/monster/ - The Last Bastion of Romance★

>>322271 (OP)

Now, I might as well put myself up first; I’ve been wanting to perform a proper greentext adventure of my own for a while now, and I’ve got a list of different ideas;

>Bumbling Squire gets separated from his Paladin master in the woods. He gets accosted by a young Lizardman, and wins the fight she forces him into through luck. When she isn’t deterred from lusting for him by his insistence that he isn’t really more skilled than her, he tries to deter her by claiming that he will instead help her find the strongest fighter in the world or at least the strongest they can get their hands on as her husband instead. They then began traveling together, the Squire trying to reunite with his master to save him from the Lizardgirl, and the Lizardgirl not really believing in the quest but using the experience to try to worm into the Squire’s affections on the road.

>Primary Female Perspective; Monstergirls takes a captured Paladin as her husband, but the man is unusually resistant to Incubization and keeps having violent outbursts, forcing her to drug him up into docility, but she isn’t always on top of his fits. After a while her community decides he’s too dangerous and say she only has a little longer to try to make him give up his aggression or they’ll have to lock him up. The pressure is on while she desperately tries to get through to her husband, especially when she finds out she’s pregnant.

>Taking place in Steampunk/Gaslamp Fantasy setting; a railroad circus/freak show travels through human-supremacist territories, it’s actors almost all monstergirls, with the owner, ringmaster/managers, and caretakers being human. The ringmaster is in a relationship with one of the performers, and is trying to hide it and his developing Incubization while juggling his duties of organizing the show and keeping the other girls from attacking any human men and getting them all locked up or worse. His lover also is trying to talk him into running away together and living a quiet family life somewhere far away.

>Dark comedy; The Order, running low on voluntary crusaders, starts conscripting violent criminals to perform black ops against the Demon Army. One particular team is sent deep into occupied territory and quickly get a crash course on how out of their league they are against high-level Mamono. The tables are turned, times running out, and they have only one hope of success; Being as edgy as humanly possible.

>>322280

I'd like to read that dark comedy plot not enough of those really.

>>322271 (OP)

You know what I'd like to see? A story where the order isn't a stereotypical chaotic stupid organization.

Something along the lines of where they don't mind the more vanilla MGs (kobolds, werecats/wolves, holst, etc.) but abhor ones like demons, devils, hell hounds, etc. because they're the "humans as slaves" kind of monsters. Darker than regular mge stuffs, but that's kinda what I'd like to see.

I'm really fucking tired of the "order is evil guys!" trope, same with "Iove you anon." "I love you too (blank)" endings.

I do have two ideas for stories that I've come up with, one of which would actually address what >>322318 wants. I don't have any names or lore set up for either story but I have a general idea in my head of how I want each one to go.

>story 1

Set several centuries after a cataclysmic event destroyed a great empire its survivors were scattered and cursed to a wandering existence in traveling caravans. The MC will be a boy who just entered into adulthood when his caravan is attacked and he eventually discovers the history behind the cataclysm.

>story 2

This world is pretty much split between monsters and men who are nearly constantly raiding each other but there's a general atmosphere of peace/stalemate. This changes after the monster nation launches major attacks for the purpose of converting the land to a demon realm, monsterizimg the female population and forcing the men into husbandhood. I am undecided on where I should have the humans and monster technologically. I wanted to do mid-medieval but that's practically been done to death so I've entertained something more like the colonial age.

>>322350

>story 2

You know what hasn't been done to death? Humans winning for once and forcing MGs to calm the fuck down.

I can name about 5 different stories about what you want to write, and none about what I suggest.

my two cents though, you do you m8.

