/monster/ - The Last Bastion of Romance★

>>282980

>chopping down live tree for firewood

You're really not supposed to use live wood, ya dingus. You use dead wood for that. It burns better anyway. The dryad was a dick, but you are guilty of practicing shitty outdoorsmanship.

good greentext though

>>282815

>What monster girls do you think need more love?

I'd like to see more stories for the less prolific members of the mermaid family. Sea Bishop, Merrow, and especially Selkie.

>>282980

Nice greentext. Some inexplicably coed prison rape greentext could be interesting.

>Be shota

>Buddy at school says he has something cool to show me

>Go with him to small park that nobody uses except hobos who pass out in it.

>gives me magazine

>pictures of kitsune, kobolds, you name it

>gasp

>They are holding hands with men

>some of them are even cuddling them

>hands tremble

>so lewd

>realize this is very very cozy

>loud noise

>"Oh shit, the fuzz!"

>friend runs off

>Chris Hansen rounds corner

>cops everywhere

>guns drawn

>"Get on the ground, shota!"

>comply, piss self

>dragged to cell

>arm tattooed with number

>given bread and water, guard raps my knuckle with knightstick when I ask for phone call

>taken to court

>parents are in the audience, Mom is weeping,

>Dad is comforting her

>glares at me and calls me a dumbass

>charged with 30 felony counts of lewd handholding trafficking, one for each picture

>Judge calls me despicable pervert

>Sentences me to death by hanging, is angry when bailiff reminds him he can't do that

>sentences me to four years in jail at MG State

>Dragged off.

>brought to prison

>timidly ask why being brought to mamono prison, get told to shut up

>girls are slavering for me, hooting and grabbing the air as I pass.

>One Jinko actually breaks out of her cell, is brought down by cattle prods inches from me.

>Thrown in cell

>Guard makes some quip about my cock being 'stained green' by morning

>Doesn't take long to unlock his subtle hint

>Orc girl steps out of shadows

>tall, brunette, huge tits, wide hips

>Recognize her

>Its Grizelle the Gruesome

>My schoolyard bully who tormented me for years

>Hung me upside-down until I kissed her

>She went away for holding up an armored car

>She didn't rob it, just held it at an angle and gave the driver a concussion

>She smiles wide at me

>Mypoorpelvis.jpg

>"Pockets! Oooh, you don't know how much I missed you!"

>(she used to call me Pockets)

>Gives me big hug that I think snapped something

>lays across my lap, blinks yellow eyes at me

>"So what did you do to wind up here?"

>Swallow

>"I…had pictures of handholding"

>She looks at me with wonder

>"Shit, you're hardcore!"

>She rips my pants off

>Rides me like a jackhammer

>Rapes me for six or seven hours

>Cuddles me

>Actually engages in handholding

>Have four kids in the clink

>twenty outside

>daughters and sons form street gang

>So yeah, that's where the Held Hand Clan came from

>>283270

Im not even going to read the profile and wriye a story about her getting high with an Ittan Momen.

You cant stop me

"If all you do is bleed for others, sooner or later, you will run out of blood."

Chapter 10 of A Stranger in Paradise: Malinalli

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/04/25/chapter-10-malinalli/

Is it working now?

>>284011

ye

>>283197

You got a sensible chuckle. Nice offering.

Looking for a pastebin/story link about a vampire to goes into a boy's room in his village, sleeps with him and takes him to be lord of her castle. It's a few years old by now.

It was on the old monster girl collection website.

>In Jail

>Doing a nickel for selling snow cones

>goddamn yeti swore it was lemon

>Told I am changing cells

>Taken down like six levels of stairs

>In weird subterranean place

>march through maximum security

>bunch of minotaurs, orcs, and oni glare at me

>march through super max

>Hellwan, dragons, centipede girls

>Go into wing marked 'NO PERSONNEL'

>Down at the far end is a steel enclosure in middle of black expanse going downward forever

>bridge comes down, we cross it

>"Um, why am I going in here?"

>Guard shrugs

>"I suspect it was a software glitch, but it's easier to do this than the paperwork."

>Swallow

>Not sure what the hell is in there

>Cell opens

>Guard pushes me in

>Door shuts, bridge goes away

>Little Gremlin Girl inside

>wearing black and red costume with cape

>Helmet and goggles

>Pretty cute

>Sitting on bench with arms folded

>muttering

>"These FOOLS can't hold me…"

>"I'll get that Wonder Wan! Her and that 'boy' of hers…"

>(Clear my throat)

>Stares at me, face still pouty

>Introduce self

>Explain about glitch

>Say I'm new bunkmate

>She just stares at me

>Ask name

>"I am Rachetta, the Gizmo Goddess, the Mayhem Mechanic! You will BOW to me!"

>Stand there

>Very awkward

>rub back of neck

>she looks at me with pleading eyes

>"…bow?"

>think she might cry

>don't want this any more awkward

>get down on one knee

>she puffs out her chest

>"Yes? I mean, Yes! You know who is boss in this cell! You can be my new henchman!"

>Ask what that means

>"You'll do my bidding, take part in my plots, assist in capers."

>Look around cell

>Not much going on

>Might as well play along

>Agree

>Tells me about last plan to conquer world

>Army of deathbots all set to go

>World Leaders quaking in fear

>Wonder Wan showed up

>Big fight

>deathbots blown up

>Landed in supervillain wing

>she's really sad about deathbots

>lip quivering, eyes brimming with tears

>Ask wat do

>"we're gonna break out of here! We'll build a mecha-suit out materials in the room."

>Look around

>We have:

>Air

>Walls

>Toilet

>Cot

>My pants

>Ugh

>she nods

>Take off my pants

>she grabs pants, throws in toilet

>Somehow builds a cold fusion reactor out of my pants, the toilet, and air molecules

>toilet is glowing purple

>"The rest should be easy"

>Uses toilet energy and some device in her gloves to transmute cot into complex polymer and motors

>Shapes polymer around me into suit of ultra hard powered armor

>Left arm is encased by some kind of plasma cannon

>"Crude, but it should get us out of here."

>climbs onto my back.

>"Now, shoot through the ceiling!"

>Aim and Fire at steel ceiling

>Kaboom.jpeg

>Ceiling explodes

>"Activate rockets!"

>Fire foot rockets

>Hurtle upward

>Blast way through floors of prison

>Hit open sky

>"Excellent work, Henchman! Now to find a hollowed out Volcano or abandoned amusement park for our base!"

>mfw I only had two days until I was released

"Humans are sapient. From the least to the greatest, no matter how little power we possess, not one of us is meat."

Chapter 11 of A Stranger in Paradise: Ozohmatli

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/04/29/chapter-10-ozohmatli/#more-691

>>284551

Cute

>>282774

>>282783

That's right, it was mostly just me being unable to write anything decent after a while. Even after the first few chapters it kind of got ehh. Sorry for the late reply, I haven't lurked here in a month or two.

And yeah I had a ton of fun with Sledge. Sometimes I re-read parts because it was pretty cool to write. I still wanna write though.

>>285152

>All joking aside, do you think you'll finish that story or has it just died for you?

Sorry, but I'm not really sure. My confidence snaps out really quickly, so even when I think I've got something good going, I just scrap several thousand words worth of writing. I've also considered re-doing stories I've shafted, but never created something readable.

I've been thinking about more Yeti snuggles, but if I decide to finish it, I'm pretty sure I'm going to rewrite the whole thing. Mostly just to cut down on a lot of the stuff that I believe didn't really contribute to the story, and partly to add some more depth where I felt it's needed. Again, that's if I don't scrap it once more.

Also that guy's almost going to have another birthday, holy shit I've put this off for too long.

>>282985

Now what if -and hear me out.

What if Arturia Pendragon… was summoned as a centaur?

Hey, I'm kinda new and I'm not seeing one so I have to ask, do we have a dedicated site with links to all these stories, or do we just look through the threads?

>>285196

Best to look through the threads and save what you like somewhere.

