect, and you might cop a bit of shit for implying the gazer slept around but apart from that not bad.

I request a story of a crazy cat lady, who herself is a cat lady. Anyone wanna try making this?

I'm quite poor at actually writing stories but here's another one of my ideas.

>Bunch of delinquent MGs are made to attend some sort of music club

>They end up unironically liking it and set up edgy industrial metal band

>For some reason they want a male vocalist

>They find out that one of the boys in school was almost a child star with singing

>Turns out the "almost" part is because he got catastrophic case of stage fright during critical audition and has never sang publicly since

>>369300

I'd read the shit out of that. Hell, I almost want to write it myself.

>>369304

Do it, I won't mind.

>>369310

What sorts of characters were you thinking? Or do you not get that far

>>369311

I was thinking that the leader of delinquents would be Red Oni but other than that I didn't really think of much other characters other than them being big and physically fit as they're delinquents. Maybe a Lizardwoman who rebels against her traditionalist parents by being dishonorable? If you have any under-used MGs in mind that could fit the bill, consider using them.

I feel bad for not actually producing anything of note when I was NEET for half a year, now I'm back in studying.

>>369312

Hm, I'll see what I can do. Semester did just start and all.

>>369237

What kind of story are looking for?