>>322318

You just reminded me of another story idea that I’d forgotten about. This thread is already paying off:

>Set in the far future of the MGE universe; the Demon Lord has finally defeated the Order, converted all remaining human lands, and holds dominion over all the world… and Mamono still can’t produce sons. Panicking over the sustainability of their people and outraged at the perceived inadequency of their Lord, several Mamono factions lash out, and the world seems doomed to a cataclysmic civil war… until it’s discovered that a small percentage of the human population is resistant to Corruption. An industry of chattel slavery is quickly put in place, with the immune humans, called ‘Banals’, are rounded up and put in pens, hopped up on aphrodisiacs and fertility drugs, and made to produce more humans. Children are taken from the pens as infants and raised in a monster communal-nursery. Those that don’t inherent immunity typically start Corrupting as preteens and are then auctioned off for “adoption”, those that do are sent back to the pens in the mid-to-late teens. The Banals are derided and despised by most monsters, as their continued necessity is a galling reminder of their failure to completely eradicate the old ways of the world (and also because male Banals are unattainable as true mates). One day a Banal man escapes from the pens, bringing with him a newborn girl whom he was told in a vision was the Incarnation of the Chief God destined to one day rise up against the Demon Royal Family and return the world to Balance. He must raise her himself in the Wildlands in preparation for that day, and part of that preparation is deciding whether the Balance she champions will be The Old Ways, or true Prace between Man and Monster.

It’s a bit background-heavy and feels a touch too over-reversing on the “Cartoonishly Evil Order/Purely Good Mamonos” trope, but that’s why I’m fishing for feedback on here in the first place, to make these ideas work the best they can.

>tfw can't summarize my short story idea without either making it sound generic as shit or giving away the 'twist' that gives it a reason to exist.

This is truly suffering.

Fuck I'll try anyway

A fable-like story about a village of humans which lives along side a village of monsters (oni). Centered around man with a desire to do something great meets monster(girl), and the 'love' which they develop versus the prejudice and reservations from both sides. Now take that idea and imagine it was written by Gen Urobuchi and you have something similar to what I'm thinking of.

>>322271 (OP)

I've been hoping for a thread like this. I don't really consider myself much of a writefag, at least not a good one, but a thread here inspired a story idea that I've been working on off and on for a few weeks. I'm up to around 800 lines of greentext split up into several "episodes".

I'm beginning to wonder if I should rewrite it as a novella, but

1) I think I'd suck at having to do a more formal and descriptive style, and

2) The MC's (main character's) narration, complete with occasional random internal monologue and observations, is part of the charm, at least for me. Greentext works well for that. Are really long greentexts ok?

>The setting is a more or less modern day civilization, but with mamonos and magic as well as technology.

> Story primarily takes place in a snowy mountain town adjacent to a larger city in a region implied to be a version of Zipangu.

> Mountain town's biggest draw is a very nice inn and resort. Fine dining and accomodations, hot springs, spas, nature trails, etc. etc.

> Between the tourism from all over and the easy travel (trains, roads, etc.) connecting the mountain town and the city, the mountain town is a little quaint and cozy, but not really "out in the sticks".

> The overall flavor is some MGE, a nod or two to MonMusu, and a little head cannon, particularly whenever I feel like sanding off rough edges from the MGE world to suit my tastes.

> I haven't developed the world much beyond the initial setting, but the region, being based on Zipangu, is obviously mamono-friendly territory. Between that and the tourism, human/mamono relations are mostly relaxed there, though other areas of the world might be more neutral or even hostile to mamonos.

> Local mamono may flirt with or try to seduce single men, but full on rape is bad for business, so it's not very dangerous for single guys. Stay away from the really remote mountain areas where you might encounter an Ushi-Oni and you'll be fine.

> It's mostly slice of life and interactions between characters, so I don't really have an "end" to it, though I have developed one arc in which the MC learns magic.

Here are a few pieces I could use some brainstorming help with, though.

< Any worldbuilding around the inn and resort would be helpful. For example, what mamono types might work there and what jobs might they do? What sort of attractions might the inn and resort complex offer? The town (due to the resort) and the city is cosmopolitan enough that the mamonos don't need to be exclusively from Zipangu or snowy regions as long as they can bear the climate. Examples I have though of so far:

Inari - owner and manager

Ryu and/or Shirohebi - works at local shrine if the town or inn has one.

White Horn - works at inn as trail guide, park ranger, and emergency first responder

Yeti - works at inn, still trying to figure out a good job. Cooks in the restaurant or cafe? Also a volunteer first responder when needed.

That's all I've got so far.