This block is fucking killing me.

>>285214

>>285215

Okay, thanks guys.

Reading through the Tusktaker stuff right now. Is some good stuff right there.

>>285188

I wish my folder wasn't a clutter otherwise I'd find you that Swap of Saber and Cerea.

>>284368

That sounds oddly familiar. Seconding this if only to sate my curiosity.

“Do you want to fight, too?” “No. No, I do not.”

Chapter 13 of A Stranger in Paradise: Cuetzpalin

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/05/07/chapter-13-cuetzpalin/#more-712

anyone got a link to that monster-girl story involving pizza delivery guy anon falling for an introvert manticore?

>>286416

>>286427

It was a story that was from a few months back, around October maybe? Bad news is about a week or so ago he deleted the pbwiki he had his stuff on, and scrubbed the wordpress site he was using before that, and of course I was too fucking dumb to have saved copies of the work before hand. He was the same dude who did the longer story with Max and Marie, with the guy and the wolf girl a post apocalyptic setting, and did the short bit with the sick guy and his Hellhound girlfriend taking care of him.

In review, all of my fucking regrets.

>>286429

Oh, so that's what happened to that hellhound story, been looking all week.

>>286444

Guy does have a twitter aswell if someone wants to reach out to him.

https://twitter.com/fishuheadsu

>>286453

>Check link

>"Newest" story is from december 2014

>Also among the stories is a huge egostroking rant shitting on other writefags

Now why we should give a shit about this writefag again?

>>286453

Didn't that story end with the geomancer burning the webbing off himself and then stabbing the spider to death to protect his wolf waifu? This is also really old news.

>>286505

We shouldn't I was just ass mad and was kinda hoping people would tell me I was wrong the story was good until that

>>286502

Yes but he also got raped by the spider till he was half insane

>>286622

Well I don't blame ya for being assmad, it's NTR after all, just saying with its post date it's not the most relevant thing for the thread.

Unrelated, but the recent lull in writefag content has me itching to once again try writing something a bit longer and with more substance than a greentext. I kinda want to resurrect one of my old projects, but I do not know if there is an audience here for that. One's a giallo style thriller, one's got kind of an MiB vibe to it, and another is more of a light-hearted "MG's as hippies" kinda thing, to name a few. Though I still need to finish that damned hellhound greentext first and foremost.

>>285625

if you happen to find it, let me know.

…Oh yeah, we're all anonymous here. I'll see it eventually.

>>285578

It's not made by us, as far as I know, but the people over at monstergirl collection have a fairly extensive list of pastebin repositories. they also send a weekly email alert about fics and mg manga updating.

>>286766

>Hellhound greentext

Are you talking about the greentext thread that has a hellhound in it as a group's leader, or the old one about the religious hellhound that you left for it to rot, you piece of shit?

>>286927

There was also the one about the guy who accidentally summoned a hellhound, that was unfinished.

>>286960

That one is mine. There's pretty much one smut scene and a morning after end scene that's​ left. However, I've had yet to write something down that looks and feels right, and I don't want to post a half-assed ending cause that's unfair to the reader.

>>286416

>>286429

>>286434

>>286435

>>286444

>>286451

Hey, sorry I pulled it all down without warning, though suffice to say it was due to unrelated drama (probably not the best idea to write under the same name I use everywhere). I'll reupload everything sometime today, under a different name this time.

>>286978

That's still going on? Feels like that was made ages ago. The one where he throws the hellhound a beer or two when she's behind a salt barrier that doesn't actually work? I hope you have your greentext saved because I can't remember much and the thread probably doesn't exist.

"Don't give heavy ordinance to cats, Private."

Chapter 14 of A Stranger in Paradise: Nemontemi

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/05/09/chapter-14-nemontemi/

>>286978

We should start calling you Jexx.

Pls finish

Okay, so pastebin is a shit and won't let me upload more than 20 pastes per 24 hours, so I was only able to get the first 20 chapters of Monster World Story up. I'll UL the last few chapters and my other stories tomorrow. In the meantime everything will be here:

https://pastebin.com/u/MonsterMike

The hellhound greentext is pretty short so I can just post it here if you guys want it now.

>>286990

Ouch. Hopefully that shit doesn't cause you too much trouble. Thanks for taking the time to reply though, I appreciate it.

>>286978

Nice to see you're still around. Don't sweat the wait, I'd rather you take the time to put down something you're happy with.

That being said, do you have a pastebin of the work so far, or could you repost what you've already written in the new hellhound thread? There's no archive for thread one, so the first part of the story is missing to my knowledge :(

>>287016

>>287074

I do have it saved on pastebin, it's not publicly listed yet, but here's the link.

https://pastebin.com/DNMfn8sb

And yeah, the screenname I chose was dumb but it was an inside joke at the time.

>>287088

I was confused as fuck by your name for a moment when I opened the link, until I realized I had your pastebin already bookmarked. So thanks for all the other stuff you've written that I've already read, I guess.

Will start writing more again.

Here is something just for starters.

https://pastebin.com/TGkACpGd

Alright, everything's up now, Monster World Story, the one I did around the holidays, the hellhound greentext, and the one with the introvert manticore. Again, it's all here:

https://pastebin.com/u/MonsterMike

I've been out of writing for a little bit but I'll try to get something out soon, how does everyone feel about something with a griffon, since it feels like she hasn't gotten enough love since KC revealed her?

>>287243

Griffon would be interesting. Thanks for getting everything back online, by the way. I appreciate it.

>>287318

I'd marry her.

Can I see the cyoa?

>>287335

Anon, he links to it right in his own post.

>>287318

Fisher Price is best girl in that CYOA.

>>287318

>he returns

Older snek in a sweater is always appreciated and I always like a nice story. Also, never ask if people want you to finish it, because I'll always say I want it done. Let's make it the second story you finished. As for how to link across boards: >>>/cyoa/2809 I think that's how you do it.

>>287335

It's right there in the second link.

>>287337

doh!

and yeah, looking at it, definitely shark girl. tall, muscular, idgaf attitude? sign me up. But none of them are bad

>>287318

>Christmas cake rape snake

Hey, that's something alright.

>>287340

>Let's make it the second story you finished

Ah yes, good idea. I was pretty uncomfortable with how weird things were though. Not sure how apparent this weirdness was.

And thanks, that linking method seems to work.

>>287346

Hopefully the comfy kind. But yeah, Christmas Cake indeed. Definitely the biggest age gap I've written.

>>287351

Swain comes off as a bit of a weak willed robot and I just attributed any awkwardness to his nature and the fact he just might suck at anything social. In a way, it feels like "Colder Nights", but with a snake. The situation itself is weird in that, when you come of age, you're forced to marry if you're desirable, so it's somewhat understandable that he'd behave the way he does. You're also just getting your feet wet into the story and its characters and so are we. Don't lose faith this early.

>>287162

Gonna write more stuff periodically, sorry for break. Anyone got request?

>>287356

Yeah, this is something I needed to ask about. Not just about stories seeming similar, but I was concerned with protagonists seeming similar. There's a lot of stories I just scrap instead of posting here, but most of them have this character archetype. Even for the one's that don't, they still at least speak pretty similarly. Ehh. It's hard for me to write someone who sticks out without "sticking out", if that makes sense.

But also, at least it seems pastebin supports SSL connections now without paying for their PRO bullshit.

>>287318

>You can link across other boards without pasting the whole URL right?

you can, simply put 3 ">"s, then a "/", then the board, then another "/", then the thread number

in the case of the thread you linked, it'd be >>>/cyoa/2089

>switched the 0 and 8 around

fucked it up, but you get the idea

>>>/cyoa/2809

So when are we gonna build a goddamned archive for the stories? If we want longevity, we gotta organize.

Remember that civilizations are built on libraries.

>>287621

What kind of archive should we have?

>A sticky with a fuckton of pastebin links

>A seperate website

>Something else

What do we think, writefags?

>>287627

To start off with, some sort of master pastebin that links to everyone's stories probably wouldn't be a bad idea. but something more organized would probably be preferable. Whatever we use should also have some way to host images since there are a lot of screencapped greentexts around (unless someone feels like transcribing them or knows of some program that can do it).

>>287627

I'd vote for someone to manage a pastebin where we keep proper pastebin links to stories and art (imgur links or something). It's pretty easy to keep one, as long as people post their new stories' links in the writefag/drawfag threads to be added to the list.

Gotta save the writing history if we want to grow.

>>287648

>>287649

Alright. Assuming we go with a pastebin, would pastebin pro be necessary?

>>287651

Normally pastebin limits you to uploading 20 pastes per 24 hour period (pastebin pro lets you do 250 per 24 hours which should be more than enough) so yeah, probably.

>>287657

Well, unless I'm misunderstanding how pastebin works, anyone who writefags can stick their story on its own pastebin and set it to never expire - then, all we need is some kind of master document, be that a pastebin, a different webpage or a library thread here.

I don't really think a master pastebin is a good idea, purely because it would make organising and sorting everyone's stories (however that gets done - by writer, by monster, whatever) a bit of a hassle.

As we're probably aware, /tg/ has https://1d4chan.org/wiki//tg/%27s_Smut_Index

Perhaps we should try and model it on that?

>>287673

Yeah I actually had something like that in mind when I suggested the idea of a master pastebin (minus all the furshit and monsterboy faggotry that's there, obviously).

>>287679

Degenerates gonna degenerate, I suppose.

If it's a wiki-esque list that gets set up, how do we go about doing it?

>>287680

Some sort of free wiki hosting like wikia or shoutwiki maybe? That'd be ideal because it'd mean people could add their stuff themselves without having to get someone else to add it for them.

>>287688

Never mind, I can just upload the image. Derp.

No thumbnail though.

>>287688

Might wanna figure out how to get authors more control over their stories. Anyone can edit a page without protections, and only admins and mods have control over that anyway. At the very least it's got revision history to correct stuff like that, but it's still a problem that's almost exclusive to collaborative sites like this. Maybe try another host, unless someone here wants to host it themselves.

So what's the procedure for the wiki? Are authors putting their own things up there, or anons are putting up stories they want to store?

>>287707

Both should be available imo. But I think just making a list of story pastebins with tags would be easier for everyone, kinda like the MGE wiki fiction archive.

>>287705

You know what, I hadn't considered that. Authors can (and should) put the original pastebin links there, but people who come to the site are probably more likely just to read the contents of the page - which, as you say, may have been defaced.

I still like the idea of a stickied library thread here, although I have no idea how it could be properly organised.

If the guy who was looking for stories is still around, I have another small wave if you finished the first. I blew my load of favorites a little early, but these are nice:

Massage an Ushi-oni:

https://pastebin.com/qVBYDT0A

Dragonfly Girl:

https://pastebin.com/uD3fgrHp

Static Gazer (Might as well put Weavwine's whole pastebin up):

https://pastebin.com/N2SUby5m

Echidna fam (by Hellhound guy in this thread):

https://pastebin.com/R8wFrpFn

A smile in the rain(Nureonago):

https://pastebin.com/Z6pfBBFB

Death Stalker pt.1 (Girtablilu):

https://pastebin.com/MLdAGuJF

Weresheep greentext CYOA (I don't know how you could not know beard, but just in case):

https://pastebin.com/q67nvWu5

Cheshire Roommate:

https://pastebin.com/ZPdeXgi2

I tried not to include any writefags from before and I'm not sure how much you've already read.

>>287797

Guardian Angel:

http://touchfluffytail.org/?story=guardian-angel

I forgot to post this one before. I tried finding his pastebin, but couldn't. Found it on TFT. It's a nice, awkward story and probably the longest I posted.

>>287318

Finish this shit! I want to see christmas cake snake to be happy.

Anyone reading 'The Care and Feeding of Magical Creatures'? It's updating again.

http://sadehall.tumblr.com/index.html

>>287793

Yeah, I'd go with >>287736 in making a pastebin link dump. Not the best kind of sorting, but perhaps you could try appending the monster girl name in brackets after each story. People could just Ctrl+F through if they're looking for something in particular.

You could just update it every once in a while when we get new shit in. Or if not, someone could always just copy the list and re-paste it somewhere else if one of us just stops lurking.

“I am War. And that is all I will ever be.”

Chapter 15 of A Stranger in Paradise: Mo Hayi Twa

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/05/13/mo-hayi-twa/

There was a story, set in a pseudo wwi setting. A guy fighting monster girls, centaurs in particular. I remember it was brief and he met a centaur that was impaled on a bayonet. He was helping her, stripped a kit from a fallen comrade, had first aid stuff in it but also a gun.

Anyone know where to find it? Was there any more to it? Can someone run with that and finish the story?

>>288380

You have no idea how long I've been waiting for this story to get done

“I love you, too.”

Chapter 16 of A Stranger in Paradise: Mo Laimé Twa

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/05/16/chapter-16-mo-laime-twa/

>>288380

Ayyyy, it's done. I was wondering when the armor would show back up again. I liked the story, though I wished for more of a romantic payoff and I wanted to see the reaction of Edwina after she was absolutely fucked from that fight.

>spoiler

One can only hope we'll see the end one day.

Could someone discuss or help me out with character motivations in slice of life stuff? When I view other mediums, characters almost always have a concrete objective in mind, moving the story along at a consistent pace. How's that supposed to work with a slice of life? Everybody's got goals and motivations, but these kinds usually take months or years, or are otherwise just about boring shit. In fact, I think this is one of the things that gets me to stop writing altogether. I could use some help.

If anyone's following the Relocation, ara ara snek story I started, I wanna continue it. Might have to redo the first chapter though.

>>288824

The thing you have to remember is that there's more than just long term goals. there are short term goals too like, wanting to get your head pat or wanting to have that perfect date or wanting to get that project done but your little sister and her wacky monster girl friends keep barging into your room with increasingly weird excuses.

Remember Slice-of-life is just that. a little slice of their life. you don't have to show us them struggling to decide what brand of soap to use, unless it is cute. Then you should.

>>288912

>>288905

>Be undead army

>Dead and brought back to life

>Tons of health benefits, including improved regeneration and durability, immunity to disease and immortality

>Decide to visit nearby village to spread the good word

>Paladinus rise and say fuck off

>No matter, we'll just show them how awesome being undead is

>To do that, we need to kill their women

>Set up army

>invade

>Kill as many women and girls as possible, while avoiding male causalities

>revive all the dead as new undead monstergirls and incubi

>After a few weeks, town goes back to business as usual

>Army gets bigger

>People get new lives

>New demon realm is born

Pretty much another invasion. Seriously, how do you become undead without dying first? Fags

>>288917

>Tons of pain and suffering

>Lets fix that by causing pain and suffering

>>288905

Thank you. That story never sat well with me. I ended up making my own take that had an undead invasion cut short of killing a blacksmith's apprentice by a dullahan.

>>288824

I'm not entirely sure how to solve that, but I guess one thing you could think of is the next key moment that'll happen in their relationship and focus on that. Maybe it doesn't even have to be major, like some awkward and cute things about snek's personality. Flesh characters out a bit as to who they are before they inevitably fug and the right choice is made or just something that could be humorous. You have a countdown as well, which helps you from dicking around too much. You can also use that to gauge how intense their moments will be. First few days can be small things, like snek wagging the tip of her tail like a dog and being unaware of it until it's pointed out for her embarrassment, or her tail knocking things over when she moves while excited. Mid points could be her wrapping herself around him on dates and maybe we can get a glimpse into her flaws, like being over protective/possessive. There should also be things related to her being a snek, like shedding or how cold nights will require a lot of warmth for an easy cuddling scenario. Final days for us seeing her without any facade about her obsession for kids and a loving family the reason for it other than being a monster girl and accepting it. Something of a linear progression can be made with little endearing things mixed in before and after heavy things to keep things feeling natural is all fine.