< Need ideas for a scenario in which MC, while staying at the resort, finds himself outdoors and, through injury, weather, and/or terrain, winds up stuck out in the woods/mountainside/trail/etc. Found by someone, but conditions (blizzard? way back impassable? etc.) force them to hole up as best they can for a night or two until they can safely make it back to the inn (or until more help can arrive if MC is too injured to walk back)

< Later down the line, I could use suggestions for a mamono type to use for a deranged serial killer. Stalks couples, kills the mamono, drains and kills the man, rinse and repeat. Something that would be legitimately dangerous, but also something that could concievably be stopped by, say, two thoroughly ticked off onis. I could go with an ogre, but am open to other ideas. (I know that mamono never actually kill. I'm thinking this one is abnormally psychopathic and an escaped convict)

>>322358

I know what you mean. It always ends with the order losing, some kind of stalemate, or the MC just runs off with the girl.

>>322358

>>322376

If you want to go with something that gives the Order reasonable motivations beyond "mamono bad, humanity good, Ilias Vult!", you could always explore the lost of one's home or friends (to monsterization) that would come about as a dark demon realm encroaches on human lands.

Maybe that paladindu has seen things, lost things, man. Watched his father's farm become ruined, barren, and then overrun with alien flora. Maybe he has watched his mother, sister, or childhood sweetheart change before his very eyes into a warped form and uncharacteristic demeanor that was scarcely recognizable. Maybe, on some nights, his mind wanders back to the once quaint and wholesome village that he grew up in, now a hive of the decadent and the bizarre.

>>322379

https://pastebin.com/DqC1PqT6

How is this for Paladindu's not being idiots? I could continue it if people like it and want more detail.

>>322368

Before anyone jumps on me, yes I just realized that I misspelled "canon" as "cannon". Sorry. In a thread like this, at least one person is bound to pick up on that. Half the time, that person would be me.

>>322364

A couple things wrong with that.

1) that's a fucking dark setting. Like, bordering on grimderp.

2)that's just going to be another undead invasion story. Ie, paladindus are going to poke fun at it.

3) from a logistical standpoint, selective breeding like that will just result in every child born being immune after a few generations. Not only that, but if it's common knowledge, I'd imagine that'd make for serious civil unrest.

Not to mention MGs who get husbands like that would probably feel super guilty about it, seeing as they literally bought a person who was raised with the soul purpose of being a husband to a person they've never meet. I'd be if the situation was reversed.

>>322409

>bordering on grimderp.

I agree. Definitely went overboard on the dehumanizing conditions. Lemme try dialing it back some;

Instead of outright breeding pens, Banals are kept in enclosed, rigidly monitored and regulated ghettos were they live and perform menial labor in major Mamono cities (second-class citizens instead of outright animals.) Human couples mostly are just heavily incentivized to procreate through generous parental downtime and material rewards; getting locked in a room and doped up is only for those couples that stubbornly refuse to make children for more than a couple of years. Marriages between Banals are encouraged and legally safeguarded by Mamono authorities. Health and beauty potions to extend and preserve Banals’ lives and fertile periods are liberally given, and Mamono take care not to overtax or abuse them.

Children are only taken to the Monster-run boarding houses when they reach school-age. Girls that show signs of Monsterization are genuinely adopted off, boys that show signs of Incubization are sheltered until their early teens, then let out onto the road to find their own way in life and love. Child Banals are sent back home as preteens when their status is clear; families are allowed to stay together as far as circumstance enable. Anti-Immunes bigotry isn’t violent in nature (they’re still human and Mamono thus still are hardwired to preserve their lives,) it mostly takes the form of mocking their lack of supernatural traits and thus “boring” lives, hence the pejorative of “Banal.”

Hope that takes at least some of the edge off.

>another undead invasion story

I’m not familiar with that work, but I always swear by the Fiction Identity Postulate; no matter how good or stupid a story sounds in concept summary, the thing that determines its actual quality is execution.

>paladindus are going to poke fun at it.

Oh, well I can’t do anything to prevent shitposting, so I guess I’ll just have to be on guard and hope Aux doesn’t throw the baby out with the bathwater in that regard.

>every child born being immune

I intend to treat it like Bending was in A:TLA; the potential to have it is genetic, but whether it ever actually develops is determined by the individual’s quality of spirit. That admittedly, is also influenced by genetics, but other factors matter enough that it’s difficult and uncommon for it to become 100% pervasive.