You can just balance yourself out with the time allotted. It doesn't have to be very important early, but I imagine we'd learn a lot of the not so pretty things later on, which don't have to be too grim or bad, maybe she's an air head or slob as well. Something about her personality that will make her feel more natural, and the same for Swain as well. Maybe things that are even more beautiful about her that may not be apparent on small dates, like how she'll actually act around kids or something. The thing about slice-of-life is that it can be just a bunch of small things, but as long as we can still feel for the characters and enjoy all of the little stuff, it's fine. Don't feel compelled for an adventure. Don't forget that Swain has to develop as well, but as mentioned before, it can be really small glimpses early on and there doesn't need to be some major reveal towards the end. All that matters is that by the end, we know both characters and why they learned to love each other. I hope that helped in some way.

>>288922

>t.Beta who won't even defend his home.

Really, the lesson to be learned is that the undead could so easily get out of control, and for the sake of everyone, it would be fine if the Order killed them when something like an invasion or kingdom building happens.

> all the reddit mongrels derailing a writefag thread.

Your simple minds end up turning everything into a conflict. There is conflict beyond the niggerbrain ooga booga stick and rock made scenarios.

>>289000

Bitch, if laying siege to a town, killing men who are just trying to protect their families, and dragging their women and children into the streets for slaughter, ain't a conflict, what is in your eyes?

>>289005

you just named like every single African raid that has happened in the past 10000 years.

You are turning your setting into Africa, step back and think about it. You have niggers in the brain and gained a mental illness.

>>289007

I don't see how Africans doing terrible acts of violence and connecting it to the acts of the undead in the story at hand, Undead Invasion, is a bad or invalid thing? Are you just that concerned about Africans?

>>289014

the story of genocide has been done to death. have more imagination. also comparing monstergirls to niggers is pretty bad on you.

>>289015

Protecting one's people and waifu is important. Making stories about it or feeling bad when one can't protect them is perfectly fine. Also, don't mistake me as the author of Undead Invasion, I like you, find it distasteful, as the undead in it are, as you would say, acting like niggers.

>>289002

I would say that, that already happens pretty often since human women who get corrupted usually get more lustful and such due to the succubuzation, and Lizardmen and the like are supposed to go from warriors to house wives when they find a husband. There has to be plenty of stories involving this, you just gotta look around.

>>289017

>paladin shitposting

>calling >>289002 heresy

I want newfags to leave.

>>289020

Pretty sure he just wants strong monster waifus to stay strong monster waifus, or shy waifus to stay shy waifus. Or just to be joking, and he himself doesn't have a real answer to the question at hand.

It would seem to me that whoever throws out the word, 'newfag' is the newest of them all as they would be able to pick things like this up really easily otherwise. I probably shouldn't be escalating the problem, but oh well.

>>289029

Oh, now I get ya'.

So like wife training?

>>288827

>>288925

Yes, this all helps. I guess I could use smaller or less important things to drag the story along. That being said, I still feel a bit uncomfortable about the whole scenario. Feels so empty, how Swain's just dating because he has to, and nearly has to play around with the feelings of two girls who are emotionally invested in him (not that he really has a choice). That kinda irks me, makes it hard to write. Thanks though.

>>289032

Dude yes, monster girl wife training. Girls who have no earthly idea how to act like a civilized girlfriend getting trained on how to rape their boyfriend less and do sweeter things like baking their boyfriend a cake or knitting them a sweater.

>>289082

I wanna say that there has to be something like that with a Ushi, somewhere.

>>289029

I remember having a thread about this where it got shitposted to the point of no return by saying that used goods weren't monstergirls and the idea of taking a whore into a good woman was "/r9k/ tier posting." Though I think it was less about sluts and more about skank-dressed bitches or amazons that wanted the man in the kitchen and not the other way around. The OP not being smart ruined it, if I'm remembering right.

>>289048

I have to agree that setting him up with having to pick between two women and having him date both at the same time was probably not the best move as that will get really awkward. The focus is more on snek, but now you have to bring in the other bitch because you introduced it. You could treat it like an after thought or retcon it if you really hate it; It's not like we're paying for each installment here. Unless you're feeling a twist and go for her instead, you've already stated that it's mostly a snek story. I would have just focused on snek and made it a choice that he was already forced to make and this would have just been him trying to live with it or some kind of 2 week period to see if the marriage is agreeable. Have it be something like a trial period where you can keep such lines as "I'll fined a way to keep you." As for starting with small stuff, think of it as a build up for a payoff. Just keep enough stuff going on while hinting more about the characters for the eventual payoff. Or if you've got the stomach for it, go crazy. Either's fine.

>>289020

Sorry I read that as "feminizing male warriors' and that implies crossdressing.

Dyslexia fucking sucks man.

>>289089

Well yeah, I already want to rewrite it to remove that weird shit. Honestly the hardest part of writing that story. I was thinking along the lines of just going with the original CYOA idea of, he picked milfsnake and was stuck with her, no warning or anything. Alternatively, he may not have even been able to choose, though that's even harder to justify in the story than the original "month-long grace period" thing. Still not the best, but it gets rid of that thing.

Another chapter of The Care and Feeding of Magical Creatures is up.

sadehall.tumblr.com/3/just-who-the-hell.html

It's not mine, I just think it's a good read.

I made this:

https://pastebin.com/XTW9Uh2A

>>289295

Nice introduction, but when will they hug?

"Randall saved everyone. So why the fuck did you murder him?"

Chapter 17 of A Stranger in Paradise: Vwyaje

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/05/20/vwyaje/#more-740

>>288380

Good stuff, anon. It's always great to get more Salamander stories. Also it's neat to see a living armor girl in it, I don't see too many stories with them (or about them in general).

I'm working on a larger story and I figured I'd post what I got so far here

https://pastebin.com/FwqLsj2V

>>287822

That one seems way too Tumblr to get into. I can deal with a bit of self righteous politics - insertion, but the minute it starts becoming entire paragraphs of non sequitur rather than just aside sentences is the point where I give up on attempting to force immersion.

At least the guy behind it didn't flip his shit at Lovecraft over that cat named after the 44th U.S. president.

>>289362

I'm basing this over that Jabberwocky Dio thread story.

“Fights are when people die. Before and after you gotta celebrate. Gotta remember what’s good in life, so you can hold onto it.”

Chapter 18 of A Stranger in Paradise: Manjé

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/05/23/manje/

>>289295

Here is part two:

https://pastebin.com/tJyH1YkW

I wanted to create a sci-fi story and I'm wondering what use would a interstellar empire would have use for Mamono mana? I want to do it makes FTL travel possible in the first place, but it feels to close to dune.

FTL communication perhaps? If FTL engines are required to be huge enough that you can't just send probes around for example.

Or just monsterization for easy habitation of planets with fauna.

>>290894

That sounds good, I was also thinking it'd be used for genetic engineering considering the sheer amount of monster girls that's available as well has terraforming.

Yo deadass what would happen to a normal person with non-insane libido in this world of mongirls?

>>290919

>niggerspeak

>>290920

>>290921

Now I want a story about Tyrone and his MG wife

"-and the quim-guzzling aristocratic horse you rode in on!"

Chapter 19 of A Stranger in Paradise: Danse

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/05/28/danse/

>>290918

You could have it be like ADAM in Bioshock, I think that was pretty flexible as far as that went.

Come to think of it, that would be a fun setting. Bioshock but instead of making you crazy ADAM monsterizes you if you're a grill and makes you horny if you're a boy.

>>291092

>and makes you horny if you're a boy.

So you just relive puberty? Doesn't sound that great tbh

I'm working on a story that's like 'The Purge' except instead of retarded stories about how people are inherently evil, it's going to be about 'The Snuggle' which is the one time of year in which monster girls in society are allowed to let go and monster out.

Would this interest anyone, or should I work on a different concept?

>>291488

Seems like a interesting twist on the usual full moon situation, I'd say go for it.

>>290922

That would be a fun read. A typical hoodrat being slowly civilized by a monster wife. He wants to fuck around and smoke weed all day but his wife says she's hungry so he gets a job to pay for food. He wants to live in his mom's house but his mom won't accept him fucking a monster and he finds himself leaving home to keep his wife instead of dumping her for the free room and board. He plans to leave her the moment she mentions pregnancy but she looks so happy when she tells him and when she rubs her full belly and when she finally holds their daughter in her arms that he realizes, he doesn't want to skip town the way his dad did, and his father before him, he wants to stay and raise the child, see her grow into a healthy, happy hellhound

>>291488

I think I'd enjoy that. You could also have some "angry" type monster girls who secretly want to snuggle as well, or maybe shy ones who are still hesitant to initiate snuggles. That'd be cool.

“I’m always open to the possibility that I’m making a terrible mistake. I find it cuts down on making terrible mistakes.”

Chapter 20 of A Stranger in Paradise: Kombaté

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/05/30/chapter-19-kombate/

>>291966

>>291967

>>291971

https://pastebin.com/spHH8Htm

Made my first attempt at writefaggotry, I would appreciate some criticism/feedback if you guys would be so kind.

polite sage because I really don't know if I should be posting this in more than one thread, but Im going to keep it to this and the Wan thread for now.

>>291972

>healing

Go on…

Going through the old archives is like walking into the past. There was a lot that's pretty close to unchanged but also quite a bit different it seems.that alp story though… not sure how I feel about that

>>291972

Holy shit

A story that isn't all hugs kisses and niceness. Keep going anon, I like this.

“That is the nature of men. Plenty destroys them. They grow, and grow, until they cannot be sustained, and then, they cannot stand to cull one another to fit the resources. It is why they collapse so violently.”

Chapter 22 of A Stranger in Paradise

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/06/06/chapter-22-for-the-straightforward-pathway-had-been-lost/

>>291972

Alright, consider me intrigued.

Throwing this out for someone to take a look at. If it's worth continuing I will.

https://pastebin.com/Lu41YW8f

>>291972

This is good shit dude. Please continue

Guys, so I have an idea for a CYOA ive been wanting to do. You're a slave to a king or queen and you can either do your best to work your way up into the ranks of royalty, or try to escape and bring down the king Or queen you would have use the help of either the fellow slaves to help you, or try to brown nose your way up the royal ladder. Sound good?

>>293552

You're going to have to be more specific than that.

>>293436

Didn't see this one earlier. It's started out pretty good. I'd like to see you continue it

"Choosing is for lesser beings. I will take everything that I want. I will help Nash, and I will save Horace, and there is not a thing you can do to stop me."

Chapter 23 of A Stranger in Paradise: Ye Who Enter Here

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/06/10/chapter-23-ye-who-enter-here

There is now a Monster Girl Encyclopedia section on Fanfiction.net.

Its under anime.

https://www.fanfiction.net/anime/Monster-Girl-Encyclopedia/

>>294192

Oh great, Normalfags ahoy. Whose bright idea was this?

>>291972

It looks good so far.

“A good attitude. Never let the gods tell you you’re any less than they. And if they do, give them Hell.”

Chapter 24 of A Stranger in Paradise: This Miserable Measure the Wretched Souls Maintain

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/06/13/chapter-24-this-miserable-measure-the-wretched-souls-maintain/

>>293436

keep going, it looks good though I cannot say I like the "/" to indicate the phone calls.

>>294970

I am fond your writings and all but I feel that you use "rolling of the eyes" and "raised eyebrow" expressions way too often. I would say that either one of theses expression appears once per chapter in nearly all of the books you have written. Also that the eye roll gesture seems unfitting in chapter 24 just before Nash fights Mammon; I could understand if this gesture was used in non-fighting or low stakes situation that is not the case in here. Maybe you should lower body languages to convey Nash's exasperation like a slouching of his shoulders. And maybe for Betty you can used her ears twitching or other cat like gestures to replace the raising of the eyebrows expression. To be honest I am not sure if this is valid criticism or not,

>>295019

yeah, the "/" sucks bad. It's my first time playing with pastebin, so the formatting leaves something to be desired. My personal copy looks great. I'll post more soon.

I'll ask, are there any monstergirl stories about human villains? Hell, it could well include the villain deciding on stopping being a villain for his new waifu and settling down/making a family together, but that's another story for another day.

I'm asking this question since I have vague ideas bouncing around in my head and I'm unsure on how to make that scenario work.

Damn, does anyone has the story with southern doctor? Or the chess kid and the oni, readable please?

>>295192

https://pastebin.com/A5V24NtH

Is this what you mean?

>>295298

Yeah that the one, thanks lad, you're a proper lad.

>>295095

Well I'm working on it. Originally i was going super villainy, then i decided I might, just try to make it comfy.

>>288927

I'm with this anon, that sounds like double-heresy. Innocents are to be protected. The dead are to be left in peace.

>>295450

>Finish my shift and go home. It’s a long walk, but it’s not like it hurts.

>I like walking alone, anyhow.

>Station is a bit out in the middle of nowhere, need to go through a forest to get there.

>I figure I’m not appealing enough to get grabbed, anyway.

>Feel like I’m being watched on the way home.

>Probably just paranoid, but I swear I see yellow eyes in the distance, and the rustling of leaves. The wind blowing a little too hard…

>Feeling pretty nervous.

>Still got fifteen more minutes until I’m home. Five minutes of forest.

>Been panicking for the last ten minutes.

>Still not running, though, that’ll egg it on.

>I think.

>Suddenly, she lands before me.

>I don’t even know from where, the nearest tree is like seven meters away.

>The mantis-girl, wearing a sweater and biker shorts. It shows her figure off quite well, though I was too busy screaming like a little girl to pay that much attention to it.

>Amazing thighs, though.

>”Thirty seconds head start.” She says. Her voice completely flat, nothing in the way of emotion.

>I barely register properly. I prattle out: “W-what?”

>”Twenty-nine, Twenty-eight…”

>It clicks

>I never ran so fast in my whole life, adrenaline pumping through me.

>Of course, my fastest doesn’t mean much, considering I’m an overweight retard who just plays vidya and shitposts

>Before I know it, I hear footsteps.

>More like stomps.

>*Tump* *Tump* *Tump*

>I’m crying as I force my hurting knees to run harder

>I know I’m fucking doomed. Those arms can cut me in half and she can outrun a fucking bullettrain

>I managed to piss off the assassin of the forest over a fucking speeding ticket.

>My legs hurt, my lungs burn, my head is pounding, but I’m still running. I can see the end of the forest!

>If I can just make it there, I’ll be safe. Civilisation! She won’t kill me there!

>Push out whatever I have left in me, as the tumps behind are still getting louder

>Almost there!

>Almost!

>I’m not dying today, god-damn it!

>Then, I trip. I fly, facefirst into a pile of leaves.

>I look back, and see that the mantis is already there, her eyes glowing brightly and her blades above me.

>”Too slow”

>As I look back, I see that the clearing wasn’t nearly as close.

>I never stood a chance

>>295451

>The blades slice down, I hear it cut through the air as I flinch away.

>I feel my shirt and pants tear, but I don’t feel pain.

>As I feel the cold air over my body, I realize she didn’t cut me.

>She bumps the clothing away using the blunt part of her arms, and then she says one word.

>”Mating.”

>It’s still monotone and cold. She removes her sweater and shorts, leaving her completely nude. She’s small in every respect, thin waist, small breasts, narrow hips. But it’s a gymnasts body, with musculature everywhere and amazing thighs.

>With the adrenaline in me, I can’t help it. I pop a stiffy faster than I ever did in my life

>My little boy has the same survival instinct as me, I suppose.

>She looks down, seemingly not even registering it.

>Drops to her knees, just above my dick. She looks at me like I’m garbage.