Besides that; the Demon Lord is already the kind to respond to a resource crisis with “let’s just use all our remaining fuel on R&D and hope we have a solution before we run dry” based on her Grand Strategy against the Chief God in the World Guide, and I doubt she’s the kind to acknowledge where she went wrong the first time, though that might be too uncharitable of me.

>if it’s common knowledge, I'd imagine that'd make for serious civil unrest.

Not necessarily; a steady trickle of new blood and assurances that a more effective solution is being worked on would pacify most common Mamono. If you meant unrest on the human’s part, well, they’re massively outnumbered, disarmed, physically outmatched by most if not all Mamono, divided up between numerous population centers, and under heavy watch. There’s not much they can do.

>probably feel super guilty about it, seeing as they literally bought a person

During the war, Mamono would sell themselves into slavery to get close to men, treating ownership contracts as next-level matrimony bonds. They also literally treat rape as a romantic ideal. Those that don’t assault, use Charm Magic to groom and hypnotize men into loving them back. Mamono are sociopathic in the pursuit of mates, or at least place next to no value in the concept of personal liberty, don’t forget that. Making this argument out of principle though; you’re still right that in it’s really edgy and should be reworked, and so it has, as detailed above.

Thank you for your feedback. Our interaction this night has hopefully helped refine and forward this concept along into becoming a proper, decent-quality story.

>>322426

I'd say scrap the whole second class human bit. That whole thing leaves a bitter taste in my mouth.

MC goal is a good one, just used in the wrong place.

>>322448

Was my idea so bad that it killed the thread? I'd like to know what other people think of it. Central point would be that the slave girl would be happy to do anything for her master but the MC doesn't feel it's right to just order her to have sex with him.

>>322602

No, your idea wasn’t so bad that it killed the thread. I like it, it only reminds me of ‘Teaching Feeling’ minus the physical abuse you mentioned. I think my main concern with it is that it might be too similar to the game already. I’m not saying you should give it a new twist or anything, it’s just a minor thing. It’s fine as it is if you plan to write it that way. That said, what mamano do you think could play the role of slave girl?

So I have two different stories I’ve been bouncing around in my head alongside my gargoyle cyoa.

One of them I’m already writing up and the other is just some vague concept. Both are just something to do inbetween posts for the cyoa while I’m waiting for posts or have downtime at work. Both would be writefag only, because I am a pretty lazy drawfag.

The first idea I’m already working on:

>A family of hunters have an old tradition they hold between a northern offshoot tribe of amazoness warriors they call Woods Wives. The tradition involves both parties sending one of their own to hunt one another in the hopes of claiming them as their spouse. The story follows Anon, the next in line as the head of his family. He is an experienced hunter, but even he couldn’t be prepared for what was coming.

The second idea is less developed, more just a general setting without anything solid, but it might be another cyoa:

>You are an independent spacenaut, a born explorer who only has two responses for aliens: fighting and fucking. Sometimes both! For you, finding new life forms is almost as fun as making them.

I’m not sure where I would post this stuff, if the first one should be a sort of episodic greentext with its own thread or just a written story to pastebin on the writefag thread. Same for the second story. I don’t want to shit up the board with redundant threads.

>>322917

I like the second idea a lot. Perhaps you could launch each 'episode' as a block of greentext and adjust the encounters as series of short but high-impact deliveries of story

>>322923

Do you think it deserves its own thread? I’ll have to workshop it a little before I start posting. Maybe they can be written as sort of serials like from the 50s or something. Just an idea.

>>322917

I would probably wanna see the first one happen.

>>322964

>>322925

I guess I’ll start a new thread soon that I can post both of these in and when one is done I’ll start the next. Sound good?

>>322965

Sounds good to me I can't wait to read them

>>322965

If all you want is feedback/betaing. I’d suggest just making pastebin stories with greentext format and posting links on this thread.

If you’re gonna start a new thread for stories, my suggestion would be to mark it as a general Write-Thread.

Only make a thread for a specific story if you’re certain you’re gonna write enough to take up all that space.