>At least she has a good feel for people

>She slams down. I groan in pain as the weight impacts my pelvis. I hold my breath and squeeze my eyes shut for the sequels…

>Nothing

>Confused, I open my eyes and look at the mantis girl.

>She’s twitching and shaking, her mouth hanging open. There’s a bit of drool on her chin as she just sits there, paralysed.

>I blink twice, just before she leans forward at a breakneck pace. Her head stops just before mine as she shudders again. She stifles a moan through clenched teeth, just before kissing me.

>It’s rough and inexperienced. She’s just forcing her tongue into my mouth, thrusting indiscriminately as her hips get moving again.

>It’s like a damned jackhammer, going so fast and so clumsy it almost hurts

>Almost.

>I cum after a minute, her mouth not leaving mine the whole time as her upper body continues to twitch and shake.

>She finally removes herself from my mouth, her tongue still lolling out as she removes herself from my cock. She’s panting from the exertion and pleasure, and then cradles me in her arms.

>”G-good…”

>She actually falls asleep on me, with her scythes just below my shoulders.

>Can’t move, or I’ll cut myself.

>Fuck.

>>291488

Should have called it 'the urge'. But yea, go for it we can always use more content on this board.

>>295450

>>295451

>>295452

I liked it. Mantis (Manti?) are cute! Cute!

https://pastebin.com/L3TnQBkS So I wrote a thing. I hope you guys enjoy.

>>295751

Good. Fucking. Shit.

“THIS IS FURY, NASH! THIS IS THE FORCE THAT DRIVES MEN TO BREAK PROPHECIES! THIS IS WHAT THE HUMAN SPIRIT IS ALL ABOUT!”

Chapter 25 of A Stranger in Paradise: Papé Satan Aleppe

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/06/18/chapter-25-pape-satan-aleppe/

“That is why we enslave gods! Because they would enslave you! Spend the rest of eternity keeping you under their heel! You, of all people, should realize how desperately important this is!”

Chapter 26 of A Stranger in Paradise: The Vice and Virtue of Mankind

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/06/20/chapter-26-the-vice-and-virtue-of-mankind/

>>287612

Tired. Will write more. Kept it short and sweet.

https://pastebin.com/HSCNsnCU

>>292582

I just want more Pushy Orc!

>>295751

Damn that's good.

The fact that you leave it open is frustrating as fuck. But it wouldn't be the same otherwise.

>>295751

>Monsterboy

Incubi don't grow horns or tails. That and the MC seems kinda like an arrogant dumb asshole. But good read nonetheless, better than most.

Writefag idea, please analyze. I want to fine-tune it before pressing onward.

In my headcanon, the order represents well, order, civility, restraint, some degree of abstinence and ethics, amongst other religious values. They also advocate 'the needs of the many' philosophy. Due to their faith, they are immune to monsterization (atleast to some degree), so they cannot fall and convert that easily. The religious body(aka church) holds authority and the head priest is the de facto commander and ruler of this faction. The order hates the extremists for their abilities to corrupt and forcibly convert others, which they see as a form of mindrape/brainwashing and the equalists for being 'spineless losers who don't understand the true powers of humans and gods'.

Then there are the equalists. These people live with monsters freely, but have nothing against humans either. They understand that monsters should integrate with humans to form a single unified race that can prosper. They take some values of the order such as abstinence and civility, but not to the order faction's degree and also, don't pledge faith to any god. They trade and interact freely with monsters as well as humans. They believe in their work and are governed by a democracy. However, they oppose the extremists faction for forced conversion and the Order for being 'an obstacle to a path of unified peace'.

The extremists are the dark demon realms. They believe that monsters are the next step in human evolution and that the monster should be the female counterpart to the human male. They are sexual, cunning, fierce and encompass the more 'rapey' monsters. They also make liberal use of DE, which brings them to odds with the Order, who advocate DE as a form of mind control. Their beliefs in their superiority and the forced conversions put them at odds with the equalists, who believe that humans should choose to become monsters on their own accord and regularly fight and thwart their raids.

Maybe I shouldn't be putting this up here, but I want some honest criticism on the setting, which is very vital for a story. And I'm not as talented as Ace and some other writefags on this board so pls no bully.

>>296926

So equalists are fedoras who can see people calling down the wrath of god and still go, "Heh, mere superstition. I am enlightened by my OWN intelligence!"? If one sides with the equalists, are they forced to swear off faith if they had one already?

>>296950

Not quite. The equalists acknowledge gods, but don't worship them. Understandable, as they do support monsters that the chief god detests. They do pray to eros though.

>>296926

I should mention this in case it isn't clear-monsters are a part of the latter two factions. The calm, submissive,equal domain monsters such as holstaurs, kikis, lizardmen, inari,etc are a part of the equalists, and the highly rapey and aggressive ones such as hellhounds, manticores, demons, devils, the sabbath, etc are a part of the exrtemists. Exceptions exist, of course.

>>291972

Are you going to continue to write it or not? Been waiting 3 weeks with no update…

>>297417

This, would love to see it continued.

"I may not be greater than God, but I am certainly Heaven's equal."

Chapter 27 of A Stranger in Paradise: Abandon All

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/06/25/chapter-27-abandon-all/

https://pastebin.com/YNZbeTui I finished the 2nd part of >>295751. I hope you guys enjoy it.

Not able to go to concert tomorrow. Will write something. Any suggestions?

>>297890

Would be nice to see something cute/lewd with a Kunoichi.

>>297895

I am sorry. I dont know if this is cute or feels

https://pastebin.com/5AJHq2yz

>>297884

I just love seeing Melissa get so close to fucking him, but missing every time. Pls bully more, it's just adorable with how she reacts.

>>297933

<nut it was wooth the wait

shit nigga poetry at its finest

>>298015

Yeah writefagging from a cell phone is very fun.

There were four people on the island who could change that dark fate. One was a man, one was a cat, one was War, and one was death.

Chapter 28 of A Stranger in Paradise: Hope

https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/06/27/chapter-28-hope/

>>288119

Anyone?>>288119

>>298539

Running Laps is /monster/core greentext about an oni, even though it's not nearly as well-written as the incubus story.

https://pastebin.com/A5V24NtH

>>285545

<Semi-Incubized Vet (not lewd)

If I remember right, didn't the anon who had been writing that browse /monster/ and say that maybe he should get around to actually completing the story?

"Those who fight to save the world know they have no choice but to be invincible. They have to win every time. Anything else would be unacceptable."

Chapter 29 of A Stranger in Paradise: And I Saw An Angel Coming Down Out Of Heaven

Available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/07/01/chapter-29-and-i-saw-an-angel-coming-down-out-of-heaven/

"There's still room in this world for gods and monsters. Humans still want us. They still love and care for us. They may not need us, but they still want us to be a part of their lives. This despair's going to pass, Huitzilopochtli. I believe in them."

Chapter 30 of A Stranger in Paradise, The Seventh Angel, available here:https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/07/04/chapter-30-the-seventh-angel/#more-811

Okay, so I'm disappointed by the current drought of apsara-related material, but I don't have any ideas for new stories. So I figured, what the hell, might as well do a quick-n-sloppy translation of an already existing apsara-partly-in-disguise story from another language…

Had some trouble with this, though, and not just because I haven't had a decent night's sleep in a week. If you notice me jumping back and forth between present and past tense, that's because the original JPN writefag was being kind of weird about it and confused the shit out of me reading it. Also, he front-loaded all the lewds in the first half of the story; the back half is part mushy stuff, part worldbuilding.

Well, for better or worse, here it is. The file contains a link to the original story, in case anybody thinks they can do a neater job than I managed.

https://pastebin.com/PE2UJniE

“Hello, Auntie.”

Chapter 31: And Its Rider’s Name Was Death

https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/07/08/chapter-31-and-its-riders-name-was-death/

Alright, here's some Loli Succubi action. I've worked on this for a few months now, and i'm still not entirely happy with is, but I can't do anymore to it.

https://pastebin.com/LFGicRBA

“Your whole fucking faux-pacifist philosophy is horse-shit. Because when it really counts, you can’t save the people you love.”

Chapter 32 of A Stranger in Paradise: He Was Hurled To Earth

https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/07/11/chapter-32-he-was-hurled-to-earth/

>>301001

<Julia-kun

<kun

anon pls

>>301001

Not bad.

>>301459

Not the best choice of honorifics, I'll admit, I didnt even think about it

>>301520

Thanks. Any criticisms/thoughts?

>>301652

It was pretty solid overall, I liked the description of Alice's magic and the way that the MC's narration seemed to get more extreme after she used it. Jane was a fun character as well, although I found it a little odd that she took the time to write out 'Johnny-boy' within a text message - really minor, but it just seemed slightly strange. The fact that he started calling her 'Princess' without knowing why, and the later explanation was a nice touch.

I do think that the MC went from 'why did you dump this girl on me' to 'alright she's not so bad' to 'I love her forever' too fast. I know that would have been Alice's magic, but imho you could have done more to flesh out why he made that emotional jump so quickly. Also what >>301459 said, I'm no expert on honorifics but I think Julia-chan would be more appropriate than Julia-kun.

Overall, not bad, I'd give it a 7/10. Keep at it, man.

>>301795

Thanks man, I will. Now I just have to pick the subject of my next attempt

“Maybe,” said Nash. “It’s amazing what people are capable of. It can surprise the hell out of you.”

Chapter 33 of A Stranger in Paradise, available here: https://hellskitchensink.com/2017/07/15/chapter-33-the-second-death/

https://pastebin.com/M3bZA6xZ another part to the adventures of the Crab. Hope you boys enjoy it.

A ton of monstergirls are based on mythological creatures. Are there any decent stories out there that take those mythological origin stories and make them /monster/?

For example the 12 labours of Hercules but instead of killing the hydra he bullies or wrestles her into submission and instead of capturing Cerberus he kidnaps a tsun hellhound or something.

Does something like that exist already? Maybe it's a dumb idea but I think it could be fun.

>>304140

Not to my knowledge but that does sound like an interesting project, I'd read it.

>>302859

I've been enjoying the adventures of Lovejoy. Thanks for continuing

I did a writefag a long time ago in the sons thread about a bro with two sisters-one vampire and one dhampir and a dumbass succubutt who has a crush on him. I kinda left it hanging. Should I pick up on it? not against just leaving it, if you think that the story is just fine that way…

>>282970 (OP)

/tg/ awhile back asked me to make actual villains for the setting since both factions are portrayed in such a banal manner.

I qoute,"Create a world of unconditional love and sex. Rustle the jimmies of sexless edgelords."

So we decided on "the Lords Who Stand on the Edge of Eternity"

Gaius the Fallen One: basically pissed off Archaon

The Child Swordsman: the remnant of the god of murder, petty cruelty revenge, and partical jokes. A weeaboo looking tryhard who was killed by the other gods for being a shithead. Basically a deranged Peter Pan.

Sarkoth Athmon: lich who works for Nyarlathotep, Conan references

Osten Vampire King: oldschool vamp

Selena Marcario the Whistler to the Stars: raped forever-loli who is definitely anti-lewding and has a shitton of Shantak pokemans

The Crawling Dragon: draconic cthulhu

https://pastebin.com/38uQBNpG

You ready for some intentionally grimdark tryhard bullshit?

>>304258

I find the vampire lord most sympathetic. More pls.

>>304257

Go for it, I was curious which way that story was headed anyway

>>304258

>He ran from his own women, his former son, and two former men whom he had considered as close to something like friends as a vampire could have. He was a victim of his own prosperity

sounds like a /pol/lack realizing there's no more white people on earth.

im glad you built upon this

>>304258

>The Child Swordsman

Think this one needs to be fleshed out more -- he got like three sentences and that's all so far. I don't know why, but I'm imagining him as a younger, more psychotic-looking version of Donatello's bronze David.

Hey, I'm a new writefag. Well, I've been writing for a few years now, but I'm new to writing these kinds of story.

Can any veterans out there give me some tips before I get to work? Give me literally anything and everything that a new smut writer might need to know.

>>304590

NTR and Futa is verboten

Other than that have fun, post some shit and we'll pull it to bits.

>>304590

/monster/ thrives on comfy. if you can't write smut, then don't. Write heartwarming stories and everyone here will love you

>>304257

>Busy playing vidya

>elven archer shows up

>I know he's elven for two reasons

>Only elves are retarded enough to use archers in a game where rocket launchers, bombs, chainguns sniper rifles and laser pistols are the norm

>The other reason is his ear-gratingly high nasally voice

>Junior is playing a 'M' rated game before his voice even cracked

>Let's have some fun with him

>Text him over voice chat for a little one-on-one

>Winner gets the loser's custom-crafted weapon

>These things are worth their weight in gold in the game

>Junior accepts

>We pledge our weapon of choice

>Oh, wow, a Dragonbone hand-crafted yew longbow

>That'll be a good addition to my 'trash weapons to scrap' collection

>Doesn't matter how rare it is, junk is junk

>Put forth my gold-scope rifle

>My favorite rifle, perfect for blowing opponent heads into pink dust

>CONFLICT CHALLENGE BEGIN

>Hmm, junior is quite skilled

>he's aware of common sniping spots and is pretty accurate with his money-bought bow

>not good enough though

>6 more kills before I win

>"You got the first kill, but I'll win!!!'

>lol kid, dare to dream

>"Anon"

>5 more kills before I win

>Get my crosshairs on him as he squeals in his mic about how my loadlout is garb-

>Junior's head disintegrates

>Immediately nearly rendered deaf by his squeaky voice claiming I'm cheating

>Tries bot-scan, I pass the test

>More screaming about how the whole system is rigged

>kek, no dice, kiddy

>4 more kills before I win

>"Hey Anon"

>Not now, gotta concetrate

>"You are cheating, but I'll still beat you and show the world that cheaters never pr-"

>BAM

>3 more kills before I win

>"What the hell!? My teacher said that cheaters never win!"

>I'm not cheating, baby-boy. You just suck

>"N-nnoo, you're cheating! I'm the best player in this game!"

>BAM

>"This isn't gonna work…"

>Hell if I care

>2 more kills before I win

>Junior is getting actively scared now, begins begging for mercy

>lolnope.jpg

>more raging, tries the bot-scan again, I pass it again

>He totally flips his shit

>BAM

>1 more kill before I win

>Now he's actually crying, saying how he spent 40$ on that bow and how much he loved it

>Shouldn't have come here then

>No mercy, whoever you are

>Starts offering money, codes, his elder sister, basically whatever I could ever want

>I. WANT. TO. DESTROY. YOUR. BOW.

>"Bu-but why? It is a good expensive weapon! Please, you can't even use it!"

>Don't care bitch, it's mine now

>Line up the crosshairs on his head and-

>ERROR

>huh?

>SYSTEM DISCONNECTED CONFLICT FORFEITED

>allmywut.gif

>WTF WHY

>Wifi is off

>"Guys, he's back in the real world!"

>Someone's gonna die

>Alright, who turned off the modem?

>"Me."

>Why, dad?

>"Because you've played long enough"

>Yeah, fuck you too. What do you want?

>Apparently, lil Sis wants to go to a book expo

>Big Sis has got a date with Faggot

>So guess who has to accompany her through that nightmare

>Oh well, a book doesn't sound all bad

>I haven't read one in seven months

>And I may find something relevant to my study…

>Fine what the hell. I don't get a choice here, but that doesn't mean I can't make the best out of it

>Let's go. GET IN THE CAR NOW!

Before you sperg out, KC says elves are a kind of humans, like dwarves, so I don't think elven males are /chaos/-tier. Then again, KC was the one who made the siths…. If it seems weaker compared to the previous, it's because I've been out of touch for a while. I'll continue this tomorrow.