I've had this idea going for the last year or so and this is the first time I've ever put it down in writing so bear with me

>Fantasy monstergirl land, typical fantasy level of technology and setting

>Two kingdoms comprise the entirety of civilization, one stereotypically evil for monsters and one stereotypically good for humans

>Monstergirls come around in standard MGE Monsterlord transformation fashion, human females are extinct within two generations

>Kingdoms open doors to each other, peace achieved as world unites as waifus and husbandos

>Over time, the "good" kingdom starts pushing out more monstrous girls to fiefs and villages far from the capital, with no men and only monthly shipments of pre-extracted semen to survive off of

>Current monster lady notices this, "evil" kingdom accepts outcasts

>Variety of mishaps, false flags, and terrorist attacks reignite the old war, only with men and continued breeding/survival as the stakes

>"Good" kingdom summons an isekai hero to save them, either a generic human from our world who genuinely believes he's fighting for JUSTICE, or a bluehair Fat dykes who intends to reshape the world in our world's image by acting as advisor and champion

At this point I had two ways I wanted to start from, and many ways I wanted to take the plot

<Anon McFirstPerson gets summoned as an isekai hero for the "evil" kingdom by an impetuous monster lady who doesn't think it's fair the "good" kingdom gets one and she doesn't

>Third party remnant human woman attempts to use magic to summon our world's space military, circa 2200, to reshape our uncivilized world with progressiveness and liberalism, Anon and isekai hero unite to save the world

>Anon contends with "good" kingdom as "champion of evil", overcomes in a fantastic military campaign, many waifus along the way, exposes paladyke for what she is, world unites in peace again

<Anon McNecromancer is a third party contending with both kingdoms because they see his army of waifus and fleshy utility as immoral and fundamentally wrong, despite all of his constructs being piloted by willing participant spirits

>Anon unites castaways of the world under his banner, becomes a third significant kingdom and rules a morally different society where necromancy is seen as useful etc etc

>Anon conquers the world with the power of necromancy, becomes a fair king though many don't approve of his methods, somewhere along the line there's a battle involving a gigantic waifu nightmare engine mecha flesh golem piloted by him and his ghost compatriots, a la Gurren Lagann

I really like the necromancy idea, but it seems edgy. I also really like the flesh golem idea, but I'm not cuhrayzee enough to write that.

>>323059

So another "Order bad, monster good!" story? That bit puts me off, but the rest sounds interesting.we need some more edgy stories that are more than the below formulas.

List:

>hero is a Paladin that goes to fight monsters, finds wife and give up.

>hero is generic farm dude, monsters invade and he gets wife

>modern dude lives normal life, gets raped and wife

>femdom story where men are basically slaves

>dude gets kidnapped, oddly ok with it, gets a wife

>all above end with "I love you" from both monster and guy

>any others I missed, feel free to contribute

No one is willing to make new ideas because odds are half the board is going to call him out for some detail like monsters being actually the evil ones because change is bad.

/tg/'s right, if 8chan were to fall to any chaos god, it'd be Nurgle.

>>323069

Yeah, it seems pretty generic and kind of derivative of that CYOA, which is why I'm leaning more toward the other thing. I kind of glanced over details in favor of keeping that long-ass post short, but the isekai story there would turn into both kingdoms acknowledging their fears of extinction and the different way they handled it to band together against a common enemy. I'm not particularly interested in writing another generic anon character anyway, which might be the reason I never did anything with it. The necromancer as an anarcho-capitalist third party who just wants money and power feels a lot more fun to write, and has the bonus letting me use some of the more underappreciated undead girls as a cast of wacky characters.

Also I found the story that inspired the necromancer idea from an old writefaggotry master list, it's at https://pastebin.com/u/Zappy

I have a few various ideas for stories, but I don't think I'd ever actually do much with them beyond the initial concept.

I don't mind posting a few here if anyone is interested, as long as it's understood that I'm not asking anyone to write anything, just sharing concepts in case anyone else gets inspired by them.

>>322964

https://pastebin.com/Vw3at31e

Finished up the first idea. Tell me whacha think.

Here's a first draft of the prologue for my story I'm doing. If you have any criticism please give it to me so that I can improve it

https://pastebin.com/c6zz1f0k

>>323069

How about the paladin doesn'tgive up when he finds a wife but instead now has a vicious eternal struggle between his sense of duty and the love of his life?