>>304787

Pretty much.

https://pastebin.com/s5fJFCKs

Here it is, any criticism or thoughts are greatly appreciated! I intend on making two more parts for this little story at some point in the future.

(Also if I fucked up this link or pastebin I'll try to not make the same mistake in the future)

>>304788

Thanks!

>>304791

I like it, I originally thought this was going to be about a stoic old war hound and the squire. You got my attention.

https://pastebin.com/GNNq2BUU

My first piece of writefaggotry, I'd appreciate any criticism and hope you enjoy reading it. Content warning, there's /ss/.

>>304791

Certainly seems to be off to an interesting start. Keep it up!

How would you guys like a story about a highscool aged Anon that poses as a douchebag manwhore, but is a matchmaker in the shadows?

/monster/ has a kneejerk reaction when harem and NTR are involved, but would a dude that gets a lot of girlfriends, then dumps them and finds them a new boyfriend be okay?

Been toying with a Cupid Anon thing for a while, but I don't know where you guys draw the line.

>>305779

Monster girls get pretty attached, anon. Wouldn't that involve a lot of heartbreak and fighting off rape?

>>305779

Plus, why does he have to date them first in order to find them a boyfriend?

>>305780

>>305782

Yeah, It's pretty retarded but equally as fun to write.

>Monster girls get pretty attached, anon. Wouldn't that involve a lot of heartbreak and fighting off rape?

Yes to the first one, mostly no to the second one.

He acts like big enough of a turd that the Mongirls decide he's not worth the time.

>Plus, why does he have to date them first in order to find them a boyfriend?

I thought of the premise a long time ago, not sure how to answer that.

I think it was something of him being an underground man combined with using the dating time to get to know them better and find the best match for them.

He was a beta that got cheated on by a human, so he got /fit/, became a Normalfag and the mongirls started coming onto him.

Not fully recovered from his break up, and not wanting to be proactively dated he said yes to the first one that asked him out, avoided what normal coples do (smooching, fugging) and when she started getting desperate he found another girl and fucked off.

Since I'm not writing him to be a rotten human, but a damaged one, he doesn't leave it at that.

So he finds her an actual loving boyfriend.

After that, he rolls with it, and keeps doing it, satisfied with making others happy, too scared to get in a relationship, but secretly wishing that someone would look at him as a good person or something like that.

That's more or less how the train(wreck?) of inspiration went.

Dunno, it sounds good in my head, but maybe it's all silly.

>>305787

Oh yeah, and

>Wouldn't that involve a lot of heartbreak

I kinda like drama, so yeah, tons of heartbreak.

But no sad ends, everything's gonna be daijobu.

>>305787

I think the premise could work, but a few details need ironing out. You say he dates the girls to get to know them, but how does he know who they would be a good match with? I imagine he doesn't date the boys as well, so clearly he has some way to learn enough about people to play matchmaker without dating them.

The MC could be the playboy that the girls all like, but he knows he's not the right match for them, so he strings them along until he can devise some way to get them to recognize their true perfect match, who, for whatever reason, they may have overlooked at first.

He doesn't need to date them to get to know them, he can just learn about them like a normal person. No, he dates them because they all want him and he uses that to his advantage. This makes it, in my opinion, a little more plausible that he would date them all before hooking them up with other boys. It's part of the setup, part of his method. It's easier for him maneuver them into his benevolent schemes as Chad than trying to use more conventional matchmaking methods.

The personality elements look fine. Being afraid of a real relationship but still wanting some kind of validation from the girls he dates is perfectly believable. I would say to just make sure he seems outwardly confident and desirable. He's the playboy, so he obviously needs a certain level of charisma to make that work.

This is your idea, so you can do whatever you want with it, of course. These are just some of my suggestions. This can work, it just needs a little refinement (see: my suggestions) for all the elements to fully mesh together into a convincingly plausible story premise.

>>305847

Yeah, that's more or less how it's gonna work out.

>You say he dates the girls to get to know them, but how does he know who they would be a good match with? I imagine he doesn't date the boys as well, so clearly he has some way to learn enough about people to play matchmaker without dating them.

Im gonna make him charismatic enough to befriend most of the boys and bully the ones that he can't.

That'll probably make it a bit more interesting.

>He doesn't need to date them to get to know them, he can just learn about them like a normal person. No, he dates them because they all want him and he uses that to his advantage. This makes it, in my opinion, a little more plausible that he would date them all before hooking them up with other boys. It's part of the setup, part of his method. It's easier for him maneuver them into his benevolent schemes as Chad than trying to use more conventional matchmaking methods.

Pretty much.

Would making him have a sidekick that helps him with gathering info, matchmaking help? HE'D just date the ones that would too difficult to set up without direct contact, or the ones that are really dedicated yo getting him.

Would that make more sense?

>>306053

>Would making him have a sidekick that helps him with gathering info, matchmaking help? HE'D just date the ones that would too difficult to set up without direct contact, or the ones that are really dedicated yo getting him.

Would that make more sense?

Yes, I'd say it would make sense. Maybe when he first started doing this he didn't collect intel or initially plan anything ahead, everything might have been more improvised. As he gets more comfortable doing it, though, it makes sense that he would become more calculated, and his methods would become more refined. It would be natural for him to start collecting intel prior to dates, and it's plausible that he would recruit someone to help him with that. It's also natural that he would only target specific girls. Not everyone needs a matchmaker, of course.

Again, these are just my personal suggestions, so feel free to take and leave pieces of at your discretion. There are plenty of ways you can make a good story by not using my advice at all, but these are the suggestions that came most naturally to me.

Recently tried writing again, but it feels more like a chore than a hobby, anyone have advice on making it fun again?

>>306123

Write the scenes you want to write to start. And commit to writing a thousand words. By the end of it you should have a rhythm.

>>306123

Don't force yourself to write. If you really want to do it, sit down and write something fun. Otherwise, get out of the house some, get some fresh air, whatever clears your head and makes you feel better. You'll get back into the swing of things at some point.

Hello. I've been trying my hand at writing after a long time without practice, and I thought I'd share something I've been working on. It's nothing all that special, but I'm hoping to improve and hopefully execute ideas better over time.

https://pastebin.com/JSiHqsid

I'm still not sure if I should keep it in greentext format or switch over to proper prose. At first, greentext style felt a bit more direct and appropriate for light "drop in" casual humor, but I'm having second thoughts.

>>306433

I really like it, they're all so cute the way they play around and act. The only part I didn't like was when it ended because there were no more cute misadventures of mamano orphans.

>>306433

On an unrelated note, I LOVED Beyond the Cage, I was really happy when I found out you finished it. My heart warms up every time I get to the part where Nana gets him out of the city.

>>306596

I'm glad you've enjoyed it. I plan on making (irregular) episodic updates for this one, with a new short story added every now and then, sort of like a Saturday morning cartoon.

>>306603

This makes me happy. I was intrigued to find out there were still people out there who were waiting to see that story being finished even after all this time. The guilt eventually drove me to actually finish it, not just for me, but for all the people who still remembered it. Now I see I made the right choice, writing it to the end was quite a ride. I hope it turned out good enough for everyone.

And to think it was originally going to be just a simple, short greentext story.

>>306433

>named after an inferior tank destroyer

0/10

>>306433

Real review: this story made me puke rainbows. Too cute for me.

Your other one is different. You write good, not going to lie. But the whole men=2nd class citizens is a trigger for my American genes. No country exept Sweden/Germany would pass laws like that. Still, interesting story, but I can't connect because I'd've killed myself with a jagged rock or something after 2 years.

>>306751

Thanks write friend I've enjoyed the story so far

>>306647

Thanks for reading.

I tried to keep the theme of "surviving and refusing to surrender" to the main character throughout that story. There were many others in the world who had the same mindset as him, forming human resistance movements. In hindsight, perhaps I should've made that detail a bit more apparent.

I don't really remember why I picked this username